Writing Contest: Final Poll
Added 2025-08-20 19:05:22 +0000 UTCHi everyone!
Here we are with the last event of this contest! The Poll of Truth!
Ok, not so dramatic, please dedicate an applause to all the participants who chose to partecipate in this contest. You guys are all amazing!
So, without furhter ado... read the stories and vote for your favorie!
Comments
For my own story, I can recognize couple instances that I could have made the sentence shorter/flow smoother, and a forgotten word in the second half. I also regret that I hadn’t described Reaunet’s age and physical appearance as quickly as I could have, potentially leading to some confusion for the readers. Although I am otherwise proud of my excellent grammar and spelling, and the way I’ve managed to keep the various characters reasonably in character. I do hope that my humour has landed with the readers as intended, and that I never bore you guys with any of the exposition. If anyone disagrees with what I’ve said, or wish to add their own input, either for my own story or someone else’s, I welcome any debate or comments! Thank you again for all votes, everyone! And I hope we will all continue to grow as authors!
Chloe Tkach
2025-09-01 01:38:54 +0000 UTCHalf Breed Chronicles Cons: 1) An excessive use of pure exposition, when much of the same information could be better passed along by the characters talking and interacting with each other directly. While some exposition will always be necessary, it will never be as interesting, or keep a reader’s attention, as conflict or dialogue does. 2) Minor spelling mistakes, most prominent in the lengthy speech Imina gives her dad. Or the unnecessary capitalization of “Bow,” “Jobs,” and “Maybe” in the second half. 3) The random changes of POV. It’s frankly jarring, and the same information is easily done in the third POV you’ve stuck to for most of the story. 4) While the use of dashes or quotation marks are both grammatically correct, I suggest you pick only one of them for dialogue. 5) Some of your larger paragraphs are better served split into smaller ones. Pros: 1) Complex emotions and inter-character relationships. It was a delight to follow Imina in her journey, and to witness her change of feelings in regard to her dad. 1.2) There was realism in the way she was unable to properly bond with her fellow kids, and the confusion and horror as her worldview shifted at the end. Very good. 1.5) it’s always gratifying to see characters get development/grow as a person, and you not only set up an excellent stage for Imina, but successfully pulled it off. 2) Other than what I’ve states prior, your grammar and spelling is overall decent. 3) Best ending I’ve read for the other stories. It fills the readers with a sense of pride and hope for Imina’s future.
Chloe Tkach
2025-08-31 22:56:17 +0000 UTC
