This Romantic World page 191
Added 2021-05-07 00:49:57 +0000 UTCI hope this page lands the way I wanted it to. I liked the idea that the instant Nadine got off she'd need zero coaxing to unload what was bothering her, I just really struggled with getting that out on the page in what I felt was an entertaining way. The art and especially the dialog got reworked a lot, right up until the last minute, so if you have any feedback I'd love to hear it.
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Ah gotcha. Thank you!
Reinbach
2021-05-17 23:45:22 +0000 UTCAs you write above, you reworked the dialogs a lot and i say the result is top quality. As usual.
eF..cz
2021-05-15 05:53:47 +0000 UTCSorry but I'm a bit confused by that sentence and don't know how to respond. How do you mean?
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:20:39 +0000 UTCI'm sure they did! XD
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:19:42 +0000 UTCMaybe! :)
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:19:32 +0000 UTCXD
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:19:23 +0000 UTCHey thanks for sharing! :)
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:19:17 +0000 UTCXD
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:19:02 +0000 UTCCool! I'm a little outside my wheelhouse writing a functional couple, so I'm glad I seem to be pulling it off well enough. :)
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:18:57 +0000 UTCGlad that's going over well! :)
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:18:08 +0000 UTCAwesome! Certainly my intent there.
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:17:32 +0000 UTCIt most certainly would!
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:17:20 +0000 UTCGreat!
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:17:06 +0000 UTCI think that's a great idea, and if I'd had any room left for an extra dialog bubble down there without redrawing it, I'd have done that right after reading this.
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:16:54 +0000 UTC:D
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:15:47 +0000 UTCThings would be more organized under her, at least! XD
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:15:35 +0000 UTCOn the way! :)
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:15:13 +0000 UTCHigh fives! :)
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:15:02 +0000 UTC;D
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:14:35 +0000 UTCOn it. XD
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:14:31 +0000 UTCGood! I thought that suited her.
Reinbach
2021-05-13 22:14:22 +0000 UTCReworked to be top.
eF..cz
2021-05-09 19:42:32 +0000 UTCAs an aside, May 8th is National Outdoor Intercourse Day; hoping everyone in Castlewood will be celebrating :) ;)
frank barry
2021-05-07 20:49:03 +0000 UTCthat kind of take doesn't sound bad at all ;) Only Eliana stands in their way, but maybe Tenma can change her mind ;) ;)
frank barry
2021-05-07 20:47:59 +0000 UTCI came just imagine after the final panel Dramatic Music plays *Duh Duh Duuuuuh!*
Lukas West
2021-05-07 08:33:26 +0000 UTCI write published erotica (so not just mental masturbation...). Nothing works better than a sudden, unexpected statement at a sudden. unexpected moment. You nailed it and set up an intriguing scenario for when you're ready to continue.
Alex Barton
2021-05-07 08:10:39 +0000 UTCAh, the post-orgasm clarity
Kyman201
2021-05-07 05:35:09 +0000 UTCI think this page works very well. I think you really succeeded in making Shiro and Nadine's relationship stand out as different from everyone else's (with the possible exception of Parker and What's-His-Name from the game) as one of the very few that is built on more emotional attraction rather than physical lust.
Squid Hills
2021-05-07 05:00:22 +0000 UTCI love that she was impressed by his cumshot. That was kind of adorable.
Nikuthulhu
2021-05-07 03:48:01 +0000 UTCShiro after shooting a massive cumshot on her, is only concerned he got some on her shirt... and she just says to kiss her. They really are such a freakin' adorable couple!
NomadicWanderer
2021-05-07 03:40:23 +0000 UTCSo that's one big load, he not only filled her pussy but had enough to cover her tits too, way to go. And Nadine's last statement, if I remember Elliana's parents right, with them in charge lewdness would rain.
Bob Fink
2021-05-07 03:24:16 +0000 UTCLove it! That entirely reads as the post nut clarity non-sequitur. I say one almost every time I get down with my partner. The timing and pacing made me laugh
Emmett
2021-05-07 03:07:04 +0000 UTCI think it turned out great! However, I think the last panel would be a little less jarring if you stick in a word bubble from Shiro saying "Now, will you please tell me what's bothering-" before Nadine interrupts him before he can even finish the sentence with what's on her mind 🙂
Jordan Christmas
2021-05-07 02:31:49 +0000 UTCWell that took a fucking turn
Taylored Printers
2021-05-07 02:01:32 +0000 UTCShit. I might actually prefer Elliana over them...
Lord Washington
2021-05-07 01:57:25 +0000 UTCI'd say the page worked really well, then the last panel hit... and now I have so many questions. What? Are they going to turn it into a boarding school for pornstars? or make Elianna the tyrant - principal - ice queen of the school? Which of those would be more insane? I mean.... what? Rein, please tell me you're going to fill us in on what that means soon...
Slaughterbug
2021-05-07 01:42:22 +0000 UTCMiss Hollllllllllllttttttt!!! I dunno if you guys knew this but I consider her the best girl. I adore the romance here, and her perfect proportions and womanly figure are top-tier. Also this is an interesting twist- I wonder how they’d “take over”. Also interesting that Elianna would probably join her in opposing it. But mainly Nadine is waifu.
ScuzzBucket
2021-05-07 01:11:55 +0000 UTCRight uh that last panel. Wut?!
Jariah Synn
2021-05-07 00:53:29 +0000 UTCIt will work if on the next page he has a 'wuh?' face.
Licorice Lain
2021-05-07 00:52:50 +0000 UTCFascinating. I love that she couldn't talk about it till all her needs were met.
GregD
2021-05-07 00:52:06 +0000 UTC
