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Industrious - Chapter 23

Here we go!  That took longer than I thought it would, but it's out now!  I think I'm going to hold off on posting the next chapter to the public thread until I get some sleep, just FYI.  Also, there's a note at the end, but I had to shuffle some stuff around (chapter was already getting bloated), so the exploration of Kotaro's double-charge shenanigans will be up next even though I planned to do it this chapter.  Sorry, my bad on that.

Otherwise, I think I'm going to sneak in an update for Speedrun and/or my Code Geass quest real quick before the month rolls over and Industrious dominates another poll.

Thanks again for all your support and I hope everyone's having a good start to their new year!

Industrious - Chapter 23

Comments

The More The story goes on the less likely it feels like mc is going to leave konoha let alone the elemental Nations and more likely he's going to end up either marrying the female version of Sasuke or Naruto that or end up in some massive harem with most of the attractive females in Naruto and their genderbent counterparts. As it's pretty weird in the story so far that every male character in his generation has been gender-bent and I think the only exception so far has been Sakura. As she got turned into a dude 😎. I kind of enjoyed the idea of the story because it seemed to offer that the story was eventually going have the main character uplift the civilization level of the Naruto universe. As they seemed kind of backwards in cannon and their level of technology is all over the place. But the only thing he seem to have help uplift in their civilization is there material prowess under the guise of helping his friends which is getting annoying. As he keeps talking about using it to leave konoha and build cool sci-fi technology. But then decides to use his charges not towards that goal but helping his peers become better killer for helping someone else if starting to feel like it's detracting from the original goal and it's just getting annoying.

Anthony Maxwell

Ninja are going to ninja, trying to be a friend and decent person while not training to be a child soldier can be difficult and irritating.

Slayer Anderson

I have to drop this story, it started okay but quickly turned into how far can the mc bend over to please the egos of others while also training their kids. I see no benefit for the mc to do so. It's getting annoying seeing the mc helping all his peers and all he gets in return are adults mouthing off and trying to drain him off his secrets. 👋

Noctis117

Great chapter!

Sage Berthelsen

Seems to me if Yakumo needs to control her other Half he will need to Either bring her to Isobu (the beast that specializes in Yin Chakra) or bring her to the Giant Cloud Turtle to face the Waterfall an fight & accept her ID. Though going on a trip to find, Fight, capture the Zero tails with either Kushina or another Uzumaki with the Chains. For Future Yakumo after she faces and Accepts her Dark-Half or have the taking of the Zero be what gives her that Trial. Honestly for Yakumo her best bets to get the most of her Bloodline is probably Isobu as the Sages Son that Mastered Genjustu(and likely the Mind) and has the Highest Personal Defense, would also help fix Yakumo lack of Yang. He is also one of the few Tails that actually gets along with Humans.plus the Coral that grows on chakra is pretty dope and the fact that he has understanding of Space-Time Jutsu with his stomach being a pocket Dimension filled with little Isobu. The Zero would be the more Dangerous but would be gives the most in being creative since there isn't alot on it.

Rockinalice

With the fact that the Sharingan can have Dimensional hopping abilities, which is a Yin heavy Dojustu, and the Rinnengan having the same thing but even greater because of the Addition of Yang. It stands to reason that Yakumo could do the same if not better then a Sharingan because of the fact her Bloodline is almost pure Yin. Makes me wonder what the Nara could do.

Rockinalice

Seems to me that someone is a little salty that a 'no name' (not that she knows) civilian is succeeding where she failed.

SirWaddlesworthThe3rd

It’s nice to see you mention the problem at the end of the chapter, it’s been bugging me that the only hints I’ve seen of any new points being spent is the post chapter list. I’m sure the whole “wow it all makes sense” would get annoying eventually but it’s part of what I enjoy about Inspired inventor and Celestial Forge stories and most of his logic leaps are being skipped over, and how much experience he’s gotten from each point is nebulous when it isn’t mentioned much e.g three points in shi-cho seems a point too much for a sword style for used on teaching footwork and blade discipline, four points in prana bindu also seems excessive, when the only thing he gains is muscle exercises and body control

Matthew Robar

So he just remembered Kaguyas ability to make reality her bitch at will for travel purposes.

Dale

nice doot my dude, the imagery of kotaro scrunching himself together and unscrunching in a spider like way gave me goosebumps and made me shiver. i loved it

MrTarven


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