This Romantic World Page 4
Added 2018-03-09 02:31:10 +0000 UTCIn my writing I do my best to avoid the dreaded "ret-con," which is to change things already established earlier in the story. Continuity is important to me but the need to alter something has still reared its head once or twice.
My case in point here is that if I was going to portray Warren as a stammering nerd who's taken aback by a classmate making very forward advances on him, I probably shouldn't have introduced him to have once been dating Bria, who is supposed to be one of the hottest girls in a school full of hot girls.
But there are variables I could bring to my defense. What if him landing such a hot girlfriend was a one-time fluke? What if his confidence took a hit after she cheated on him and now he's awkward around girls again? (Excluding Morgan of course, as he thinks of her as one of the guys.) What do you guys think? Is this something I should explain in the comic or would this idea never have occurred to you if I hadn't brought it up? As always I'd love to hear your feedback.
Comments
You know, Warren was always kinda an important character but I never thought hed become a main character.
Lord Washington
2018-03-11 04:26:45 +0000 UTCSure is! :)
Reinbach
2018-03-10 22:23:20 +0000 UTCAh so this is in the same universe as Switch.
Kudos707
2018-03-10 15:36:00 +0000 UTCVery true, but I think I will explore some of what happened with them a bit more later in the story.
Reinbach
2018-03-10 00:07:57 +0000 UTCHonestly, even after dating Bria, I can still seeming him being reduced to a stammering idiot by a hot girl suddenly propositioning him. Given how emotional his relationship with Bria was, I'm guessing they weren't banging on the first date, let alone over something as little as homework.
Skink
2018-03-09 22:28:07 +0000 UTCThat sounds cool! I love the whole "expanding the wider world" aspects of it. Maybe non-sexual Bria wanted to get with the most non-threatening guy possible? She certainly cheated on him easily enough! I think a dick was inside her on her third page :).
ScuzzBucket
2018-03-09 21:37:10 +0000 UTCThat it could! :)
Reinbach
2018-03-09 15:06:32 +0000 UTCFor what it's worth I don't think you'll be disappointed. :D
Reinbach
2018-03-09 15:06:10 +0000 UTCSounds like a conversation for Warren and Morgan to have actually, as soon as I can work it in. :)
Reinbach
2018-03-09 15:05:38 +0000 UTCYeah I think it's settled then, I'll make it quick but still work it in somewhere. :)
Reinbach
2018-03-09 15:04:44 +0000 UTCFor sure, though I don't want to dwell too much on it. I think Bria's cheating on Warren got more than enough melodrama in Switch so I don't want to linger on it too long here.
Reinbach
2018-03-09 15:03:54 +0000 UTCHonestly, if warren is going to be a major player for this comic, then I think it's worth half a page at least to give a few lines explaining where his confidence may have faltered. Grated, it may never have been his confidence that landed Bria in the first place. It's sad yet, quite commonplace, for girls who start dating guys for "comfort" to find themselves cheating on him later.
Lux
2018-03-09 10:37:13 +0000 UTCYeah, I reckon you should address it. Maybe even talk about how Warren got to date Bria in the first place.
Vitrumist
2018-03-09 09:22:37 +0000 UTCYeah, it really has a lot of character to it. Very subtle but noticeable- she's got this "UGH" look on her face. Like she can't believe Warren did that, or she's annoyed by Liz's presence still.
ScuzzBucket
2018-03-09 08:43:14 +0000 UTCMaybe have one of the girls talk about how much Bria cheating on him messed him up, yeah. Might be a good idea.
Lord Washington
2018-03-09 08:05:13 +0000 UTClike where this is going
alex baker
2018-03-09 05:07:31 +0000 UTCThat all sounds very feasible as the trauma of having such a hot babe as Bria for a girlfriend just to have her cheat on you without remorse would do it :-) I think his answer could be very interesting and defining ;-)
Bob Fink
2018-03-09 04:51:33 +0000 UTCRight on man. :)
Reinbach
2018-03-09 04:49:03 +0000 UTCWell said! I'm inclined to agree. :D
Reinbach
2018-03-09 04:48:54 +0000 UTCGlad Morgan stood out to you here. It's strange but that tiny little panel of her might be my favorite one on the whole page.
Reinbach
2018-03-09 04:48:20 +0000 UTCHaha! Fuck yeah, I love it.
keithbungle
2018-03-09 04:36:59 +0000 UTCWell, it is my guess, no matter how many blowjobs you have received and mind ripping high school hottie sex you have had, when someone that looks like Liz just puts it out there you’re gonna sputter a bit while your brain and dick fight it out!
asstro
2018-03-09 04:35:45 +0000 UTCI felt he seemed somewhat natural. He was REALLY annoyed at Casey, to the point where Bria scolded him to "be nice" and never to say "crazy" in front of her. Arguably the most "normal" person in a pretty messed-up world :). But yeah, he's the most cuckolded male of the Switch-verse. His big "crime" was not being forceful enough with a girl who didn't let on she wanted to be dominated/controlled. The universe rewarded him with Jonah- poor dude didn't MeToo his girlfriend, and look what happened :).
ScuzzBucket
2018-03-09 04:06:55 +0000 UTCI remember we all thought she was autistic when he showed the first Introductory Pin-Up, so he decided to shift her around a bit. She STILL feels really "off" to me, but it could be one of those ambiguous disorders... or just comedic weirdness. Comedy runs better if the characters are just vaguely weird :). But then, I read autism into everybody online. Even myself (*compulsively creates another list, then writes another essay-length response to a one-page comic*).
ScuzzBucket
2018-03-09 04:04:33 +0000 UTCBJs for homework? Oh Jane- you haven't even made a full debut yet, and you're already breaking my heart :). Is it weird that I was totally thrown by the assertion that whoring for favors was so common, lol? I mean, I know Casey was up to that, and multiple teachers are boinking students, but I was like "WUHHHHHH???". I think I have to reassess my personal morality scale, vis-a-vis TRW, because I keep needing to remind myself that these people operate on a different level. Otherwise, Jane, Liz & Warren will all seem like terrible, TERRIBLE people :). Warren: I can buy it. Liz IS putting him on the spot in front of Morgan, especially. Bria's cheating may have shaken him. Though yeah, he IS a bit nervous for someone who once put it in Bria's ass :). But if he's trading homework for BJs, then what was once the most sympathetic male of the Switchverse may not be sol golden after all! The body language is BEYOND excellent here. Warren is nervous, Liz is all awkwardly laid out but blank-faced, and Morgan looks TOTALLY annoyed or nonplussed by Liz's assertion of Jane/Warren. Like she's all "YEAH, IT'S TRUE. WHAT OF IT?" I'm liking her a lot in these updates. Liz's dialogue is fucking fantastic. "Mad Phat Hyped" had me rolling. She's SO goddamn weird :).
ScuzzBucket
2018-03-09 04:01:57 +0000 UTCThough he did seem a tiny bit weak even while he was with her.
Dantels
2018-03-09 03:26:57 +0000 UTCCool! He's a bit more of a shrimp now than he was in Switch, as I recall I drew him fairly toned as well back then. But I feel like this look fits him way better. :)
Reinbach
2018-03-09 03:20:30 +0000 UTCI really enjoy Warrens design
Sega-Boy
2018-03-09 03:18:43 +0000 UTCMakes sense. Bria wasn't all that sexual when she was introduced for sure.
Reinbach
2018-03-09 02:56:42 +0000 UTCAgreed, that kind of thing can really rattle you.
Reinbach
2018-03-09 02:56:03 +0000 UTCI totally hear what you're saying. The best thing I can reply with at the moment is that it's intentional. I WANT her to seem off. This ties to what I was saying last week about how in retrospect I wondered if she was really the best one to feature so early on. But there's no going back now!
Reinbach
2018-03-09 02:55:13 +0000 UTCAlso want to add that the way Liz looks and the way she speaks don’t match up to me. She has no expression on her face but she’s using words like “yo” and “mad phat hyped”. It just feels off.
Angelo
2018-03-09 02:51:03 +0000 UTCI do feel like getting cheated on would sorta trash his confidence yeah.
Dantels
2018-03-09 02:42:26 +0000 UTCI would have never thought about it if you hadn’t brought it up. Him dating Bria is definitely believable because she was hot but she hadn’t been corrupted by Casey yet. Now if he had been dating the current slutty Bria, that might have been less believable.
Angelo
2018-03-09 02:37:56 +0000 UTC
