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[TAS] Arc 1 - Chapter 146 - Primum --- END OF ARC 1

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Thanks for the chapter, It's absolutely phenomenal, the way Thea challenged the entire drive. And I'm also worried about the Squad I guess since I think Rachel will absolutely challenge Lucas for the spot, and desmond and Isabella too, I'm worried if they'll get replaced later when someone issued a challenge

Hakiu

Just an observation: For the leaderboards you are listing the ship + squad for some(like Sovereign alpha) but for Venn + Viladia you are only listing their squad.

Knyko

I called it Thea MVM #1. Now, thats kind of expected with this being an OP Space Opera of sorts. Still it was well done and believable from an in universe stand point. Our girl CRUSHED that assessment. Yes she had help and guidance but she still CRUSHED IT! I cant wait for book 2 to come out! I want to see what she does with all these awards and rewards. Will she choose a moon, a planet, or possibly a star? What will that mean for her? What will that mean for Isabella? Our two midworlders just got given so much wealth that they can retire in luxury when and if they do retire from UHF. DAYUM!!

SingularCurve

Excellent end chapter. Well done conclusion and set up for the next arc of the story. I am looking forward to learning about the new skills and psycher lessons. + What either the next assessment or actual battle set up will be.

Storyhunter

This was really a lovely chapter, read it now for the second time. My only wish for the arc that wasnt fulfilled is imo it would be much cooler to get some of the POVs from other people as she starts stacking up these medals rather than the first time it happens(like, the midworld POV is great for the first medal, but what about some doubters or something after she gets her 2nd or 3rd? what are they thinking now? It does get kind of adressed with her challenge in the end, and thats why it might be even more fulfilling to maybe get a doubter that gets convinced and or someone who is still doubting) But overall i loved the reward «arc» and i think you fixed a some of the pacing people were complained about with tve wrap up (as ive mentioned before), so well done. Cant wait for next book

Knyko

I had thought Lumis was just a persona Sovereign made to interfere with the recruits. Turns out she’s an actual person?

BB8ALREADY

All those skills and heavily discounted gear on top of that compensation. Plus this ancient psyker as a teacher. The next volume she is going to be a leviathan. A freaking celestial body to own. I wonder if that could be used to own a derelict ship or station. I can’t wait for the next chapter.

IdolTrust

Careful, Thea. The Demon Lord's eating your Thoughts!

Youkai-sama

Fucking awesome

Brian Pierce

And are you planning to increase the word count for each new chapter?😈

Carsten Zirkler

Great one ... The Skill vouchers Thea and Alpha got are there a rarity, prehaps write in down in the RR version.

Carsten Zirkler

Makes sense!

Kevin Callanan

Danke dir, mein guter! 😍❤️

LunaWolve

Haha ok. Ich meine es wirklich ernst! Seit langer Zeit das Beste was ich gelesen habe. Und das obwohl ich eher in der Fantasy und Manga Szene unterwegs bin. Ich mag die alten Sci Fi Sachen aber die letzten Jahre waren auch eher mau. Hoffe immer noch das Henry Cavill was gutes für Warhammer auf die Beine stellt. Viele Grüße aus Rheinland-Pfalz und alles Gute zu einem gelungenen ersten Arc.

Redsennin94

Oh and I'm from Germany!

LunaWolve

my thoughts exactly! Awesome work!!!

Avidyetboredreader

Good point; I'll probably add a summary to whatever I release next

LunaWolve

The System merely checks whether there MIGHT be something bad, not if there actually IS something bad. So a warning is the best you'll get, unless you're trying to send some hard-coded Gold-lock stuff.

LunaWolve

Aren't we all...!

LunaWolve

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LunaWolve

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LunaWolve

You are FAR too kind!!! 😊😊😊😊

LunaWolve

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LunaWolve

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LunaWolve

TFTC, very good wrap up chapter. I am curious though what is her current "stat" sheet look like? and what are her total rewards? Just trying to summarize everything coming her way.

Hammy

Loved the chapter. It had pacing that I wish previous chapters had as well. The rewards arc was long! But setup that needed setting up I guess. My only suggestion is reworking the forwarding of the standings to Thea's dad figure. It doesn't make sense for a system to warn of a court martial offense and just allow the message to be sent anyway. I think it could be worked around while achieving the same result

Kevin Callanan

I am immensely curious as to what becomes of Thea's challenge to the whole drive😁

Johannes Brockmann

Freaking fantastic chapter, great work!! Like the perspectives and Thea's character development throughout the chapter, as well as simply living Kara as a character. Absolutely well done!! Can't wait for Volume 2😁

Johannes Brockmann

That was excellent!!! Well played LunaWolve!! Keep being amazing! TFTC!

YoYo Crow

Well what should i say that was amazing. I am trough the chapter 2 times now and Karas monoloque and Theas challenge to the drive about 4-5 times. Both gave me chills. I am happy that Thea found her purpose. Character development check. Atlas POV to finish the start and going back to James to finish the Arc. Check. I feal bad for 6500 dead midworlders who die for an experiment. Lumis and Verdun POV to raise curiosity and tension for what is to come. Check. Honestly Luna in my humble opinion TAS is THE BEST webnovel currently out there. Your writing and pacing is off the charts. You should teach classes about that. Same with your language and grammer. I wonder if english is you mother tongue? If it is ok to ask where are you from? The emotions and tension is real and the characters are relatable. Whether you like them or not. Please i am begging you DO NOT let this gem be ruined by stupid comments or other shit. Take your time, take breaks and please do not rush the story or the end. There is nothing i hate more than that. Sorry for ranting. I have seen to many novels starting off amazing and then doing a freefall because of stuff like that.

Redsennin94

Incredible. Just finished reading the chapter, and what a chapter it was. Take all the time you need, i know for sure i'll be here whenever the next chapter comes.

uverhaul

A nearly prefect chapter! Great to see some confidence show up, too much in this case! Once she gets down a couple notches from speech Thea she’ll be prefect! My concern and dislike is the same one as I have raised previously, Karania. I think your pushing way to hard on her.

Stuart Anderson

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LunaWolve

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LunaWolve

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LunaWolve

Great ending, the emotional pay off was almost therapeutic.

Connor Higdon

A wonderful feast of a chapter and a great ending. I am already hyped up for the future of this story! Currently looking forward to the shopping and upgrades to all of alpha squad that are sure to come from these achievements, vouchers and huge amount of credits.

Drumic

Well that was a long one I didn't notice anything very obvious that needs to be edited so -shrug- anyway I'm excited to see the classes because I'd like to know more about how the system works so looking forward to book 2 already

Meganclare7

😍😍😍

LunaWolve

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LunaWolve

LETS FUCKING GOOOO Probably the best chapter ive read in quite a while. Made me really excited and was quite the bold move for thea to challange all these noble pricks. Love it. Also i think its funny for the brass to basically just "LETS GO GAMBLING" because %200+ growth rate is insane lol Genuinely a really well done chapter, very long. Thank you!!

asdfmeepman

*thunderous applause*

None ya

You are too kind ❤️

LunaWolve

I thought Thea got a palladium and a platinum two stars. Just read the last chapter. Not sure if it was a typo there or here.

Alley

Amazing chapter! Got goosebumps reading Thea’s speech!

BradGames

No, I really don't think I am. Lol

Kaywye

😍

LunaWolve

You are far too kind ❤️

LunaWolve

Totally amazing. You have a singular talent. I wish I had a fraction of it. Good job. Take whatever breaks you need. I, for one, will wait as long as necessary for your fine work. Now aside from the deserved accolades for your work.... A celestial object within the sector? Now most folks will think small planets, or moons or large asteroids for the mineral and or gas rights...but what exactly would you get from owning a star, or a nebula...and honestly, the squad is going to be way WAY too busy for the next few YEARS to be able to properly take advantage of that singular reward. Though the idea of having the Karania lunar medical research complex, or the Isabella zero g combat training asteroid is hilarious. Thanks again.

Kaywye

Dayum that was a chunky but oh so good chapter! I was grinning the entire time reading

TheCeaserSalad

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LunaWolve

What do you mean you just casually wrote half the write-a-thon as a single chapter?? You're crazy and it's amazing. TFTC! Please take a break if you need to. EDIT after reading: Amazing chapter, all I can do is echo Desmond: Entertaining as fuck. Also if Evil Sera (ND Sera best Sera) separated Thea and Kara, chances of Thea (and me) turning on the UHF would rocket right to 100%

Brady

I think this has been the largest and most filling potat yet!

Tannim Murphy

🥔P O T A T

LunaWolve

Thanks for the chapter!

TheCeaserSalad

Potat?

Tannim Murphy


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