Hilda Boreas Greyrat(Wip)
Added 2023-05-24 05:28:59 +0000 UTCGuys if you have better dialouges or story relating dialouges, please write down below or message me.
And also you can correct if you feel some words cringe or bad. I won't mad about it.
Comments
Thank you Lumos.
Cyberboi
2023-05-24 15:33:49 +0000 UTCdude the dialogue makes this so much hotter 😫😫
Lumos
2023-05-24 13:06:52 +0000 UTCNo problem! I apologise for the wall of text, I just wanna add that I'm really admiring your productivity. Fantastic stuff! I'm glad to be able to help out a little bit with the technical text stuff. :)
The Dank Demon
2023-05-24 12:32:27 +0000 UTCThanks for pointing me. It's really helpful.
Cyberboi
2023-05-24 09:48:50 +0000 UTCDialogue corrections/suggestions; Page 1. " Oh my... How did you even get this big? " " The smell is starting to hit my brain. " " my dick that's full of cheese " Page 2. " I hate doing disgusting things like this... " " tongue " Page 3. (no corrections needed) Page 4. " A...And I've never done anything like this before... not even for my husband. " Page 6. " Wait. You thought it would be that easy to adopt me? " Page 7. " just keep looking into my eyes " Page 8. "the smells keeps hitting my brain... I'm going to lose my mind. " Page 11. " Open your mouth and let me check if you drank it all up or not. " Page 12. " Wow. I'll suggest you freshen up before you talk to your husband with that stinky breath, ma'am. "
The Dank Demon
2023-05-24 09:45:06 +0000 UTCThanks for pointing me out. I gonna fix it.
Cyberboi
2023-05-24 09:43:51 +0000 UTCAwesome. Just on the first one it’d make more sense to say “start cleaning my cheese filled dick,bitch” and “your tongue under that foreskin” on the second page
Kasin
2023-05-24 09:19:46 +0000 UTCThanks
Cyberboi
2023-05-24 06:17:06 +0000 UTCLove the dialog
Kevin
2023-05-24 05:55:04 +0000 UTC
