Chapter 133: The Aiden Theory
Added 2025-12-09 15:00:36 +0000 UTCComments
This chapter is perfect it's great to meet Nefertari.
Fdrugc
2026-01-08 20:26:53 +0000 UTCIt's downtime that still moved the plot. Even if it didn't, it's still fun and interesting interactions that only add to the characters.
Alanna Fry
2025-12-10 20:46:54 +0000 UTCWhen you put it like that it has been a lot of drama recently, hasn't it? Maybe a nice chill dinner is just what we need to relax... Surely nothing would go wrong, right? Thanks for the feedback, and thanks for reading! <3
Keene
2025-12-10 17:19:31 +0000 UTCNoted! Character ineractions are one of my strengths, I think, glad to see it's coming across well! Thanks for the feedback, and thanks for reading! ^.^
Keene
2025-12-10 17:18:34 +0000 UTCThanks for reading! ^.^
Keene
2025-12-10 17:17:42 +0000 UTCNoted! Happy to hear it's still coming across well! Thanks for the feedback, and thanks for reading! <3
Keene
2025-12-10 17:17:34 +0000 UTCMmm, I can see how having a breather helps the pacing yeah ^.^ Although knowing Amelia it won't be for long xd Thanks for the feedback, and thanks for reading! <3
Keene
2025-12-10 17:16:46 +0000 UTCNoted! Thanks for the feedback, and thanks for reading! <3
Keene
2025-12-10 17:16:08 +0000 UTCPossibly! Oshiro already hinted that the Third-Word works differently to the other two, so if the Primordial Words are a real thing, I imagine they might function under different rulesets compared to what normal Speakers are used to! Nice to see you're already liking Nefertari! Thanks for reading! <3
Keene
2025-12-10 17:15:53 +0000 UTCI mean we went from stealing a safe from a gambling den to a chase scene to getting into a fight and chopping like 10 people's arms off to Serena getting zapped by her ship to this scene. I think a chapter that was them just talking and riffing off each other was perfectly fine. Also, sorry Amelia, but I think that Aiden is just a drunk.
Eridor
2025-12-09 22:04:14 +0000 UTCToo many in a row could get tedious but these sorts of entertaining character interactions are one of my favorite parts of your writing. Thanks for the chapter!
a.
2025-12-09 21:29:32 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter
bladepony games
2025-12-09 19:49:01 +0000 UTCNever felt that the chapter was slow, more along the lines of adding both the world building and fleshing out a character. You got the knack too making such endeavors entertaining.
Puppy Piranha Forever
2025-12-09 19:18:19 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter !!! I don't feel like a long chapter just to cross a street is a problem, because that's not really the only thing that happenend here : The Aiden theory, bits of humour, inner thoughts about the game... that quickly add up to the number of words. So no worry ^^ Plus, a chapter a little slower is always good to have reader breathe a little.
Freex Moreau
2025-12-09 19:07:54 +0000 UTCWhen the lwnght is to improve the characters or the world setting its accually good for the story, and thanks for the chapter
Tomáš Burcal
2025-12-09 17:10:18 +0000 UTCSo there's Primordial Words? With 1st, 2nd, 3rd and then Primordial? That's interesting. I already look forward to the 3rd Word in action, although that'll probably take a bit :) Also, I already like Menes wive as a character
Bast
2025-12-09 16:15:48 +0000 UTCOkay, double checking on the gang interlude, no, there wasn't anything explicit about going higher up the chain, just a bit about checking if Sakina's girls interacted with the group or not.
Onean
2025-12-09 16:09:07 +0000 UTCI've said it in other fics before, but characterization and character interactions are just as important as moving the story along. A lot of the time, most of the time, in fact, both things can and should be done at once. (I feel like you did here, even, but I'll mention that later.) However, it's just as important for one to take the backseat for the other here and there. It lets you and us focus on what being prioritized without getting distracted. For some examples: The display of Serena continuing to grow personally, as I don't think she was the type of person at the beginning of the story to thank Amelia like she did here. Obviously there's the speculation on Aiden's demeanor as the big focus, which may or may not be true. However, I may be misremembering but while we've heard a vague reference about Aiden hitting on Serena, I don't think we ever learned that it was due to him mistaking her for her sister. Nefertari, despite being a bit of a hardass when we saw her last, actually has quite the soft spot for Menes and their children, making her way more relatable. And then there's the line about Madam Sakina that shouldn't be skipped over, I'd think. Now, to what I mentioned about you also writing for the story. While in the moment not much happened, you set up the potential for a bunch of stuff in the future. The COUNCIL won't touch a Sayyid's family, but it wasn't the Council that had the fragment. The gang tried to get it back first, but when they couldn't I believe there was mention of them trying something else (I'm using the phone app so I can't go and check myself right now, unfortunately), followed by the Council showing up. Is the gang going to make another attempt, or was the timing of the events actually a coincidence? Even if the gang isn't in the pocket of someone on the Council, the fracas Serena and Menes got into wasn't exactly discrete so the gang may show up anyways. Establishing a bit more friction between Intelligence and the Vengeance's crew, widening ever so slightly more the room for something to happen there. I also think this is the first we've heard that Fourth-Words probably aren't a thing, but it's definitely the first we've heard of Primordial Words, and that's a fun box to open and ponder. Are they all a red herring, will they pay off, or will it be a mix of the two? It's fun to wonder.
Onean
2025-12-09 16:00:02 +0000 UTC
