Outrun - Chapter 364
Added 2026-02-02 23:04:01 +0000 UTCComments
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kreiverin
2026-02-03 16:55:55 +0000 UTC"That didn’t mean it wasn’t hear though." -> "it wasn't here" "I didn’t Ling on that" -> "I didn't linger" "The sparks didn’t last long as even those were devoured by the." -> "by the acid."? It seems like the attack was timed just right to force them into the command room, and while it might be reinforced and defensible, the same would make it difficult to leave. Especially if they can't control the door from the inside. But maybe I'm just paranoid.
Arkus86
2026-02-03 06:27:19 +0000 UTCI’ll might go back and change the scene.
Lost Rain
2026-02-03 02:53:17 +0000 UTCShe does hear most of them. Shiros used phone calls to cover it up a couple time. In the factory though, there’s a lot of noise pollution.
Lost Rain
2026-02-03 02:52:34 +0000 UTCOn my rewrite for the books, I plan on bringing out CJ specifically more often. He’ll be a bit more present throughout. It should be a bit more of a shock then.
Lost Rain
2026-02-03 02:51:16 +0000 UTCThat didn’t mean it wasn’t hear though. Should be here.
Amelia
2026-02-03 02:49:19 +0000 UTCDo the knights not have communication? Like, do Hope and Garrick not know that the other squads are struggling? Seems like something they'd talk about, and that would effect their moods, and Shiro wouldnt have to find out from Luna. Dismemberment and robot crab attacks just seem walkie talkie worthy.
Gardor
2026-02-03 01:18:06 +0000 UTCI think ya may wanna go back and humanize/personify CJ a bit more in previous chapters, it really doesnt seem like Shiro would shout his name and then worry about "him coming back". He's mostly just seemed like a tool or vehicle, tbh im not sure if he's had a "he" pronoun or a nickname this entire time. Or change this chapter, i guess, but i like her caring about the robo doggy.
Gardor
2026-02-03 01:15:57 +0000 UTCHope tensed up behind me. “You have a cyberaudio suite too, Zuku?” -> this has been something ive been thinking about as she has conversations with Luna, i know Shiro is trying to be sneaky (covering her mouth, etc) and to subvocalize, but i feel like Hope should be able to hear at least Shiro's side of the conversation.
Gardor
2026-02-03 01:14:08 +0000 UTC
