sports gym
Added 2020-07-05 17:08:49 +0000 UTCthank you for proofreader "erotrap" ところでツイッターのエロ垢また作りました。 my new hentai twitter account. https://twitter.com/abubu_neonanka
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2020-07-15 00:28:45 +0000 UTCthank you so much! I'll fix now.
あぶぶ
2020-07-07 10:39:53 +0000 UTCSaimin
勇者ブ
2020-07-06 12:09:37 +0000 UTCとてもすばらし…！
エックス
2020-07-05 22:31:54 +0000 UTCインスタ目的だからね。仕方ないね！セクササイズもサービスだし仕方ないね！ ﾔｯﾀｰ! お帰りなさい！
にゃんにけ
2020-07-05 21:43:07 +0000 UTCJust proof-read from your English version. 僕の日本語が下手ですから^^; I included notes to explain. "H-Hey, what are you doing? Stop being weird." <-- in English, we wouldn't use 'funny' in this way. Also, 'you can't do <adjective> things' is not really incorrect, but it's not a natural way to say it. "Don't worry miss, we need your naked photo for our gym's Instagram." <-- maybe missus instead of miss (because she's married), but either is fine. 'Ms.' doesn't work because it's a title, so it would need her name as well (as in "Ms. Nownanka"). "Oh my... alright. Make it quick." <-- no problem here. "Thank you miss! Wow, our followers will really like your nice huge nipples." <-- You could write the second sentence as 'Wow, your nice huge nipples are what our followers need.', but it's less natural I think. "What did you say?" <-- no problem here "Nothing. Come on, take all of her clothes off." <-- 'all' needs to come before the possessor 'her'. 'of' isn't necessary, but it's more natural.
erotrap
2020-07-05 18:41:59 +0000 UTC
