The New Ron 15!
Added 2022-09-27 11:30:44 +0000 UTCOkay, got this... we'll call it, semi-done? This is a short chapter that's kind of a bridge between two scenes. I want to add something, but I've been staring at the screen for a few hours and I'm not sure what at this point. So feel free to throw me feedback if you know what this chapter's missing. Otherwise, I'm going to sleep on it and may ping everyone to let them know there's added material if I come up with something to add.
Comments
I have to agree, this feels "complete." It's the opening 5 minutes of an episode, where the sitch is established and the A and B plots are introduced, including elements of the myth arc continuing from last episode. That's probably why it doesn't feel done as a chapter- there's usually a travel scene and then at least a bit of the tension established in the A plot before we cut to commercial.
Benjamin Hower
2022-09-28 02:37:07 +0000 UTCNot sure if it’s missing anything. Sometimes you just need to put out words that connect one good scene to another. I think a sign of a good author is just having more islands of fun than bridges connecting them. No worries. Maybe if anything it could be a chance to show some character growth? It’s kind of hard to show that for Ron, but KP or Wayne?
Dudedorey
2022-09-27 12:19:05 +0000 UTC
