Disintegrity 111 remade !
Added 2019-07-04 00:58:20 +0000 UTCThis is another page where absolutely nothing remains of the old one. It's all new, fully remade. There was nothing worth saving on the old one... It's not a page I remembered being bad, mostly because it's not a page I remembered at all.
So what changed ? Nothing much, it's just better drawn really. But some details matter I think. I added some little sweat drops cos they're supposed to have just come out of multiple intense buttcoitus. We see Zee's butt better in panel 1 because Zee has a nice ass and I thought it was worthwhile to show that out once more.
In the old panel 2, I wanted Larsen to seem like he was rubbing his head against Zee's sensually but it didn't really came through. I don't know if it comes through much better in the new panel 2 but I tried, added a bt of puffy cheek to Zee and put their head to the same level instead of one in front of the other.
Between then and now, one thing that changed a lot with my art is that I tried to add full-body scenes to my pages a lot more often. In fact most pages I draw have at least one of them. In the old panel 3, it was almost fullbody but not quite, and it looked cramped. So I rectified that, along with Larsen's face in particular. I don't know how much it shows on the old panel 3 but zooming in, Larsen's face is just terrifying there.
It's hardly better in old panel 4 tho. It's again something I tried to rectify with my art since, not giving my character massive fucking peepers. The fact that this is better in new panel 4 might help you forget that I didn't draw Zee's strand hair that usually stick out !
Comments
To think I could have made a comic where they just rub cheeks instead or buttcheeks and people would have liked it anyway, I wasted my time learning how to draw bums...
RodVonBoche
2019-07-08 00:54:06 +0000 UTCIf I had drawn the hair strand, I probably would have moved the characters more to the center-bottom of the page rather than the current right-bottom, that way the hair wouldn't have interefered on panel 3. But anyway thanks for the compliments !
RodVonBoche
2019-07-08 00:49:39 +0000 UTCYeah, there's some other panel with big sofas. I should be more careful but I honestly don't like drawing background soooo my standards are looooow
RodVonBoche
2019-07-08 00:46:58 +0000 UTCugh the cheek rub is so cuuuuuute.
matt
2019-07-04 21:28:51 +0000 UTCVery well done, indeed! I wouldn't agree, though, with that "absolutely nothing" remains of the old page: It's the text - which I might even call "lyrics" (being the words going along with the artform "song" usually, but here it's the words with the artform "drawing") - that remains the same. Don't underestimate the words, they can destroy a scene well painted, but also underline the visual impression. With your art, it's the latter, I still have to find a page where the lyrics don't fit. The missing strand of hair is ok, it would have interfered with panel 3 right above. And the facial expressions are much clearer and expressive. Very well done, indeed.
Eldkatten
2019-07-04 05:40:24 +0000 UTC
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