Debra's progress #2 feedback
Added 2020-12-19 16:51:22 +0000 UTCThe next part of Debra's journey to insane muscle mass should be ready soon. Until then, I want to hear what did you guys think about the second part of the story. Also, what are your expectations going forward?
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I concur with all of Lyme's points. I know size creep is a real issue with muscle writing, but there's a fine balance to be struck. Her being a spectacle/exhibitionist is also a good idea, and playing up her enjoyment over being lusted after is fun. Just drenched and trembling as she's pushed herself to a climax while working out in front of everyone. Teasing her girlfriend would be nice, and potentially helping her beef up seems like an inevitability.
First Second
2020-12-21 03:37:00 +0000 UTCYou are right. I've made a few changes to the weights and the numbers. The last few sentences of part 2 should describe her reaction in a more believable way. Also I've bumped her legs up to 42 inches in the first part. Should be better now. Thank you!
Nick563
2020-12-20 10:55:09 +0000 UTCI liked it and like where it seems to be going. Just a couple of suggestions. I would think she could lift more weight based on her size. 600 lbs doesn't seem like much for someone that weighs 425. I would think it would be more like 1000. Also, if her arms are 32, 40 seems a bit small her legs. I would like her to cum on her last few reps or when she flexes, then maybe others can smell her scent. And I don't think she so be surprised others are watching her, in fact she should revel in it. But as always I eagerly await new episodes of your work, I think its great.
Lyme24
2020-12-20 05:51:55 +0000 UTC
