Celestial Smith chapter 37
Added 2025-02-10 18:02:29 +0000 UTCCelestial Smith chapter 37: The Wolf of Ice crest
Wrote as much as i could in the car as we went and did the rest on my phone. Found a hotel, real work starts tomorrow then more travel
I once more want to apologize for having to leave you for a week. The picture above are an approximate from chat gpt on what the "special" cannons look like and the energy they unleash. Obviously the second pic isn't accurate as its supposed to be the cannons in the gunports firing. I wasn't really set on what it is they fired. Magical energy? Plasma? Magical plasma? Its just devastating and most ships of the line for the north have these special cannons. Owens flagship is mostly them.
I also would like to apologize. Despite the praise you give for my writing(I have mentioned this on QQ) English is not my first language. Swahili is, as i am from Africa. Kenya to be exact While speaking English is easy. writing is hell, especially when you have to do conversations and descriptions.
Many words and sentences go through google translate or DEEPL before i post and then sometimes i must write a description on things like Grammarly because even i know they sound like trash and the English is bad and needs correction. The whole firing sequence for the cannons sucked so badly i had to ask for a description chat gpt then write in my own words which DID NOT translate well to swahili. But i managed to get help from a work friend who's better at writing than me and is travelling with my group.
I apologize in advance. The story is in my head. Typing it out is the problem (I write nsfw. You can imagine how long inspiration takes to find when you know half of it will be translated trash and ill have to fix it. I have had to resort to asking for outlines to help write those stories)
If i still have your support after you know i am not all that good, i appreciate it and these 9k words are my gift and apology. If not, thank you for your support and better authors need your help more than me.
Until next week, see you then.
Comments
Most likely what will happen is that one of the southern houses will try and buy it. I can see Tywin trying to buy it and force Jon into a marriage with his bastard niece joy or someone not really straegically important to tying the North to the South. At least, that's how I would view it as what could happen. Jon wouldn't really be in a position to refuse as he's a bastard and Ned would be pressured to accept by Robert and others in the south. It'd be harder to refuse due to the fact that Tywin would be offering to elevate Jon to a truly highborn.
SwitchandSwap
2025-02-13 14:49:14 +0000 UTCOne thing i think he should focus on with such a huge war, would be the building of railroads across westros, as it would reduce logistical nightmares by a lot and reduce the time it takes to get between the provinces for mobilization.
Ben Lockwood
2025-02-13 04:18:12 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter. You truly go over and beyond for your readers. I wish you luck with your project at work. Also damn, what’s gonna happen to Red Rain now. Compared to the Northmen’s gear, it’s basically little more than an uncommon weapon drop from an above-average enemy. Maybe Owen can take it apart for research or something.
ShinySpiritomb
2025-02-11 02:37:40 +0000 UTCI think the wording flows quite well, so for being translated you are doing an excellent job getting it into a workable state.
Talsen
2025-02-11 00:13:31 +0000 UTCOwen: "Jon, why'd you do that?" Jon: "Owen, these men chose their own destiny." Owen: "No, you put your damn sword in with all the blood on it! Oils alone are gonna corrode the blade of a normal weapon, make it rust, dullen it, lessen the value. And it fucks up the scabbard and fills it with gore." Jon: "I'll clean the blade later." Owen: "Oh, thats fine, and maybe- I'll wipe my ass later." (Those who understand the reference are awesome)
Fire_Fox2590
2025-02-10 23:38:32 +0000 UTCYou are releasing this fast with this quality without relying on AI to write everything for you? Props for the effort and thanks for the chapter. You can also look for beta readers to help you smooth out anything or to bounce AI/Grammarly results off of to improve more as learning why those tools made those changes can help learn the 'rules' of English writing.
Alex I
2025-02-10 23:16:27 +0000 UTCThank you for the chapter
Tyler Karp
2025-02-10 22:39:57 +0000 UTCThank you for the chapter and tbh you are way better than some authors who i know were born in english writing countries, the fact that you go to so much effort to make this story understandable and enjoyable for us readers and post regularly is deeply appreciated by me and i assume your other patrons
Jamie Celtic
2025-02-10 22:38:23 +0000 UTCYou haven't made the common annoying mistakes with English grammar, such as properly using you're, your, their, there etc. English is hard even for native speakers, and fortunately, English for the most part is "auto-corrected" in our heads, even if you make a spelling error.
Rival
2025-02-10 21:58:00 +0000 UTCThis was amazing, also I don’t notice any glaring mistakes any that I do see I normally gloss over and probably fall under any number of literary exceptions that the English language has, honestly with how most rules in writing boil down to “it works like this except when it doesn’t and even if it does you can ignore it if it works better with your style” you’re fine (though don’t take writing advice from me I’m terrible at grammar and English is my first language). Onto more of the story the world is slowly getting a taste for how powerful the north has become and they still are just scratching the surface
DreadRogue
2025-02-10 19:33:26 +0000 UTCI haven't seen any mistakes that are too crazy, it's mostly been just small grammar things that after years of reading Fan-fictions I've learned to correct in my head for the most part. I love the story and can't wait to see where you take it from here and how the North develops going forward
Cmols897
2025-02-10 18:54:29 +0000 UTCJon is fucking badass.
Iori Daemona Angel
2025-02-10 18:52:10 +0000 UTCMy guy, this is some of the better written content on QQ. You are killing it, I had absolutely no idea this was a translated work. If you are really worried about it (you shouldn’t be) have you considered finding a beta reader?
thevolunteer
2025-02-10 18:31:52 +0000 UTCI would have never known English wasn't your first language, so it's all good to me.
Vincent Mason
2025-02-10 18:29:57 +0000 UTCNo worries at all brother. I know how hard it is to put ideas into paper. I dropped my fic because the ideas I had in my head sounded fantastic then when I typed them out they turn out to be absolute dogshit. But reading your fic I see that its well written and entertaining. I do feel that it could have expanded on some other areas but thats just my personal opinion. Also Im here to fill the hole in us caused by GRRM not writing the Winds of Winter. So in regards to your story, its not meth but I suppose crack will do. Sincerely, An admirer of your work from Nepal.
Pasang Sherpa
2025-02-10 18:22:43 +0000 UTCBeautiful... Absolutely beautiful. Both the pictures and the update itself. Thank you for your amazing work. It's always been a highlight of my day, reading what you write.
Slayer 10321
2025-02-10 18:16:55 +0000 UTC
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