Mob Sorcery Delay
Added 2024-10-29 10:23:55 +0000 UTCSo, based on reactions to the last two chapters I'm delaying updates to Mob Sorcery 3 for 4-6 days (maybe a full week). I expect to push the book back until the end of November or start of December, too. Having to do a bunch of edits because everyone's gotten confused and people appear to dislike Anzu has caused me to lose momentum in the home stretch and I've lost a lot of my motivation, tbh. People will probably get upset about this update, as I'm not supposed to be negative, but it's been a tiring week.
It's pretty clear that nobody has any idea what's going on. I figured the plot was reasonably straightforward and threw in some extra details to try to throw people off, but instead everyone has just latched onto the red herrings and assumed anything that doesn't gel with those is bad writing (e.g. the cartel attack is bad writing even though the characters literally tell you why it happened, or the Houou characters are morons). It's especially tiring given the leeway given to other books in the genre.
I wanted to avoid making a bunch of sweeping changes to Mob 3, because I know it will make people mad and they'll quit Patreon, but I basically have to dumb down all mystery elements. Anzu's chapter will also get a rewrite because the reactions were just all over the place, and part of that is moderating her character.
The fact that I can't have aggressive harem members (including prospective ones) without causing issues has become tiring. I find it boring writing the generic archetypes that are so popular elsewhere, but I'm just tired. This was supposed to be an easy book and has instead triggered the same feelings of burnout I was trying to leave behind after Spellblade.
Unfortunately, not a happy post. I'm tired and feel like I've spent a week trying to work out if I need to throw half the book out.
Comments
It sucks that crappy critics are burning you out. I love your writing amd your approach to the genre. Hope you dont switch up or dumb the story down.
Cory Orr
2024-11-15 15:15:46 +0000 UTCI've been enjoying the chapters. Shame that some didn't like aggressive harem members, but I thought it was a nice change of pace.
Steven Allen
2024-11-04 00:02:16 +0000 UTCAs for me, I love what you are doing. I don’t comment too much but that’s because you’re doing great! Don’t listen to the doubters and follow your instincts. You haave proven yourself many times before
Alex Lindsay
2024-11-02 01:14:25 +0000 UTCBeen really enjoying it, i dont read the comments but been a fan of book 3 so far
Scipio
2024-10-30 23:46:33 +0000 UTC@tecally Ah I didn't know the ONLY definition of "aggressive" is violent murder. I will now forever call psychopaths and yandere characters "aggressive" from now on. He isn't a psychopath he is just "Aggressive" SMH, maybe I should cancel my sub here, I seem to have dropped into a community that water downs psychopath behavior as "Aggressive" Words matter. Would you Describe the mystic foxs from book 2 as "aggressive" as well? Killing cops and civilians just because they can? If the character is like them shouldn't they be hated? If one group murders people foe no reason is bad in book 2, why should ot be any different in book 3? Shouldn't morality remain constant between the books? Yes the "creator" fucked up its not published, he can go back and fix it. Being scared he will lose patron members should be the least of his worries. When he can loss the rest of his audience as a whole. He has already created a unpopular character. He either needs to roll with it, or rewrite it, and risk the wrath of his supporters And your the one that claimed some meaning to "harem" which obviously didn't fit. There are plenty of harem stories that have violent characters. In them, look up yandere characters, in all the flavors and colors. There is one in William d Arand super sales of super heros, where a Harem member repeatedly kills a clone of thr MC lover that sleeps with thr MC. Off screen. Hinting at very gruesome things being done. Long before said character ever gets intimate. Is that considered "aggressive" enough? If we are just talking about violence in a book where violence is normalized. The "Harem" doesn't need to factor into it at all.
patrick ford
2024-10-30 23:45:00 +0000 UTC@Crit happens No as a personality type. No sex required. God there is things other than sex in the book. SMH. As for lethal violence, yea being a murder hobo is bad, and general not well received by anyone, other than other murder hobos. What a shock. Maybe it's due to the subconscious recognition of a psychopath, something we all subconsciously condem.
patrick ford
2024-10-30 23:41:34 +0000 UTCShe definitely seems like the type to do that.
Tecally
2024-10-30 22:49:07 +0000 UTC@patrick ford no one is talking about how aggressive they are when it comes to relationships. If it was about how aggressive she was towards a relationship, which hasn't even happened yet, no one would care. As Pola has been the most aggressive in terms of that right now. Vince also wasn't dense or unaware of Nina's interest in him, he was very much aware but ignored it because as was explained in the first book, he didn't want to fuck up there existing relationship. What the hell do you mean Nicki's the only one to have anything close to a date? He's been on a date with Pola and Nina at least once.
Tecally
2024-10-30 22:44:15 +0000 UTCOh my mistake. But still that brings up a valid point. Like Anzu will let Vince take a picture of both her nipples. And as a prank she'll send it to Momo. Well either that or she'll make sure her sister walks in on her having sex with Vince.
J
2024-10-30 22:41:44 +0000 UTCThat was probably Momo actually, considering how she reacts to sexual content. Even if it was Anzu who had the nipslip, she doesn't seem to care about that sort of stuff. It's even stated in the last chapter that Momo was the one upset by it.
Tecally
2024-10-30 22:36:32 +0000 UTC@ faketony As a person who has read harem 2002 An aggressive character push the main character in a direction. Let's use mob sorcery characters as examples Fia is a great of a non aggressive character. She likes him, but isn't pushing a relationship onto him Pola is a great example of an aggressive character both inside and outside of a relationship Nina is a great example of a character switching from passive to aggressive, living with the black hole dense dude for years until her feelings for him are in jeopardy Nicki is the only one out of the cast that has gotten anything close to a date with MC. And is more the passive aggressive type
patrick ford
2024-10-30 22:35:23 +0000 UTCI just remembered something that is bound to be great for content. That Anzu for all her modeling had a "nip slip" and pictures of it were taken. She's practically destroyed all the photos but Vince actually has a copy of it. I'm left to wonder if Anzu is going to crush Vince quite literally over it. Or if she's going to just show both of the goods and let Vince take a picture/play with them. It would make for a few entertaining pages.
J
2024-10-30 22:15:50 +0000 UTC@Patrick what is your definition of aggressive here? Sounds to me you are defining it as sexually aggressive. KD was referring to Anzu's nonchalant view/use of lethal violence, not a sexually aggressive nature (as far as we know).
Crit Happens
2024-10-30 22:12:59 +0000 UTCI own both your books and audio books not to mention listening to your spellsword books, and neural wraith So "mate" as someone who has read your books. Don't throw shade. Discord brigade? Really mate? Neural writh is crawling with aggressive women Yea Yandere characters are always divisive. Want me to name all your aggressive female characters? Your one yandere character you have is Artemis, but even then it's softened because it's an mentality warped version of one of thr most beloved characters in the series.
patrick ford
2024-10-30 21:41:22 +0000 UTC@FakeTony By aggressive I assume it's the level of violence she causally does and is unfazed by. This is haremlit so the assumption that every female character is interested in the MC is normal, even if it doesn't happen all the time. And Anzu is definitely not some random background character. Those don't tend to get a dedicated chapter and are playing important parts in the plot.
Tecally
2024-10-30 21:17:09 +0000 UTCThere's a stark difference between Nina, Pola and Anzu. I doubt Nina and Pola would be so nonchalant about ripping someone's tails and spine out. Nina and Pola would definitely be disturbed by it. Edit: I also think K.D. handles mysteries just fine and is one of the best at it in the genre.
Tecally
2024-10-30 21:12:48 +0000 UTCOn a larger point, as someone who has read Harem since 2016-2018 wtf is an aggressive character, and why are people so concerned about it? Isn't it just a personality trait that we see in people normally? And why are we trying to balance it? Believable life doesn't fit in such a defined box? We're here to read stories of new adventures not rehashing the same things from other books. Also, why are we assuming every demi-human is going to have sex with Vince? That has never happened in other series nor do those characters count as anything more than background characters and thus lack a hypothetical "aggressive" trait or more substantive personality, so what are we saying by them being counted as "aggressive"?
FakeTony
2024-10-30 20:23:06 +0000 UTCMate, I can see you literally just joined the Patreon and have no clue what you're even talking about. Is this part of some Discord brigade? EDIT: People can stop engaging with the troll now, please.
K.D. Robertson
2024-10-30 19:22:10 +0000 UTCGoing to say this don't you already have 2 agressive harem members? Nina and Pola. With a potential of Alyssa added in so that's 3. Not let's add in every wolf girl enforcer and every demi human at the fast food place that wants to jump him. So you wanted to add another one? Maybe it's the reader having a burnout on aggressive characters. Which apparently to you didn't exist to this point. As for your comment about "other authors get a by" is false. It's just the other authors ignore it and wrote what they want despite the outrage. You talk about red herrings and the like then get annoyed when someone you know is talking stright gets ignored. Yes you as "word of God" knows who is lying and not lying the reader does not. We can't read your future plans. I like your books been great listening to them. But I think you need to "jump sides" and look at the problem from the readers perspective. Spend time reading other works to see how they handle mysteries.
patrick ford
2024-10-30 19:09:33 +0000 UTCIf it really happens that way. Is the car going to be parked or will somebody be driving it as they do it?
J
2024-10-30 16:38:08 +0000 UTCI ended up writing more than I thought but the tldr is: I love your books please have fun writing them and spicing things up with uncommon events and characters! I feel like you have and should be in a position where you can mix what you want to write inside your book. I haven't read what is on your patreon as I don't want to spoil me but if you want more mistery in your books go for it. What I like in your books is ofentimes the complex development and political aspects of the worlds. I grew bored of stories that are first person and span one or two days and despite that you hooked me still with Mob and Sorcery. I really like a light novel called "Classroom of the elites" where the plot is often shown only at the end of the book and you don't understand what's happening through the book and with a main character that is emotionless and could do anything to reach its goal he manages to predicts things and influence the outcome from the shadows. You know, there are some stories like "Tower of God" where everyone hates on a character called "Rachel" because well she's simply awful, but she's still perhaps the favorite character of the author. And thus he keeps going with his story and people keep following and the constant debate is in the end more good than bad press. If someone don't like a character in a book it doesn't mean that it is bad writing! If it makes the reader feel emotions being sadness, joy, smugness or hatred I think instead it is a well written character. I like different characters and women, and you've come to become my favorite author, I even bought some of your books even though I read them online. I sincerely hope you keep your drive and keep enjoying what you write because until now I can feel the passion in your writing.
Ant
2024-10-30 10:58:27 +0000 UTCI really like what is going on! I would just say keep going forward and the aggressive archetype is actually pretty interesting as written in the Anzu chapter. I like not fully knowing what is going on but having lots of ideas. I really like what is happening in the book right now :)
LawBear2005
2024-10-30 05:34:48 +0000 UTC👍 this is honestly what I initially thought were the story was going to go
Oran Dawson
2024-10-30 02:54:14 +0000 UTCI'm just happy to see where it goes. I've not been disappointed with any of your series yet! Not to mention if momo and anzu are perspective harem members that's exciting!
Kyle
2024-10-30 02:51:38 +0000 UTCSorry you're feeling down. I've really enjoyed the story so far.
Josh Huddleston
2024-10-30 00:38:08 +0000 UTCI believe what J is referring to is Fia's advance earlier on. I wouldn't call that timid, but rather playing dumb for reasons that haven't been elaborated on yet but I am sure will be prior to her getting railed in the back seat of her car as Nina predicts.
Crit Happens
2024-10-29 23:39:57 +0000 UTCYou do you, haven’t even read the chapters yet. Just joined to show support. You don’t need to feel pressured just because some people dislike where you are going with the book. It’s your art. Do what you want and give us something new and interesting.
Ben
2024-10-29 22:48:34 +0000 UTCI'm writing in support of Anzu, I'm a huge fan of the trickster fox archetype and I've been really enjoying the way things are going. Sorry that those of us who really like your take on things have been less vocal than the haters, I promise the large majority of us are huge fans of what you're up to in this book!
Seristine
2024-10-29 22:26:12 +0000 UTCDon’t change Do want you want it’s your story No one else’s
Zach
2024-10-29 20:27:37 +0000 UTCYou are a great writer. It’s your book, write your vision. Can’t please everyone. Particular when it’s comes to harems and to fluff.
Shakepshere
2024-10-29 19:43:53 +0000 UTCMy sentiments exactly. Anzu and all the others need to have a personality fitting their roles. If that means she, that she in her role as clan guardian. eliminates threats to her clan and has her own agenda, thats fine with me, heck that's life. I think in it was a good chapter for the introduction of the twins and bringing some light into things.
HeadCrash
2024-10-29 19:22:03 +0000 UTCI do have an idea for how this could work out. In the end the heist goes south because Mei plans a double cross but how better for Anzu to prove herself by coming to Vinces rescue? And book 4 could be about getting rid of the bad elements of Houou with Anzu and Momo replacing them.
J
2024-10-29 18:45:08 +0000 UTCWell I meant he's being timid to accept advances from others. And I fully expect there to be a chapter where Anzu does tell all in the end.
J
2024-10-29 18:25:02 +0000 UTCSorry to hear that. I was enjoying it so far. I should probably comment nore often instead of just silently devouring the books. Do what you need to!
Nick Brakhage
2024-10-29 17:45:21 +0000 UTCI’m adding my vote for fine like it is. I didn’t see anything wrong with it, so didn’t feel like I had to put in my two cents.
Pat Flood
2024-10-29 17:42:27 +0000 UTCA think a mystery is only a problem if it doesn't make sense once it's revealed. Also Anzu love.
Paul Matson
2024-10-29 17:17:23 +0000 UTCI really like the direction that the story has gone and I just never comment.
eric holman
2024-10-29 16:01:28 +0000 UTCJust to add another perspective too, a lot of us really like the story and enjoy the chapters and just dont comment much. Or like myself I read them in batches because one chapter isnt enough. I expect the story to be slow and slowly unravel its not really like a web novel where each chapter is more standalone but that is just my take.
Jayy Wes
2024-10-29 15:22:38 +0000 UTCI’d rather you be happy with what you wrote, than twist yourself into knots to appease expectations from readers that don’t make sense for your vision. I know I’m probably lost in the weeds plotwise, but that doesn’t mean I’m not enjoying every chapter that comes out. Do you, man.
Omar Jimenez
2024-10-29 15:17:51 +0000 UTCI love the way you write and I have no complaints. I'm cool with any re-writes or delays as long as you're happy with the book. some people just want more standard/typical writing, but I've always enjoyed the way you do things.
Pale Goblin
2024-10-29 15:15:58 +0000 UTCNot knowing where it's going and what bread crumbs are real and which are herrings is most of the fun! I love the complexity and the fact everyone has unrevealed motivations. I have many other authors for mindless harem genre escapism - please keep up the mystery and complexity. Mob Sorcery is a masterpiece of prose and plot in this genre!
Dennis Erwin
2024-10-29 15:13:39 +0000 UTCSad you're getting some negative attention. I've been enjoying the read and thought Anzu was great. I think there may just be a vocal minority that specifically hates on your content because you respond, unlike a lot of other authors in the space. Hope buttoning up the book goes well though, really excited for the release!
George
2024-10-29 14:42:45 +0000 UTCI’ve enjoyed the book so far, I don’t have any complaints. I think it’s pretty reasonable for there still to be a lot of mystery when the story is only like halfway done. Also I think some of the confusion complaints should probably taken with a grain of salt because we read it all piecemeal on Patreon. So ppl are more likely to forget or miss elements you’ve put in. As such I don’t think a rewrite is necessary but you do you.
Jeb the Pleb
2024-10-29 14:37:11 +0000 UTCI wish there was a way I could say that it is awful that you feel that way, with out it diminishing the fact that it is how you feel. Sucks even more that you feel that you cannot express that to your readers, and I wish I could do more to show support, as one of those reader I can say that your work is incredibly entertaining, and enjoyable, and Mob is the reason I joined the Patreon, and it continues to engage and entertain. In solidarity for Vince's story I am upping my participation to see more of it. As an aside; create new archetypes, youre a writer, you get to do that, define the tropes dude.
Nukin Futs
2024-10-29 14:26:14 +0000 UTCAnzu is legit welcomed, aggressiveness and all. Like seriously, bring on the aggressive love interests. Really enjoying the book so far.
Johnny Starfrost
2024-10-29 14:18:10 +0000 UTCLoved every chapter, but do what makes you happy man. A book you are happy with is what I genuinely want to read, loved everything you've written and I'm here for your writing and taste.
[OMEN]
2024-10-29 14:08:19 +0000 UTCI've enjoyed the book immensely so far. Don't have any issues with anzu, she's an interesting character, an ancient fox and a badass. Am I lost? Maybe, maybe not. But I'm not upset about it. Even if I'm wrong and it's the opposite of what I think it's never bothered me.
Jericho Knight
2024-10-29 13:47:02 +0000 UTCA part of a good story is that readers don't fully understand everything and are still left disjointed with questions and speculation in the book. Please don't dumb down the chapters, we are just hear to read your stories and provide some input not limit you.
FakeTony
2024-10-29 13:39:35 +0000 UTCWe're not supposed to know everything, especially by this point. A big part of Mob is how little we actually know what's going on. The Anzu chapter gave us a lot of info, while still leaving the mystery of what's going on. Hell, we still don't know about what the previous relationship between Kaziern and Lionetti was that's been mentioned in Book 1. But we're getting there.
Tecally
2024-10-29 13:39:05 +0000 UTCRight? “Gimmie your spine.” Oof mommy 😍
Jim Payne
2024-10-29 13:29:34 +0000 UTCSorry it’s gone that way. I love everything that you’ve written, and the Mob chapters are a rock in a sea of meh Patreon posts. Anzu is good to be a lot of fun to meet as well, I can see her fitting in well with Nina. Plot wise, during my first read through I’m always just along for the ride. I find it more enjoyable than trying to figure out what happens before it’s written, but that’s just me. If they are complaining about complexity, they can go back to the perfectly acceptable Dante King books. If you feel it’s important to make changes then go for it, but Patreon people are impatient pricks. I think you have a lot of trust and support whichever way you go, so I wouldn’t take it to heart. Thanks for the stories!
Jim Payne
2024-10-29 13:28:33 +0000 UTCI’m going to be honest and say I’m very confused about your take that Anzu was disliked because unless your being pm’d every comment I read was positive about her. I did like her so that’s my two cents. Also the plots fine man you got to really get to end of the mystery for some people to really get it. I have loved your writings so take my biased view that you might need to finish the book because being drip fed is good for books in some ways and bad for them in others. Like mysteries.
Wyatt Pritchett
2024-10-29 13:21:43 +0000 UTCWhy would he? And how is he being timid? She's an agent who threatened to kill him and he doesn't even know who she is. Even if she did, Vince wouldn't accept it or wonder what her angle is.
Tecally
2024-10-29 13:16:39 +0000 UTCI didn't think anyone disliked her.
Tecally
2024-10-29 13:09:33 +0000 UTCAlso don't dumb down the mystery element that's the most engaging part of this book. Like who is Agent(cough, cough, Anzu & Momo), the deal with the fake soul egg, etc.
Oran Dawson
2024-10-29 13:07:18 +0000 UTCI dont mean for it to turn out that way. I just thought it would be for Vince to accept her advances because he is too timid in his relationships compared to Nathan from HS. So if he plays hard to get or recalcitrant, I imagine that would make Anzu furious and lead to something bad.
J
2024-10-29 12:59:53 +0000 UTCI really liked anzu, I mean if I’m a centuries old enforcer/guardian what would you except, I liked how that played out it was decisive yet playful I mean she is a fox. Also I’m excited to see how all the strong female characters gel in the long run.
Ty lewis
2024-10-29 12:50:23 +0000 UTCIt's unfortunate you feel like the plot has not landed with your intended audience. I also admit to being one of the confused readers but was enjoying the ride regardless. I think most of my confusion is because we 're reading the story piecemeal rather than the whole thing so I cant backtrack so easily to see missed clues nor push through the book to see if things reveal themselves. I also don't read all the other comments so do not know where the reader negativity is coming from. I hope you bounce back from the slump and not try to "dumb down" the book. I'm enjoying the intrigue so far and actually like the fact that I am pulling my hair and questioning the motives of characters and their scheeming. edit: Also I am all for aggresive love interests! Seriously the way Anzu did the Mortal Kombat fatality execution was awesome.
KiwiHermit
2024-10-29 12:50:00 +0000 UTCThought the chapters were good and even if I don’t see it all yet you have pulled off mysteries very well on I.e. neural wraith so I trust the conclusion will be good here as well. I don’t mind the more aggressive harem members either - it’s maybe a little jarring tonally to go from lingerie shoot to brutal violence but I still quite liked it - as you say it’s something a bit different and new. Good luck with the edit process since you feel the need and hopefully you feel better as you close this one out.
Nicholas Hale
2024-10-29 12:47:21 +0000 UTCPublic declaration of love or an oath of loyalty doesn't seem like the twins style, nor K.D. Robertson's. It would just kind of beat the whole purpose of not doing the same cookie cutter stuff other harem authors are doing.
Oran Dawson
2024-10-29 12:47:20 +0000 UTCI’ve been enjoying the story so far with all the twists and turns, it keeps me guessing what could be happen next. I have also found all the characters to be great, including Anzu. I was greatly looking forward to seeing her in the rest of the story as she is.
Brent Day
2024-10-29 12:44:34 +0000 UTCnot everyone will like every character, especially on first meeting them, and I've deeply enjoyed the book so far. I never know whats going on before its revealed in your books and that doesn't bother me at all. rewriting a couple chapters for an entitled vocal minority who where probably annoyed by the chapter being a different perspective than vinces rather than actually being irritated by Anzu as a character seems like a bad idea (I really quite liked her).
Jacob
2024-10-29 12:41:15 +0000 UTCI though Anzu's chapter was great. It was a bit hard to follow but that just makes it more interesting.
Filip Sundberg
2024-10-29 12:35:09 +0000 UTCI thought that chapter was fine.
VitalAbyss
2024-10-29 12:28:53 +0000 UTCI didn't agree with the post's sentiment. I may be a tad confused at times, but we are also reading only a chapter at a time, and the confusion is generally cleared up. Also, so long as it is resolved in a satisfying manner, I don't need to know everything ar the time, that is boring. I've been enjoying the book and personally don't think you need to change much - if anything the only confusion I have is trying to keep all the players and intrigued straight in my mind, but again I think that is more because I'm reading a chapter every other day.
Ken Mann
2024-10-29 12:13:48 +0000 UTCI actually liked the way Anzu was.
Nightworm
2024-10-29 11:51:57 +0000 UTCWait, I'm confused because I've liked everything so far. Yeah there are parts that I'm not sure about but book isn't done yet, neither is the plot line. That makes it fun. Plus none of the harem is really any more aggressive than normal, or other books I have read. Don't get me wrong, I have read books on patreon that did need a rewrite and ended up for better in the end but that's a smaller number and mob sorcery 3 doesn't feel like any of those books. Everyone is fine and you are doing great. People latching onto red hearings is fine, happens in every book I've ever read. Anzu/momo are currently working for houou and are in that world, of course they are going to be more aggressive. But k.d. one thing. You can't please everyone, no one can. Especially when the book isn't done and the characters haven't had time to grow. Example, not sure if you read bruce sentar or not but in a book of his ard's oath. There is a harem member named emlyn, first member for the record, and almost everyone hated her. Then book went on, things were found out and by the end everyone loved her. Things just needed time to grow and they needed to read the rest of the story. Thats the good/bad thing read chapters one at a time.
Bob Bryan
2024-10-29 11:43:13 +0000 UTCYes why not have Anzu make a public declaration of love to Vince or some oath of loyalty. She doesn't need to be as bloodthirsty as Sunstorm. But maybe she could regularly slap or strike one of the other harem girls like pola when she touches Vince.
J
2024-10-29 11:27:37 +0000 UTCI’ve come to expect being confused by a Robertson book as I’m reading it (at least until the end). I thought that was the “thing” that makes him such a good author, especially in THIS genre where 95% of everything else is cookie-cutter fluff? Is this not political intrigue? As far as the aggressive harem members, I don’t see a problem. Again, your books are so nice because they don’t follow the formula. Please continue doing you, and don’t try appealing to the lowest common denominator.
Brian Di Nisio
2024-10-29 11:18:27 +0000 UTCI'm following the story just fine but the Anzu chapter was really hard to follow. I don't dislike the character it just took me 3 to 4 reads to understand what was actually going on
Oran Dawson
2024-10-29 11:13:35 +0000 UTCI wouldn't say that I don't like the characters or the story, but I am baffled. Some fox with a Japanese name I can't remember is pretending to be a different fox with a Japanese name I can't remember, and this is surely very important. Honestly I thought it was just me being dumb. But it maybe would be fine if I was reading the whole book in a couple of days instead of a few chapters a week, which I ended up having to do with the last couple of HS too. It would be a shame to dumb down the plot, but some of us need a bit more help keeping track of where we are.
AndrewM
2024-10-29 11:10:44 +0000 UTCPeople dislike Anzu? Really, she's as a fresh face, and I like her attitude compared to the others, like you said, having the same archetypes is boring, what I like about harem members lets say in one series could be completely different, cause it's the environment they're in. I'm all for Anzu's more aggressive personality, it's different from the others sure but I like a little spice, Vince should have some ladies in his pride/pack/flock ready to cut someone at a moments notice in my opinion. Am I lost? Yes and No, But that's the joy of reading. I can just yk keep reading and it'll be revealed when revealed. Anyway, I hope any changes to Anzu aren't to much, I've enjoyed what little we've gotten of her so far.
Dre
2024-10-29 11:07:54 +0000 UTCIt would be better to stay the course and see if people pick up the threads later than to delay the chapters more and try to rework them. If the patreon reception to the final book isnt satisfactory you can always do edits and re-writes for final publication and just delay that
CrookedShepherd
2024-10-29 11:04:08 +0000 UTCAggressive is good. Don’t listen to people. The book will do just fine
Adam Siefertson
2024-10-29 11:03:56 +0000 UTCEh, what's wrong with Anzu? I liked her chapter.
Nagido
2024-10-29 11:02:58 +0000 UTCHonestly who wants a story that I know what happens before I read it. What's the point of reading it. This is your story with your characters. You write it how you want, maybe you go back and say that needs a tone shift or that character came off wrong but in the end tell your story oh muse. The one who like will like and the ones who don't won't. It is the same for every story.
Patrick Ferguson
2024-10-29 10:59:11 +0000 UTCI really hope you see all these and know you have loyal supporters K.D.
J
2024-10-29 10:55:23 +0000 UTCTake your time. I enjoyed it either way. Though I gotta admit I was confused too. But I am an idiot and usually need things directly pointed out to me to be able to pick up on them lmao. Take some time off. Enjoy yourself. I would rather wait a few weeks or even months longer for the book if it means you aren't burned out and don't force yourself to write the book. I want many more books in the future after all. And if you aren't having fun that might not happen. So take all the time you need.
Armnorn
2024-10-29 10:55:19 +0000 UTCI'm really enjoying the story so far and even though I'm one of the people who don't know where the plot is heading I'm fine woth that. Honestly I kinda enjoy it more than being railroaded so to speak. Now maybe if I was reading these chapters in one sitting I might be able to get it idk, but half the fun us finally putting all the little pieces together. I mean, I didn't realize that in HS the thing that Kadria took from Sunstorm during the whole memory/regaining her personality scene was that Sunstorm knew Vera had betrayed the empire until my 3rd reread of the series. Which when I realized I was thoroughly surprised and finally everyeverything else connected clicked. As for Anzu herself I really enjoyed her introduction and it really emphasized everything we've been told about clan guardians. We've been told they're powerful enforces with a pension for brutality but we've never really seen or heard much about how they go about this. Which in seeing this in action i think is a plus.
Luke Duncan
2024-10-29 10:45:39 +0000 UTCOn a side note, what do you mean by aggressive harem characters? Assuming you mean different from Nina and Pola. And speaking of that when will Nina give Pola a worse smackdown than a show by 50 cent?
J
2024-10-29 10:45:05 +0000 UTCNot going to lie I’m one of the confused ones but I am enjoying the series so far, your books are different that’s why I like them enough to be a Patreon. In the end you’re the author and creator I say create the world that you want. You’ll never please everyone but you can make yourself happy
Michael Shuble
2024-10-29 10:43:37 +0000 UTCA mystery is supposed to be an unknown. Why should we, as readers, know exactly what's going to happen? Stories that are too predictable honestly piss me off. I enjoy your books so much because of all the thought you put into what is happening in the background. Also, Anzu is hundreds of years old and from Japan. People tend to forget just how brutal and unforgiving it was in the past and she has clearly been shaped by her experiences.
The Agent Colson
2024-10-29 10:42:35 +0000 UTCOuch, didn't realize you felt this way. I still like Anzu's character. Maybe this is a bit of a rut for you but it doesn't have to be so bad. Having read heretic spellblade. You did a great job connecting the stories with the characters. Perhaps the issue you feel now is that your explaining so much information with all these other clans out of the blue. Far less of a buildup. Perhaps you need a chapter or two of build up purely with Anzu inner monolog. Detailing history of past events that lead to Houou formation. Current events of the first two books in her mind from fox perspective. Then saying how she found out about Vince and the feelings she has for him now. And then we get to her present plans. All the times she was agent and visited Vincent, wanting to steal the soul egg from houou to cripple them. Then destroy the Yakuza. And maybe at the end of this plan she cleans house in houou to take over telling Vince all these things. Work out some sort of alliance with the Lionettis. And as a reward she let's Vince have her way with her while using Illusion magic to make herself look like whoever Vince wants. I quite enjoy your work and hate hearing things aren't working out for you.
J
2024-10-29 10:40:09 +0000 UTCI liked Anzu
BlueGraine
2024-10-29 10:39:07 +0000 UTCExactly this
The Agent Colson
2024-10-29 10:34:53 +0000 UTCThat sucks I was enjoying the story so far.
Zac Ski
2024-10-29 10:33:40 +0000 UTCSad that is how the reaction to anzu was I enjoyed how different she was from the rest of the cast. Plus it’s literally only one chapter with her not being in a disguise. As for the mystery I am definitely one who doesn’t know what is going on but I’m enjoying it
Firugan
2024-10-29 10:33:10 +0000 UTCCheer up. Up 'till now it's been a fun read. I like the confusion, because most stories don't have the balls to make the reader think a little. Additionally, it adds reread-value if your understanding of the story goes up on revisiting it later. Don't dumb down the story and have some faith in your readers ^^ Keep up the good work. 👍
Lukas
2024-10-29 10:33:08 +0000 UTCSorry bud I really enjoyed it so far for what it's worth.
Gavin
2024-10-29 10:32:41 +0000 UTCI honestly liked how she was written. It was refreshing. She seemed to have a playful/mischievous character which most people associate with foxes. I honestly liked how she was and am kinda bummed she is gunna get a rework. This entire series has slow burn romances in my opinion that give the characters time to grow together. I thought it would be cool to see how the twins different personalities would change as they build relationships with V, especially with the Christmas week chapters. I'm admit I was one of the ones confused by the last chapter about the clan set ups but I figured as the book would go on or I reread it I would understand it better.
Martin Gamboa
2024-10-29 10:30:51 +0000 UTCIm sorry you're feeling that way about what leoples reaction. If it means anything, I personally enjoy what you've done. In all honesty, you've fundamentally changed my preferred books in this genre. I struggle to read anything that isn't as well written as your books are. It's made it a struggle to find ones that are and fit my criteria in other ways
Dewey08
2024-10-29 10:29:26 +0000 UTC
