Speed Deemon
Added 2024-07-28 00:13:14 +0000 UTC(
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Fantastic critique. We agree with you about this story. It got a lot more plot heavy for the amount of erotica in it, but the balance didn't fully go toward the plot. To fully deal with a failure/success cycle and have this be truly more about plot than erotica, it probably would've needed to be 2-3x as long. We would have outlined it a bit differently as well. We're very glad that people find it so enjoyable despite what it lacks, however. We're hoping to have more stories like this in this series, but balance more toward plot (as we get our feet under us on this project / story world) so that it's less of a situation like the situation in this story where it's unclear as to whether it's just erotica or a plot-driven story with erotica in it.
Zmeydros
2024-07-29 16:55:19 +0000 UTCI liked this story. It's interesting but I'm not a fan of how sparse it was. To clarify, when I read this story. I found more story than I expected. Which I was quite pleased to see. But because of that, I was disappointed by how light or not dense the story itself was. For example, Dee and Ea found solutions to problems much faster and easier than I expected. Additionally, the dragon lady appearing at the end seemed to be more of a convenient plot resolution than anything notable. Given, these expectations might be completely unfounded if the story was written with the intent of being a simple story and/or erotica. If that's the case disregard everything I've said. But, I feel like the story was written with a greater focus on plot than erotica. I really liked this and would love to see more.
Lupusvir
2024-07-29 14:46:58 +0000 UTC
