Asgard Awakening working blurb
Added 2018-11-28 11:05:21 +0000 UTCI just penned this but I kind of like it.
Would you be interested in the book if you were new to my work?
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After years of slavery, subjected to torments of body and spirit by the inhuman Kin, Travis Sterling can barely recall his old life. Memories of Earth, and of disappointing his family barely seem real anymore.
But even without the occasional voice in his head, Trav knows he’s different. A vast amount of rune crafting knowledge has mysteriously taken up residence in his mind; too bad he doesn’t have any mystical power. If he could find a way to actually use any rune magic, his situation could change.
The stubborn, unbroken man burns for justice, but despite his strange abilities, he stands no chance against the Kin. In the near future, Trav will come face to face with complete destruction--his mettle and creativity will be tested. Will he perish, or will he grasp a chance to shake the foundations of his new world?
*Note: This series was written for adults. Asgard Awakening contains morally grey situations, polyamory, fantasy violence, and slavery. Please do not attempt dangerous rune magic at home.
Comments
I think the first sentence of the third paragraph would work better without the 'unbroken'. For the second sentence, I think 'in the near future' sounds weird. Maybe something like 'When Trav comes face to face with complete destruction, will his mettle and creativity be enough to survive?'
Sean
2018-12-02 21:35:33 +0000 UTCThat third paragraph might need to be reworked
2018-12-02 19:02:49 +0000 UTCI don't like it, but I'm not sure why.
B Thomas
2018-11-29 21:38:54 +0000 UTCI thought about that, but since he thinks about her so often in the first two chapters I thought it might be overkill. It's a good suggestion, though. Thank you
Blaise Corvin
2018-11-29 02:52:05 +0000 UTCBeth is a major motivating factor for Trav, addressing that in passing might be useful too - or not. *shrug* Maybe something like, "Memories of Earth, disappointing his family there, and even the now-dead wife he found in this new world barely seem real anymore."
J B
2018-11-29 01:39:35 +0000 UTCI think you may be right.
Blaise Corvin
2018-11-28 13:05:03 +0000 UTCI don’t think you need the first sentence at all. It’s catchier if you start with the second.
Andrew Davis
2018-11-28 11:31:39 +0000 UTCYeah, I have to say this would definitely catch my attention even is I wasn't already a big fan!
Steven
2018-11-28 11:19:29 +0000 UTC
