Franklin 11 DRAFT
Added 2020-04-18 16:51:04 +0000 UTCit's the draft
looking for some feedback -
- are the explainers and diagrams understandable?
- do i tie in the subject well enough
- did i misspell or fuck up anything
Already planning on making a few changes but I felt like y'all had waited long enough
Comments
Hey this still isn't added to the Franklin Youtube playlist
Ty Underwood
2020-07-04 22:39:55 +0000 UTCyou can just message here, but I can't speak on the efficacy
Gabriel Martin
2020-05-11 06:52:34 +0000 UTCIs there a platform or email that general inquires or podcast guest requests can be sent to?
Danny Felts
2020-04-30 20:40:08 +0000 UTCa bit late, but you misspelled "redemption" at 12:00, "impoverished" at 18:20, and "laissez-faire" at 43:56. edit: didn't realise hitting return would just post the comment like an IM. great video! while it's hard to continue calling this series 'Franklin' when the only mention of the town is a quick thing at the end, i do like how the jig's up and it's basically just philly. that was pretty funny. as always it's great to just listen to a long, conversational tract on how crap the US is when you turn away from the official accounts.
hydrochloric
2020-04-24 18:16:12 +0000 UTCCan we get those assets early? Great vid
William Rose
2020-04-22 22:57:54 +0000 UTCThe video is great. The complexity of this thing and the ammount of research and work it must've taken is nuts. Couldn't care less how long it took, well worth it.
Alien6981
2020-04-22 02:51:45 +0000 UTC> did i misspell or fuck up anything 1871
Patrick Quin
2020-04-21 05:10:07 +0000 UTCI feel like your underselling the Newburgh Conspiracy a bit, weren't Morris and Hamilton kinda egging that shit on? think i heard about this in a interview with William Hogeland when he was being asked about his book Founding Finance, The Episode rules but i feel like you missed a chance to dam Hamilton more and that would be a tragedy.
Maggie+Al
2020-04-21 04:56:35 +0000 UTCNice job modeling! I died a bit at the Alexander Hamilton part.
Jason Milewski
2020-04-21 02:11:27 +0000 UTCgreat episode
TyrotheCreator
2020-04-20 20:49:05 +0000 UTCPlease do not listen to anybody who claims you say "right" too much! That kind of critique is kinda out of bounds, and imo "right" sounds conversational and puts me at ease (which is important for edutainment.) One of the strengths of your channel is your non-hammy affect (rare on youtube) and how effectively it smooths out both the dense concepts and frequent hilarious jokes. If there's any problem with comprehension I suspect that has more to do with editing which could be mitigated just with some slightly longer pauses between certain thoughts of phrases (as Ross James above suggested.) The content itself is all valuable and funny though, and I like that it's long!
Matt O'Leary
2020-04-19 16:18:57 +0000 UTCGreat Episode, very interesting!
Henning Grabbert
2020-04-19 16:16:33 +0000 UTCAlso agree, it could definitely do with some kinda diagram.
Luka Hedt
2020-04-19 11:31:22 +0000 UTCThe 3D modeling was a bit distracting as a background for the narration, but probably not a problem for people less obsessed with watching polygons line up.
Greg L.
2020-04-19 07:12:59 +0000 UTCThank you. Stuck like a splinter in my mind
Greg L.
2020-04-19 07:07:43 +0000 UTCAt 33:00 you say "420 (nice)" but it should be "420 (blaze it)" (I'm learning a lot, great video)
Jon Kimbel
2020-04-19 06:37:32 +0000 UTCWas just going to post something to this effect.
J R
2020-04-19 05:40:40 +0000 UTCI agree that I had trouble following that
Ty Underwood
2020-04-19 04:00:24 +0000 UTCSir! Sir! Nice job. I really enjoyed it; I didn't notice anything anyone else hasn't noticed, found the explanation of how the 2nd bank operated at 36:20 a bit hard to follow but tbf I have ADHD.
David Bowie keeps breaking into my house
2020-04-19 01:36:48 +0000 UTCat 5:17 you say that the battle of yorktown ended the land war in 1871, instead of 1781.
Kevin Keogh
2020-04-19 00:58:50 +0000 UTCAs others have said, FAR too much saying "right?". Rather than casual and approachable it sounds unsure and anxious... like I'm finding myself bracing myself for the next one and still flinching when it hits. It's hard to follow the points bc I get distracted each time. For the early maps with farmers and troops moving around, I'd suggest having the action happen as it is described, instead of waiting for the narration to end - like how they move at 12:23.
Alex Acosta
2020-04-18 23:58:28 +0000 UTCthat audio quality
Canary Quill Astrology
2020-04-18 22:51:34 +0000 UTCit's leveled to -6dB lol, probably on your end
donoteat
2020-04-18 22:14:21 +0000 UTCRight, but since the value isn't tied to it, what does it really mean?
Nicolai Nielsen
2020-04-18 22:08:09 +0000 UTC""Rather than issue pounds, the government issued dollars". What does that actually mean, though?" he did mention this though. the fiat currency of the colonies was the spanish dollar aka the peso, so the us printed dollars.
De3ta
2020-04-18 22:06:11 +0000 UTCin general id up your voice over in the video its quiet all across- had to up my system volume to hear it really clearly but that may just be on my end.
De3ta
2020-04-18 22:04:43 +0000 UTCYou say "Prelavent" around 46:44
Liam O'Connor
2020-04-18 21:52:44 +0000 UTC"Laissez-Faire" not "Laizzes-Faire" around 44:00
Liam O'Connor
2020-04-18 21:49:40 +0000 UTC"Redepmtion" mispelling at 11:58
Liam O'Connor
2020-04-18 21:16:48 +0000 UTC36:25 the orchestral track that kicks in is loud enough that it slightly drowns out your narration.
De3ta
2020-04-18 21:16:09 +0000 UTCGo Heels.
Sam Blakey
2020-04-18 20:47:03 +0000 UTCA collection on comments and a few corrections. Great stuff, though: Tone down the number of "right?", especially on items that people might not know, right? Might need more emphasis or detail on what "specie" is early on, since you refer to it later. You mention that a contentinental "was issued". The passive voice shall not be used. what does it mean to "issue tax on that money"? "Rather than issue pounds, the government issued dollars". What does that actually mean, though? What does "the face value" mean for a continental? Its value compared to a Spanish dollar? To fund "the war". Might make sense to mention which war. I mean, I suppose it's the revolutionary one, but still... I like the "narration over a sped-up building in Blender" format, but the rapid fast forward is jarring in Blender. It works better in Cities: Skylines for some reason. I would totally watch a real-time video with how you're building the model of the ... erhm... building As always, really like your anachronisms ("a massive tweet thread we now call the federalist papers", "Go Heels!", etc) 18:17 - "Impovrished the west" 21:47 - Move the explanation of 1816 earlier (i.e. "a volcano had erupted, then this happened, that happened" instead of "this happened, that happened, and a volcano had erupted") 24:15 - what's an ephisode? or a subdisciplint? When you talk about Athens' democracy, I'd love a tangent on idiots that insists that the US "is a republic and not a democracy" 40:24 - Had to be paid in pa-second bank notes" 47m - what's a National Republican? Did I miss the part where you defined this?
Nicolai Nielsen
2020-04-18 20:35:19 +0000 UTCI was honestly expecting you to make a 5 minute rant about the counter-intuitiveness of Blender's new UI
Subspace Jet Witch
2020-04-18 20:30:24 +0000 UTCGreat video! I got a little lost from 36:20 on, it's pretty complicated, and the visuals and music make it hard to focus. Maybe wait with the music until you've explained the hard part? Also, the point at 38:16 is drowned out by the music a bit. The "overlending" part at 38:49-39:30 is difficult (to me), maybe it would help to bring back the diagram from 36:20? I'm not a native speaker though, so maybe it's fine.
petrolinus
2020-04-18 19:43:34 +0000 UTCAt around 5:17 you said 1871 instead of 1771.
Ryan Krause
2020-04-18 19:18:12 +0000 UTCImpoverished is misspelled in the Hamilton slide but everything else is good so far
Sykes St.
2020-04-18 18:13:13 +0000 UTCTIL the battle of yorktown was in 1871
Will Morphet
2020-04-18 18:06:14 +0000 UTCyou spelled laissez-faire wrong but I'm inferring that was intentional to make fun of the baguettes and their funny sounding language.
Keg
2020-04-18 18:00:37 +0000 UTCEverything looks good by my eye. Easy enough to understand.
Garland Ward
2020-04-18 18:00:17 +0000 UTCI think the cuts you're making in the audio are a bit too short - it's not that you're speaking too fast, but that sometimes it feels like sentences change very quickly while I'm still processing what was just said. All the information is really good and cool and I love to watch the 3d modelling and it's a very good video
Ross James
2020-04-18 17:52:25 +0000 UTCis this too nitpicky? 😬 laizzes -> laissez (44:10)
hotel
2020-04-18 17:41:16 +0000 UTCThis coming out makes me think that the Tacoma Narrows Bridge episode is coming soon.
NM
2020-04-18 17:20:19 +0000 UTCI'm about a third through and it's very good so far... just a little confusing about how the first bank was founded and how the govt got 2 mil out of the 10 mil and private companies got the rest for 2.5mil...
Keg
2020-04-18 17:13:47 +0000 UTCYou sound real confident in this one. A somewhat quicker pace to the episode, which is good
oscar strokosz
2020-04-18 17:12:13 +0000 UTCOf course as soon as I say this I spot a spelling mistake: impovrished -> impoverished (18:20)
hotel
2020-04-18 17:10:49 +0000 UTCGonna be honest, my feedback won't be available till mid August. Hope you understand lol
oscar strokosz
2020-04-18 17:10:44 +0000 UTCAbout a quarter of the way through it and everything seems pretty solid so far
hotel
2020-04-18 17:08:00 +0000 UTCwow I never expected franklin 11 to come out in my lifetime
Keg
2020-04-18 16:53:13 +0000 UTC
