4/29/2017: It Runs in the Family Chapter 10
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The second and final part for Movie Night, in which Connie tries to be very creative and moves another step towards her goals. This chapter would wrap up what I'd consider as the first book of the series, so I have something to publish on Amazon, and to cap off the book I planned to write a flashback chapter for Gloria, highlighting more of what happened between her and her hypnotist teacher/secret lover Bridgette. If you guys are interested I can post that as the next chapter for May, unless you guys and girls would rather I go into the next story arc, which would involve Connie going to the mall with Tara and Jane, testing out just how far the sisters are willing to go to make her happy. Either way I hope you enjoy the latest chapter and comment below :)
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Hmm, running the math on the ages I clock Gloria as being a vigorous 78 years old. She had Michelle after she was married, when she was 41, which is why she's quite a bit older. Michelle is 37, though with her good looks easily passes for 30 or 32. Jane is 19, set to be 20 in the fall, and Michelle had her when she was 18. Tara and Connie are both 18 years old. Hope that chronology makes sense lol
Sammynona
2017-04-30 15:53:41 +0000 UTCGreat chapter! It is always one of the highlights of my week when I see a chapter in this story come out. I do think that a chapter about Gloria’s past would make a nice bookend for an Amazon release. My personal preference would be to see more of Connie’s antics for now, but I wouldn’t mind if we get a bit about Gloria’s past. One thing I’d note about this chapter is something that you do very well throughout the whole story. Connie can’t really fail too badly. If she slips up once seriously, it is the end of the scheme. However, you’re good at keeping the tension high. It always feels like she’s juggling fire, even if we’ve mostly seen lucky slip-ups like Michelle’s masturbation issue here. I also liked that Connie tested the waters with some unpalatable film choices, rather than jumping straight to porn. She’s smart, but not perfect. It is a bit surprising that Michelle would think that Gloria would be intolerant of masturbation or sex in general, since Gloria has been described as one to tell shocking stories. Of course, that might be a tendency she developed in her old age. I also wonder if this might be a by-product of Gloria’s other hypnosis experiments. If Michelle’s main sexual experiences were with Tara and Jane’s father, and he’s now a gap in her memory, maybe this has to do with how Michelle’s mind filled in the gaps. I think I would like to see the pace slowed down a bit. Not necessarily the pace of the storytelling, but the in-story timeline. Re-reading the story, it doesn’t even seem like a week has passed, and Connie has made some amazing progress. However, since Gloria is a bit suspicious now, it seems like a good time for Connie to lay low with further changes. I’d love to see the next chapter open up a few weeks later with some snippets of what’s been going on with the existing commands. She has Jade as her creative sex buddy, can masturbate openly, and since she’s the only one who can object to movie night choices anymore, I suspect it is going to be lesbian porn night from now own. (I still like the concept for the next chapter, so I’m just suggesting a bit of a time lapse and a few lines about how things are going before getting on to the meat of it). Unrelated to the other stuff. I’m a bit curious as to the age difference between Michelle and Gloria. Michelle is consistently described as a young mother, and Connie speculates that Michelle must have had Jane and Tara in her teens. Gloria however is usualy described as elderly, and I picture her as sort of a vigorous 70-75+.
Dorian Alton
2017-04-30 14:16:27 +0000 UTCI also would like to see the next story arc
Tim
2017-04-30 13:31:26 +0000 UTChonestly, I want the rest of the story arc. I'd love to hear about Gloria's story, but I'd personal pay to get it as an extra story, as opposed to getting it as the next chapter.
Stephen Williams
2017-04-30 07:02:04 +0000 UTCMy vote is for continuing with the next story arc.
Wof2
2017-04-30 05:30:25 +0000 UTCParticularly love the direction this is heading, and especially the visualisation of the family collared and leashed kneeling before her as her incestuous lesbian harem
Tim
2017-04-30 02:37:31 +0000 UTCLOVED the chapter!
Tim
2017-04-30 02:36:52 +0000 UTC
