EAC Chapter 17
Added 2018-08-15 19:13:59 +0000 UTCBoy, this chapter did not want to end. Every time I thought it was over Amber or Maria would pull out something else fun to say or do. I'm very happy with it though, so I hope you all enjoy a double-sized chapter at 9,800 words. Things are definitely racing to the conclusion of the story though, so buckle in and enjoy!
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Comments
love it
Natasha
2018-08-22 21:52:36 +0000 UTCAnother thing I liked was how Maria has not been much impressed by Amber's acting ability and over the top demeanor. Yet, Amber is likely dong just that in her sudden fervor to capture Rebecca. Maria suddenly finding Amber's exposition a performance to be inspiring and to be proud of. And, again, Heather, the former risk taker Jade and the newly minted domme Maria almost becoming 'wind up soldiers' nearly identical to each other during Amber's inspiring military spiel was fun to read and demonstrated their similar 'root programming'. Good stuff!
larqven
2018-08-20 02:13:24 +0000 UTCThat ending with how she pulled off what she did (trying not to spoil it) was amazing :D I love you and your work so much Sammy. I'm also sorry I didn't have the courage to say anything to you at the convention.
Zelkova Tatl
2018-08-17 20:54:48 +0000 UTCI also have to say that I really liked Maria's opposition to Amber early in the chapter that turned towards admiration and devotion once she accepted her corruption. It also spelled out that Maria is a programmed slave as the other girls. There is a bit of a joke in that, in that Maria's crime was pretending to be captured and in fooling Amber's true slaves. Now, Maria is a slave, but believes that she is serving willingly. Another error: The truth forced it's [its] way out of her mouth. (page 26)
larqven
2018-08-17 20:14:42 +0000 UTCa long, hot chapter to enjoy for certain. I LOVE what you did with Maria!! That is fkn HOT!!! should have guessed that at least one of the girls was also a Domme. Can't all be submissive slaves..... Now for Rebecca!!
John
2018-08-16 17:39:38 +0000 UTCSammy I love you and your work ^-^
Zelkova Tatl
2018-08-16 17:15:22 +0000 UTCLike I'm not going to like a double sized chapter! Christmas in August! Spoilers This was a nice, drawn out, and rather natural story of corruption! As per usual, I'm not sure if Maria's will and choices were ever her own or we were witnessing a preprogrammed set of responses. Clearly, Maria's inner dominant self had been strengthened, and her 'goddess program' had been installed. Indeed, for all her early mantra of not being a slave, Maria responded to apparently blanket commands similarly as did Heather and Jade. With Heather's programmed responses to Maria, I'd actually had wondered if Maria was wearing a strap-on and had that knowledge suppressed, or to seem completely normal. It was all too appropriate that Maria should have an ersatz version of Amber's power for her to 'sell her soul' for. Plus, we see the obvious problem of deflation if slaves are just handed out, and Amber's motivation for her games. Maria gets a borrowed power, and Amber gets a borrowed experience as a voyeur? A new question arises with Amber's disappointment at Rebecca's capture and the effective end of the game. A solution might be that Rebecca becomes a 'programmed hero', who suddenly realizes there is a mind controller about, and opposes said mind controller when Amber gets bored? Well, it looks real bad for Rebecca, but being left alone for so long, who knows what she's accomplished? Rebecca was captured long before Maria fell into Amber's snare, after all, and some time has passed from then. There has been pretty good environmental and sensory depictions in this story. I particularly liked Jade and Maria with their nipples rubbing together, which makes sense as they are both smaller breasted. In a way, it might have been better to call more attention to that? Particularly as Maria might be the smallest breasted girl in the mansion now has pseudo breast powers, making her a bit of joke next to Amber? I certainly liked the idea of Maria's nipples so hard they hurt, and the idea finely pointed nipples on a small chest. Part of the fun for Amber might be seeing Maria having to fight through her pleasure and pain to use her new 'powers'? Plus, using small breasts to 'smother' a victim. Also, Maria with glasses or not!? Glasses would have gotten somewhat in the way of the breast encapsulation of the previous chapter. To say nothing of getting smeared to uselessness? A mind controller with glasses might have a slave by her side constantly cleaning them! LoL Maria went to a rim-job very quickly, she does have a dirty mind! Errors: chapter 17 "Well, I Didn't [didn’t] turn you into my slave. (page 8) Even though her mind was in tact [intact], (page 11) so wet and horny that she could barley [barely] contain herself. (page 17) and as Heather's tongued [tongue] entered her ass (page 42)
larqven
2018-08-16 00:48:38 +0000 UTC
