A Helping Hand - Page 10
Added 2018-06-19 00:11:34 +0000 UTCSo I've been doing a thing where I don't necessarily draw parts of the background even in scenes where they should be visible- it's a way to speed up the arting process on these comic pages, saves some time and work. As an example, we'd obviously see some of the couch and a little bit of the buck's leg at least in the first panel, but I didn't think putting that in would really add much anything, so I just left it out and went with the basic BG colour of the room.
How does this work out? Look alright, not too distracting or confusing?
Also, this page is another good example of me going "Uh, how do I get these guys to shut up and get back to fucking?". Not too smoothly as it turns out- I couldn't think of anything subtle that would work without adding a bunch more pages of comic, so I just said fuck it and went back to it. It's not the greatest writing ever, probably pretty close to the worst actually, but I hope that doesn't bother y'all too much. x3
As always, would love to know your thoughts!
Comments
Don't worry, not drawing unnecessary details is pretty standard in comics. Also your writing is perfectly fine. It may not be super high quality, but it's still very enjoyable and that's what matters. Also, Gale is absolutely adorable in the third panel.
Rhewlif
2018-06-19 07:14:17 +0000 UTCYou're doing great Ruaidri, don't be so hard on yourself! The writing is not bad, you've managed to make these characters quite likeable in just 10 pages. The dialogue feels very natural, and that must be hard to do for an S&M fantasy story. Gale and Blue's description of the appeal is spot on. Blue is so cocky and shameless, they make a cute pair ~
Nana Lu
2018-06-19 04:49:32 +0000 UTCIt's not that I'm afraid of it, it's more that this is only very partially funded and I can't afford to spend three months working on a ton of plot points. I kinda need to wrap things up and get back to normal work at some point. :P Gale is able to get off on just getting fucked real good so it does happen occasionally!
Ruaidri
2018-06-19 02:43:42 +0000 UTCI didn't even notice you'd missed stuff out. And I also don't think you should be afraid of plot. There will always be time for fucking later. Also - green boy gets to cum? Increasingly unlike my own relationship. ;)
Lion Panthera
2018-06-19 02:38:15 +0000 UTCHey, thanks! I personally would've liked the transitions from talking to 'action' to be a little more natural, but if it turns out nobody minds how I did it, I'd definitely be happy enough. :P
Ruaidri
2018-06-19 01:04:23 +0000 UTCAh, good good! Happy to hear that.
Ruaidri
2018-06-19 01:03:09 +0000 UTCI didn't think anything was off with the writing/plot at all. I like how he interjected and brought the point back around. I can't wait to see the next page!
2018-06-19 00:35:54 +0000 UTCthe standard background works great for me. like you said, it would be background noise anyway so we're not missing anything.
arcticfox12x
2018-06-19 00:15:41 +0000 UTC
