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afterhours 12 p1 up. ideas for next page

Added 2015-11-05 04:20:43 +0000 UTC

According to the initial script, what happens next is:

Door opens. a tall, athletic but busty, curvy woman opens the door, the woman still has the motorcycle helmet on so you don't see her face. She's wearing tight yogapants and a "Fantazzy Pizzeria" shirt and jacket.

Pizza girl: "Are you liz? You ordered two pizzas, right? It's going to be... 20 bucks"

Liz, taking a good look at the girl and blushing: Oh... let me go for my purse...

While liz goes for that, Baghy sitting on the living room looks at the door, and looks stranged.

Bagheera: (...she looks, familiar...) Come on in darling... close the door. we're wild felines, but we don't bite...

Liz comes back, grabs the two pizza boxes, opens the first one: "Oops, i'm afraid we're out of cash miss... is there any other way to repay you? (super duper cheesy porn moment here)

In that moment, liz looks at the actual pizza she opened.

LIz: "wait a second, we ordered extra sausage! These are CHEESE PIZZAS!"

In that moment, the pizza girl grabs the boxes, lifts them a bit, so the "camera" gets a look at her crotch.

Pizza girl: "No they aren't"

closeup to her crotch, as she had a huge bulge between her legs all along! it was just covered by the pizza boxes.

Baghy stands up from the couch.

"Wait a minute, I've seen that bulge before... f-Fel?"

The pizza girl takes the helmet off: OH! Bagheera! Liz! it's you guys! haha I couldn't see shit through this helmet!! How you've been?"

I think that should give us good 6 frames or so. This is just the skeleton of the page, if you find a way to improve anything, better dialogue, better sequence of actions, or do something different to get to the same point, leave your ideas below!