Happy new year!
Added 2024-01-02 09:55:25 +0000 UTCJust returned from my brief vacation. Just wanted to pop in and say Happy New Year to everybody.
Production for the next part has begun. There are some further changes I've planned for the coming release.
One major thing whose changes have been partially committed—I've taken a further look at the past script and realized how... well, unprofessional the script read. Simple mistakes that should not have made it to the release version, spelling, and grammatical errors bound.
I've noted the criticisms but never had the time to sit down and properly fix things. Always felt like I had to cram what little free time I had just to finish the next chapter; even then, there were already delays in that aspect.
But alas, I suppose the mistakes must be unbearable to some people. So I promised myself to comb through the words I've written, albeit, bit-by-bit. I won't promise that I'll fix all the problems, but I believe I'll catch a decent amount of them. Fixes will happen gradually. Expect some of it to happen in the next release.
I admit: If you expect professional-level dialogue with intrigue and profound conversations, I... can't provide you that purely out of lack of experience and skill. Perhaps with time, that outcome will reach the realm of reality, but for now, this is kinda my limit, maybe? I'm not sure. I do recognize that I get more comfortable writing as the project grows since the initial chapters, but that is a judgment only others can make.
Thank you again for all of your support! I'm excited about the future of this project and I can't wait to show you the next part of Chapter 4: Electric boogalo.
Comments
I seem to notice is in a lot of the sex scenes the females don't remove their bras. Free the boobies, why keep it on? 😊 I wonder if mc keeps his socks on 🤔 😁✌️ seriously though, love this VN, was just wondering about the bras not getting removed
Vortex
2024-01-11 16:43:09 +0000 UTCHappy new year! I largely agree with what others have said - the errors are few and far between. My feeling is that the quality of the writing is so high (the slow corruption or romance) that it’s a shame that the easy stuff (typos, grammar) is sometimes an issue - it’s like a tiny spot on an otherwise flawless surface. Maybe starting a discord/getting players to send in any errors they spot would help? I’ve seen other AVN devs crowdsource editing pretty well.
paradoxwrit
2024-01-03 16:30:05 +0000 UTCHonestly, the dialog being all profound would work against what the game is doing. I prefer the raw feeling when it locks into the moment and fleshes out the thoughts and temptations of the characters. And for that purpose, the writing skills have been well beyond requirement since the initial release. Personally, wouldn't pay much attention to anyone throwing a fit over minor errors in a sea of text, but I'm not a creator, so my approach might be too cavalier. Anyhow, godspeed, good luck, looking forward to the coming update, and holding onto the selfish hope that corrupting women in a gallant fashion continues to be a theme, even if the wider story starts to become more prominent.
Secret Sal
2024-01-02 23:32:45 +0000 UTCi haven't seen any major grammar errors that bother me. Your VN has been a joy to play so far. Love winning over the love interests to be with the mc
Vortex
2024-01-02 16:26:15 +0000 UTC❤
tocama ortiz
2024-01-02 14:40:43 +0000 UTCI don't recall any real grammar issues (though admittedly my grammar sucks most days), but it didn't detract from the experience of the game for me. Even the spelling wasn't that big an issue that I can recall. The only one that stood out to me was you used "message" instead of "massage" in one release, and since the scene was entirely framed around a massage, it stood out. But, i mean hell, that's ONE letter error, and it's technically not even a spelling error, it's a spellcheck oversight. Compared to the type of writing and spelling errors we see in your average AVN, you are top tier in that department, errors and all. And while I certainly wouldn't mind seeing them cleaned up, it's hardly a deal breaker. Aside from that, the quality of your project overall is quite good compared to the average fare we get from the AVN community. I said it in my review over on F95 but the appeal for me, is the care you put into actually making the characters feel 3 dimensional. That and your use of lighting, can't stress that enough, your use of lighting is top notch to help build atmosphere and intimacy. You make a solid product, it's not perfect sure, but what is? I wouldn't stress too much about the warts on the thing too much. Improving is always good, and if you want to put in the time to polish up the scuffy bits in earlier releases, I certainly won't complain, but don't feel like your work is somehow substandard because of those. Because the average entry into the AVN has nothing on what you release.
Happyninja42
2024-01-02 13:13:31 +0000 UTCHappy New Year Spark!
ThL
2024-01-02 10:14:24 +0000 UTCHappy New year to you as well! As for the dialogues, they are already rather good. Surely far above the average avn! Cheers 🎉🎉🎉
Saint McDaniels
2024-01-02 10:08:32 +0000 UTC
