AmongUs Story Part59 Color Progress
Added 2022-04-27 13:28:43 +0000 UTCI switched the page where Red is at the door with a last black page. That scene with Red will probably come later. I find it more interesting to see the door open. You, as a reader, could then think about what will happen next. I find it dramatic when a black page comes after White's attack, confusing and unsettling the readers.
What do you all think? Should I leave the original with Red? Or a whole dark side after White's attack?
Comments
Maybe♥
Chudraw
2022-04-27 21:50:44 +0000 UTCawww, don't say that hehe♥♥
Chudraw
2022-04-27 21:50:36 +0000 UTC*gasps* :o
Chudraw
2022-04-27 21:50:12 +0000 UTC*sniff sniff* huele a sangre
Alberto
2022-04-27 21:48:14 +0000 UTC: ( oh my goodness, that sounds like you go through a lot Miss Chudraw. Your doing outstanding work and I hope you take it easy. 🥺 We are willing to stay in suspense so you can focus on your health. 🫶 I am glad you like my input. I am sure there will be more times to keep me in suspense, like wondering what is going to happen to Red 😬🫣
Old Lady
2022-04-27 21:45:43 +0000 UTCohh that makes sense, thanks chu! and don’t worry lol, i just have a slow brain
Ranch
2022-04-27 20:50:20 +0000 UTCI’m really hoping Violet makes it out of this somehow ;-;
Dicerollball
2022-04-27 20:13:56 +0000 UTCThe person standing in Storage wasn't White. It was Gray. I should have made that clearer, sorry. As OldLady says, Black didn't make it through the door. It closed in front of his nose. But luckily, White got by in time. Otherwise, the two would have been in trouble - Violet would have pressed the emergency button.
Chudraw
2022-04-27 17:49:01 +0000 UTCThank you for your feedback. It means a lot to me! And thank you for the great idea at the end with violet's thoughts! As you say, I'll omit the Red Scene because it would be more interesting for the non-Patreons. I wish I could give you that feeling too, but I thought about it too late. I'm sorry. I'm currently suffering from a severe illness, so I have to take antibiotics. However, I always get tired of it.
Chudraw
2022-04-27 17:46:00 +0000 UTCThank you Miss Chudraw. Lol you are achieving your goals with your stories. : D
Old Lady
2022-04-27 17:35:34 +0000 UTCThank you♥ I understand your hatred. Many people can't stand gray, which I wanted to achieve with my story. There's always that one asshole you despise.
Chudraw
2022-04-27 17:32:10 +0000 UTCMy apologies. I didn't mean to offend and I literally hate Grey and was using more for anger and not fun. I will definitely will reflect my messages before I post them. I respect the opinions and feelings for others. 😥Sorry again. Going to remove that comment now.😓
Old Lady
2022-04-27 17:29:30 +0000 UTCI was thinking that too. It would be best if you didn't joke about such a horrible thing. :c
Chudraw
2022-04-27 17:23:58 +0000 UTCUsually I wouldn't comment as it's not my page, but please don't so lightly use rape comments like that. It's a wildly disgusting thing and shouldn't be used as a joke or a punishment.
Sakurawrs
2022-04-27 17:19:12 +0000 UTCProbably leave Red's scene out so the non-Patreons members can be on edge a little. Since I don't know the dialogue, maybe the last slide should have Violet dieing thought 🤔. Might add a touch of sadness and give the readers one last insight before he's gone. IDK what to do with a blank page, hence why I am not an artist 😅 I am sure your plan will be fantastic Miss Chudraw. I read your Instagram post. I hope you get well soon! An antibiotic that makes you sick!? I hope it a lack of tolerance and not a heavy medicine. Take it easy and we hope you have a speedy recovery Miss Chudraw 🥺!
Old Lady
2022-04-27 16:53:01 +0000 UTCBlack sabotage the door shut, but Violet got through the door before it closes. Leaving Black on the other side. Witch is why White teleported to stop Violet. Probably smelled Black's blood and knew he was in trouble... probably,🤔
Old Lady
2022-04-27 16:39:12 +0000 UTCR.I.P. Violet. A lot of us wish it was Grey and not you who got slayed. ☹️😢 Violet was a lucky one to get away from Black, but I think it's an honor to be taken down by White. 👏👍
Old Lady
2022-04-27 16:36:28 +0000 UTCwhat, white? i thought black was the one chasing violet 🤔 i know we saw white’s legs as black was chasing violet, but where did black go LOL
Ranch
2022-04-27 16:33:03 +0000 UTC♥
Chudraw
2022-04-27 15:43:32 +0000 UTCPoor Violet 😭 baby 🤲🏼
Roachbaby
2022-04-27 13:49:14 +0000 UTC
