Nicole Demara ZZZ Full Dive VR
Added 2024-11-07 06:00:05 +0000 UTCHello Everyone, here is a ZZZ- Full Dive VR/comic/possession thing. It's sort of a mix of a lot of things. The world of ZZZ lends itself well to Full Dive VR already being established and I really like Nicole, so I made this. Hope you all enjoy!
As always thank you for your continued support and patience!
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Much appreciated for considering the feedback. If you need any help or feedback, I am in your discord server and would be happy to help! :) You have a style with the big panel, which you shouldn't discard. But there are some improvements for the dialogue we can do to make it easier to read. I know that "Reincarnated as a Mimic!" was a collab. That formatting was good and clear to read. Since it breaks down the scenes into their own panels and dialogues. As always. Art, story, and humour is a 10 out of 10. Would come again! :)
hiraeth
2024-11-12 05:13:02 +0000 UTCI went ahead and changed two of them around to try and help it. This was intended to have a main pose in the middle of spawning in with the body and then mini side moments of things he did around it, so really only the bottom right needs to be read/seen last, even then it's not too important. I should probably have just lowered the surrounding moments on the page, silly of me to overlook that. This is why editors are helpful. You'd be surprised how much work it is to change that now, so I'll improve on it in the future, like on some things I'm currently making. Just for some bonus insight; there's a balancing act for me of trying to not be messy and unreadable like the first Myla page, and trying to not be awkward and empty like the "D.va x Reinhardt" or "body trainer". Anyways, Thanks for bringing it up.
Tabneto
2024-11-10 10:22:35 +0000 UTCHey Tabneto, sometimes it can be difficult to know the order of the dialogue. The bottom panel mainly combines all the drawing and I'm having a hard time following the order of the dialogue since they are all together. The single panels are great for breaking up dialogue so no problems there.
hiraeth
2024-11-10 07:02:08 +0000 UTC
