The Fluffer - Pg. 12
Added 2019-01-25 17:06:02 +0000 UTCI made a big goof on this page, which you may have noticed before me even mentioning it here:
Long story short, I planned this comic out digitally since I can do that now, instead of on sketch paper like I normally do. This allowed me to quickly and easily deal with text instead of the long fiddly way of trying to place and write everything manually. I was enjoying how easy it was to deal with the text so much that I didn't even notice that I wasn't writing in all caps like I had been in every other page until now- and continued to not notice until about half way through inking, at which point it was too late to fix.
So, this page is just going to be lower case and then we go back to all caps going forward. On the plus side, next page we should finally be getting to the good stuff.
It also occurred to me while working on this page that I could have made the story about 100% better if I'd made the tiger girl a complete diva bitch. There's a lot of sympathy for her floating around right now, which makes sense since she did nothing wrong. If she'd have been a terrible person than it would have been almost cathartic to watch her go down. As they say, hindsight is always 20/20, and with me writing these pages one at a time it's leaving room for lots of silly mistakes like that.
When it comes time to do the next comic, I really have to force myself to sit and write it all out entirely before putting pen to paper. If I try starting another comic and haven't got a full script to work from, please fly over to Canada and kick me in the nuts.
Comments
Hopefully! I'm sure I'll find some way to bung 'em up though. x3
Ruaidri
2019-01-28 07:01:52 +0000 UTCYeah. I thought it was a pretty bad error to make the tigress likable and the fox character extremely unlikable. Oh well, learn from your mistakes! I'm sure the next few pages will be fine.
Amber
2019-01-27 14:15:00 +0000 UTCthe horse doesnt care who does it, he just wants to get off
Shadewing
2019-01-26 03:52:15 +0000 UTCThat double-conversation layout worked quite nicely. I was going to say that saving everyone's jobs would redeem Kyle a bit, but that makes little sense considering he's the cause of all the trouble.
2019-01-26 01:44:10 +0000 UTCRu, don't worry, it's fine. I really like how it turned out and personally i don't feel bad for the tigress nor dislike the fennec. She needed a rest from the big guy anyway. Also, coming up with the story on the go can make for some creative plot twists. We like your style so your art will always be enjoyable. (also you can always make the fennec make it up to the tigress)
Leonardo Philipowski Costa
2019-01-26 00:48:01 +0000 UTCThe "double conversation" thing did work out fairly well, but I guess that's due to it mainly being a visual exercise which I'm much better at. The writing side still needs much work, heh. I do feel it probably would have been better if she was hateable and the horse guy was overall nicer. A lot of people are not so into this because they just don't like the fennec anymore, 'cause he's not exactly been the best guy, haha. It would also help drive the story forward in a way that makes more sense... I think it would just smooth over a lot of the rough patches in general, personally. But I am glad you're enjoying it the way I did it, it is nice to know I haven't messed it up so bad that it's unreadable. x3 Thanks man!
Ruaidri
2019-01-25 17:32:21 +0000 UTCYeah, I definitely plan on getting some feedback on the writing side of the next one. As far as I'm aware, all good writers have an editor, so the bad ones like me could probably benefit from one too. x3
Ruaidri
2019-01-25 17:27:54 +0000 UTCHonestly if you want a bit of help with the story I or others here would be happy to help really! Maybe having others read the story could help with some of the problems like with the woman!
Askareth
2019-01-25 17:21:25 +0000 UTCI think the dialogue blocking on the page worked out really well! Each panel essentially is telling two stories but they flow really well and as a reader I'm aware of what's going on in both without getting confused. As for the personality of the Tiger actress... I'm personally happy you didn't make her completely dislikable. It adds an extra moral dimension and sparked some really good discussion. It's also a bit of a story set up trope in regards to easily painting the characters as the ones the audience should be rooting for and against, rather than doing it in more subtle and personal ways. Anyways, I think you've made some good decisions even if they weren't completely intentional! But definitely try scripting out the whole story first before diving in, I'm interested to see the difference in both storytelling and your personal happiness with the end product.
Bloudin Ruo
2019-01-25 17:17:37 +0000 UTCI was actually trying before I started this one, I wanted to do a hypnosis themed comic, but I'm so bad at the writing process that I got frustrated and gave up and did this instead. x3 I'd been working at it for a while and was kind of tired at it and just wanted to start drawing something again. So impatience, mostly... but I really can't let it happen again, the story really does suffer for it!
Ruaidri
2019-01-25 17:17:12 +0000 UTCI'm curious, why haven't you planned your comics entirely rather than page-by-page?
Askareth
2019-01-25 17:08:28 +0000 UTC
