Another status update
Added 2022-12-14 14:17:59 +0000 UTCHello everyone! Just a quick note that the update will be out soon, likely by the end of the week. I don't want to provide a timeline until I know for sure.
One thing I've been tinkering with as I wait for some reworked images...
A bit of history: When I set out on this journey, my intent was for Part One to be all David content. As development progressed, I realized that only showing David scenes makes the story a bit of a boring slog. I felt it necessary to create intrigue and have the reader learn a bit about Anna, so that's why I featured Chris in a lot of scenes.
Now that I'm working through Part Two, these Chris/Anna scenes now feel bulky. As you know, Part One is a long, slow burn, and that will be the same for Part Two as we get to know Anna... when we have these same Chris/Anna scenes in both, it just feels too bloated.
I've been tinkering with it, but now I'm strongly considering "hiding" most of the heavy Chris/Anna scenes from Part One and featuring them in Part Two with Anna's perspective instead, so that the reader only experiences it one time. I would still feature them on some level so that you know something is going on, but I just wouldn't show the whole scene like I've done in Part One. Call it "mystery" ntr (similar to the scene Thursday morning when David leaves Chris at the house with Anna).
The downside to this is for new readers. Will it simply be too boring for a new reader to go through Part One without the "spicy" texting scenes between Chris/Anna?
An interesting upside to doing this is - I can enable the reader to have the option for Anna to send the naughty pics to Chris or not. If I only feature this scene in Part Two, I can do this. Many readers have complained they didn't have the option.
Anyways, please provide feedback if you like or dislike this tweak to Part One. The good news is - if I make the change and it doesn't feel right - I can always change it back!
Comments
How to get Anna to feel ashamed by sending them? Dumb Hot Cunfusing? Is the choices on anna week
Hentaifuta
2022-12-18 23:02:21 +0000 UTCyes it´s possible
RMA
2022-12-17 19:39:58 +0000 UTCHow to save the marriage? if that's even possible in the game
Hentaifuta
2022-12-17 15:36:36 +0000 UTCThanks for all of your feedback. You all are very smart people… your feedback isn’t typical message board garbage, instead you have well thought-out responses that help me. Based on your comments, I’m going to step away from making any tweaks to Part One. My focus should be on Part Two anyways! Yes I know people hate that Anna sent pics without the reader having a choice, but I think people should see the scene from Anna’s POV before passing ultimate judgment. The good news is you won’t have to wait much longer to see it!
Mr. Palmer
2022-12-15 04:25:44 +0000 UTCCompletely agree with you on the latter part about Anna sending pictures.
Sun Elune
2022-12-15 02:55:48 +0000 UTCwhat you have not it really don't seem not like it going to be save just base on Anna talking about their sex life too other people like chris
PhantomDeathPhoenix
2022-12-15 02:25:52 +0000 UTCi agree too what he/she is saying but i too want to save their marriage but what
PhantomDeathPhoenix
2022-12-15 02:22:23 +0000 UTCYou’ve probably already considered this but another possible way to structure this story was put together the same playable day of Anna and David before moving on. For example, we would get the entire Monday of both characters followed by the entire Tuesday etc. I know that its far too late to do that now but as for people playing the story, we would feel like its progressing instead of going all the way back to the first week. Also, this would probably mean double the wait in release time, so instead of an update roughly every month, it would be two months instead. I personally wouldn’t have minded this but other people would. As for whether we should be given the option to send Chris those pictures or not, it depends on what kind of story you want to tell here. By having Anna press send without a choice that tells me, its needed to set up the story later on. You’ve stated from the very beginning that this is going to be a very kinetic visual novel, meaning the characters will do certain things because you the author/developer want them to because that’s the story you want to tell. This isn’t one where we are going to have multiple branching paths with multiple locked scenes to discover by making different choices. Your explanation as to why Anna sent those pictures to Chris I buy, however, if you want to change it now to where we can have the option to not send it then I’m okay too as long as you feel it doesn’t compromise what you have planned in the future.
Avid Reader
2022-12-14 19:20:26 +0000 UTCgood because i want to save their marriage
Hentaifuta
2022-12-14 19:03:26 +0000 UTCI would like the opportunity to stop or edit the pictures which Anna sends to Chris and agree with previous comments that she falls into the trap too early in the story. Please keep up the good work and find the drama entertaining and thought provoking.
Rex Dollinger
2022-12-14 18:16:51 +0000 UTCAlso could Anna send something funny to Chris like a optional bbc pic or naked fat lady, when he keeps nagging her to send him more pics, that would be funny and should stop him from nagging her for more
mike
2022-12-14 17:34:58 +0000 UTCI think your suggested changes could work but would much rather you continue to focus on advancing the story. Thanks!
Unknown10522
2022-12-14 16:16:42 +0000 UTCIn this type of netorare games there are always two points of view, and that implies the repetition of certain scenes. First the husband's point of view is played, and then the wife's point of view. With this second point of view there are two options: to repeat exactly the same scenes interspersed with the new scenes, in this case you simply press the Ctrl key in those scenes and the text passes in Renpy without further complication (this is how the vast majority of netorare games work); the other option, more complex, is not to simply repeat the scenes but to repeat them adding new elements, such as images, dialogues or thoughts. This forces you to repeat the scenes, but in my opinion it gives more depth to the game. That's what I like about this game, that new perspective. You don't have to be afraid of repeating conversations from another point of view. What I liked most about Anna is her thinking, her perspective on the same scenes and conversations I had already played with David and Chris. I think it would be a mistake to remove Chris's scenes from the first part, it would be a bland first part without content, it would be boring for someone who started to play. For me the approach of this second part is perfect as it is. If you also add the possibility of skipping conversations, it will be good for the impatient or Chris haters.
Adolfo
2022-12-14 16:04:18 +0000 UTCFirst of all, I really appreciate the frequent updates. Nothing worse than radio silence from a Dev. I am of the opinion that what we have seen so far works. It's just enough to whet our appetites and leaves us wanting more. I have played other VNs where we see little to nothing from what would be David's point of view and then in the second half we see what would be Anna's POV and I must say that I prefer your balanced approach. We all want to see Anna's POV and going through the first half in these types of game can be something of a slog. Slow burn is good but you don't want David's POV to be boring. If you can make Anna showing Chris the goods work with the narrative, then perhaps it could be included. I appreciate that some people might want that but as you say, it's a slow burn and my opinion is that her fall from grace should be gradual. I personally don't think that Anna would do something like that this early in the story but I could see her doing it further down the line (perhaps after the reveal of David' "affair" when she is pissed off at him?) My take on it is that she just likes the attention from Chris but her interactions with him are a necessary step in her fall from grace. This is just my opinion, and I appreciate that others may agree or disagree. I'm just one Patron. Whatever you decide to do, I look forward to seeing it. Keep up the good work!
Scoog
2022-12-14 15:40:01 +0000 UTCHate him too, how he’s a fake bestfriend, just uses him to get to his wife, as long as Anna has options to say yes or no to Chris or any others like Jake the snake I have no problems
mike
2022-12-14 15:26:18 +0000 UTCi hate chris wish she not fall his evil fake kind and not be slave his mind
sslovoe
2022-12-14 14:59:05 +0000 UTCEverything is good till now, it's already mystery for us that we keep wanting to know what will happen. We keep coming back to your patreon page to check whether is there any updates because it's too mystery and can't wait to know what will happen next. Thanks for the consideration for us! Appreciate your effort that you want this be good for us!
DO
2022-12-14 14:51:17 +0000 UTCAgreed. Chris and Anna interaction is the best part. There's no actual need to avoid that. It would be quite a shame to drop it off.
Sun Elune
2022-12-14 14:45:33 +0000 UTCTo be honest, I think (from what I've feeled during my play) the spicy text between Anna and Chris was just enough spicy to trigger the ticklish feeling about what could happen and it made me wanting to see more and more of how the situation evolve. And it was just enough spicy while not being too much revealing. I think the part one would probably have been to boring without it. And it's not like it's a shame to have seen them, it doesn't spoil all the even more spicy content to come (and even without Chris). I don't think it should be dropped from the part one for the new players
Ancestral
2022-12-14 14:40:44 +0000 UTC
