Alicia Weight Gain Story (remake) Part 1
Added 2016-12-07 20:13:46 +0000 UTCIt's strange to draw them so slim since such a long time but here we go the first part! c:
Sorry for the wait! >.<
EDIT: Alicia should be saying "You've done this before, haven't you?" , I will chenge this, thanks to Xamrin! cx
How to english...
Comments
I love seeing you do this again with your updated style as it really shows how much you've grown as an artist, and it will be quite fun seeing Alicia continue to grow once more. Still, I almost wish there was some sort of establishing page to act as a setup for the story and give a little context for why Alicia is fattening up. Here, she's already started gaining with Amy buying her bags of fast food. I know it's your series, and you're allowed to go through it as you see fit, but I wouldn't mind this one having a few more pages than the original, just to flesh things out a little, and make Alicia's gain more gradual. Keep up the great wrok!
AnthroLoverJay
2017-01-06 04:17:45 +0000 UTCYou changed Amy's line in the FA version but you didn't change Alicia's.
Oliviamancer
2017-01-05 22:26:57 +0000 UTCThe words are a bit alike but the grammar is much different that's the problem :/
BigLoveAlicia
2017-01-01 17:36:24 +0000 UTC"Who knows?" is also kind of odd sounding given the context. You may have meant "Maybe." "Who know?" implies that she has no idea if she did it before which she would probably know. "Maybe." implies that she's ducking the question by being really vague. It comes down to context. That said your English isn't bad at all. It's probably just hard to learn when certain words or tones are necessary. Your FA profile says you're from Germany. I don't know German but I'm guessing since it's rooted in Latin that it's similar to English in many ways. I've even noticed some German words are extremely similar to English ones. I think with practice you can learn to fluently speak English.
Oliviamancer
2016-12-27 01:27:55 +0000 UTCShe seems a lil pudgier then her original first but still a good start :3
BlackheartHound
2016-12-09 20:27:21 +0000 UTCI'm more than willing to help as well.
Oliviamancer
2016-12-09 09:49:36 +0000 UTCI don't get to see them often, but your thin girls have really improved as well!
Onefoursix Tym
2016-12-09 03:30:03 +0000 UTCIf you have any hiccups with dialogue in the future, I'd be glad to be your editor via notes back and forth on FA
MatsuoTanuki
2016-12-08 23:48:28 +0000 UTCI can not wait to see what will happen ^^
vamoris
2016-12-08 23:20:18 +0000 UTCcx I will do my best! c:
BigLoveAlicia
2016-12-08 22:46:40 +0000 UTCThank you c:
BigLoveAlicia
2016-12-08 22:46:19 +0000 UTCThank you so much! ;3
BigLoveAlicia
2016-12-08 22:45:53 +0000 UTCYes this is the first project! c:
BigLoveAlicia
2016-12-08 22:44:54 +0000 UTCYeah, thanks to my lovely supporters! ;3
BigLoveAlicia
2016-12-08 22:35:57 +0000 UTCI will edit it when I upload it at fA if this is ok (I don't know how to edit/reupload it here), thank you for the help! :)
BigLoveAlicia
2016-12-08 17:37:56 +0000 UTC"You did this more often?" I'm thinking you meant something like "You've done this before, haven't you?" I'm just speculating by the context. Either way this is fantastic so far!
Oliviamancer
2016-12-08 06:51:07 +0000 UTCFinally got the chance to do it huh? Seems like a good series to come
Guy
2016-12-08 05:03:17 +0000 UTCNow that I'm home and have nothing more pressing to do, time for a proper review: It is indeed a bit surreal seeing Alicia skinny again, but that's what we're here for.~ Lovely work on the background, especially that rug and plant. And I love the fact you've decided to add dialogue, and hope you will continue to do so as the series goes on.
MatsuoTanuki
2016-12-08 00:09:38 +0000 UTCWell, regardless of her size, she's still so pretty. As is her friend there.
David Harder
2016-12-07 23:15:39 +0000 UTCOh remake after four or five year after the orignal ?
vamoris
2016-12-07 22:20:33 +0000 UTCAnd so it begins! :D
MatsuoTanuki
2016-12-07 22:05:38 +0000 UTCThis is going to be fantastic! Can't wait!
OaoseOreo
2016-12-07 22:05:31 +0000 UTC
