Predators of Denali - Page 14 Sketch
Added 2018-03-28 14:00:01 +0000 UTCBeen a month! After taking a switch-course for that mini-comic, I'm working on the next few pages of PoD kind of simultaneously, hence the slightly less-frequent updates atm. I want to make sure these few pages flow nicely, and spending more time on the sketch and dialogue phases make me much more comfortable and confident that it's convincing, enjoyable, and supportive of the actions-to-come.
Let me know what you think of the page and comic! I always try to tackle issues as-they-come or make sure that it's a fun read. We're almost at the start of serious goodness, so, while I'm excited to get to it, I don't want the pacing to go all to heck, or for stuff to sound cheesy. Enjoy! Will be finishing this up before month's end.
Comments
I'm enjoying the pace. It feels like it has a lot more room to breathe than the first comic did, which is a nice difference. I see you're using it to flesh out the characters, both of whom are very likable.
Not Telling
2018-03-30 03:46:57 +0000 UTCYeah thats always a little weird to preview in sketch form. Thanks though!
FluffKevlar
2018-03-29 01:58:45 +0000 UTCTala is My favorite of fluffs characters. <3 She is just tooooo cute!!!!!!!
The Friendly Deathclaw
2018-03-29 00:38:13 +0000 UTCMe too.
Antoine Davis
2018-03-28 18:37:36 +0000 UTCThe more i see of Tala, the more i fall in love with her character, shes simply adorable
shadowstarthe1st
2018-03-28 18:02:19 +0000 UTCI'll try to rewrite it in case you wanted to know what it said. Aw, poor Tala and her low self-esteem. It seems like she wants a more meaningful relationship that is based on love. Additionally, I love how this comic is richer in character development and story. I know the point of porn is to jack the bean-stock, but I love romantic and intimate stories. However, I found it hard to follow the dialog, though it might be me. I reread the first panel a few time to understand it. Nevertheless, I enjoyed the story and can't wait for more. Keep being awesome Fluffy and know that you help me feel better!
Kenith Fox
2018-03-28 16:32:17 +0000 UTCThe character building here is really nice and I love how Tala is so far! It's just kinda hard to tell who's saying what in sketch form.
ExtremistLine
2018-03-28 16:11:35 +0000 UTCIt seems that my old comment is gone, don't know why. Long story short, It is a good read.
Kenith Fox
2018-03-28 16:07:51 +0000 UTCThe comic is fantastic so far, what i recommend is to have story and characters first and (somewhat) fan service last, which you're doing well so far.
Antoine Davis
2018-03-28 15:49:06 +0000 UTCNah, i wouldn't say that she'd be like 'that' after the climb, but would learn how to fend for herself and others.
Antoine Davis
2018-03-28 14:35:30 +0000 UTCCool, so far things look alright. Also some more backstory is pretty cool and some facts. Also, i like how you give Tala hobbies in which building her character more.
Antoine Davis
2018-03-28 14:26:34 +0000 UTCmaybe Tala will change her hobbys after this trip is over ;3
Skeleton Man
2018-03-28 14:06:16 +0000 UTC
