WIP page 15
Added 2017-10-17 21:09:13 +0000 UTCReminder: This will be finished before October 30.
Comments
thanks :D
Blitzdrachin
2017-10-17 21:38:45 +0000 UTCIn the last pannel "thing your packing" should be "thing you're packing". You can also somewhat change the sentence to "This thing you're packing is an absolute monster, Jake." instead of how his name is there in the middle of it now to make it sound a little better. The 2nd time the word 'your' is used, in the last sentence, ("your family name") is okay. :3
asafk8
2017-10-17 21:14:43 +0000 UTC
