My Classmate Emma Lindberg - Chapter 47, Page 17
Added 2025-05-08 11:18:55 +0000 UTC
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Thanks! I've corrected them
SimVenus Arts
2025-05-10 11:23:25 +0000 UTCSimVenus, some possible corrections:: 1. Natalie's first line: "I've been willing to do this for a long tome." -could be- "I've been wanting to do this for a long time." -or both- "I've been wanting and willing to do this for a long time." 2. Emma: "All you do is beating them up when they are helpless." -should be- All you do is beat them up when they are helpless." 3. Natalie: "Because you gagged Gabby at the street and a newspaper..." -should be- "Because you gagged Gabby on the street, in public, and a newspaper..."
Larry_W
2025-05-09 11:23:02 +0000 UTCWow a lot of comments on this one but nobody has said two points I would like to point out to SimVenus on Natality had been wanting to do this for a long time instead of willing and towards the end as Natalie is talking about gagging gabby at street there are some other ways of clarifying it like "gagged gabby and paraded her down the street" seems to fit Natalie's diatribe just my thought SimVenus I do not mean to offend
Robmur
2025-05-08 23:37:06 +0000 UTC
