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Predators of Denali - Page 32 [sketch]
Added 2019-06-13 04:45:27 +0000 UTCEdit: scome of the page was cut off, oddly. Corrected, should look/flow better.
This page has Tala trying to recover from her slip of the tongue. The dialogue here is just paraphrasing, I want her to finally muster up the resolve to take charge of her situation for once. The whole comic til now she's been pretty small and passive, but that's very 2-dimensional. I know this comic isn't jumping straight into the porn like my previous ones, lol. Trust me I want to get there too! But I gotta see if I can make some believable, relatable character development. I think buildup and pacing is my practice in this comic, since it'll be vitally important when I get into the primary scifi comic stuff likely next year. Enjoy, I hope!
Comments
I call it Art! :P
S1l3nc3r1nf1n8
2019-06-15 01:50:21 +0000 UTCA good and careful buildup makes the porn even better! Keep at it.
Diamondstorm
2019-06-13 22:15:02 +0000 UTCI'm honestly adoring the plot and character development. Smut's nice, don't get me wrong, but I love your characters for their stories and personality. You do that well with the pacing of this comic and even the character designs. It's nice that I can look at Tala and get a general feel for her personality and that's a feat in my opinion. Don't ever feel too weird about story driven stuff, cause seeing development even in little stuff like this page is really valuable. It brings your characters to life instead of making them things to lewd. Bit of a mouthful and kinda off topic soo.. Tl;dr I'm really enjoying this comic
Anonymous Trashbag
2019-06-13 21:31:07 +0000 UTCI'm pretty sure she's not gonna marry him, they just met and that wouldn't make any sense. Also you mean her pack the Telida pack.
Antoine Davis
2019-06-13 13:16:20 +0000 UTCI fully support plot, character development and all that good stuff. :D
Silvador
2019-06-13 13:04:11 +0000 UTCGo get 'im tala
Iselwyr
2019-06-13 12:12:46 +0000 UTCSlow burn is good, Fluff. I'm really liking the world you're building here with Predators. The Sci-fi one sounds interesting too. Can't wait!
Foxovh
2019-06-13 08:14:10 +0000 UTCI meant the scifi comic in general. Also fixed the page, thanks for pointing it out!
FluffKevlar
2019-06-13 07:57:51 +0000 UTCI dont have a name for the whole thing yet but yeah that story, big one!
FluffKevlar
2019-06-13 07:57:00 +0000 UTCWAIT NYTRO/ARA YEEESSS
KCDodger
2019-06-13 06:15:18 +0000 UTCMy God, taking time to tell a story. You are a monster. /s
The14th
2019-06-13 05:46:24 +0000 UTCLove it so far
UmberFox
2019-06-13 05:20:27 +0000 UTCIt feels like you're really doing a good job developing Tala's feelings here Fluff, although it's kiiiiinda hard to tell what's going on since a chunk of the upper right speech bubble is cut off. But seriously, take your time and develop as much as you feel you should, don't feel pressured to jump into porn if you want to develop or show more, you're doing great so far! Also when you say you're going to work on the primary scifi comic, when you say Nyt/ARA, do you mean just developing them or that you're actually planning on pairing Nytro and ARA?
ExtremistLine
2019-06-13 05:15:03 +0000 UTCI feel like she should reference hunting deer or caribou before sheep lol But this is cute! I'm excited to see timid little Tala taking charge and acting on what *she* wants instead of being told what to do. Even Bae'li had to encourage her to experiment, which is great, but I'm glad she's gonna take the initiative.
Volpethrope
2019-06-13 04:53:51 +0000 UTCSo far this looks great, also i really like that you're giving them development and also i like that Tala is starting to taking charge of the situation. I also that your buildup/pacing is great so far. But yeah, this page looks great so far, also i have some questions. Will Tala's backstory be revealed soon, like her parents, childhood, how she got into the Telida pack or if she was born there, where her parents are now? Also, would Bailey reveal what she said about why she doesn't want to get married? Cause it was mentioned briefly in past pages. But yeah, this looks pretty good so far, i really like that you're giving them believable, relatable character development. But yeah, see you in the finished page.
Antoine Davis
2019-06-13 04:47:03 +0000 UTC
