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[ideas post] after-hours 14 page 2 up. what's next

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[ideas post] after-hours 14 page 2 up. what's next

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whose to say Bonnie didn't bring her own toy? just in case she had some alone time.

Arukath Hellsaint

The peephole being used from the other side seems like a given. Is it big enough to be used as a gloryhole as well?

Eliamour

Probably skipping the improv toy idea, since it's an extra page of her digging it up and using it, only to get discarded later. Plus some people ain't keen on putting random stuff in vaginas. I like the idea that Fel knows about the peephole. Maybe it's something she and Al discovered after Mugger left? So when Fel goes to check on Bonnie, she notices the wall socket is poorly replaced and knows what's been going on.

Mr Ru

Yeah I was thinking when Fel and Al get to sex is when Bonnie moves to fingering.

Mr Ru

Cool with everything here, I also think we need to polish the ending a bit more xP but we're just starting! We got time to figure it out.

Kenno Arkkan

for page 3 has to be the blow job or 69 page

Arukath Hellsaint

i like these but for the end how about Al and Fel find bonnie in the morning still sleeping naked or however she is in the climax page, Al discovering the peep hole and Fel admiting she knew about it and not mentioning it cause she liked Mugger/anyone who stayed over watching.

Arukath Hellsaint

I'm trying to jot down ideas for the rest of the story might go but it's hard to keep under 8 pages and I want to know what people think. -Bonnie moves from rubbing to fingering to using an improv toy, cums hard and accidentally alerts Fel. -Bonnie hastily covers up as Fel comes out to check on her, notices the shorts on the floor and decides to leave Bonnie a 'growing up' present. -The coast is clear and Bonnie finds a box with a proper toy inside. She uses it whilst Fel and Al resume fucking and goes through different positions, maybe even pulling the bed away to kneel on the floor. -Not sure on the ending. The 'morning aftermath' thing is overdone but I could imagine Fel getting up and finding Bonnie still going like the energiser bunny. Like I said we'd probably go over 8 pages to cover it all, especially if Bonnie's taking the toy slow. Maybe cut out the improv toy or Fel's present?

Mr Ru

Page 3 could be a mix of Fel/Al peepshots, closeups of Bonnie as things get heated (mouth dry and panting, nipples poking through her shirt, crotch of her shorts looking wet/clingy) and progressive shots of her hands feeling around under the covers as she rolls on her back and spreads her legs. Ending with her circling her clit through her shorts.

Mr Ru

It is wrong that I want to see a full on French kiss between Fel and Al with a full-on x-ray of the tongue twist. I believe a slightly rougher-textured feline tongue against a regular human's might make for interesting imagery.

MaveriKat


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