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Hilda Boreas Greyrat(Wip)

Guys if you have better dialouges or story relating dialouges, please write down below or message me.

And also you can correct if you feel some words cringe or bad. I won't mad about it.

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Comments

Thank you Lumos.

Cyberboi

dude the dialogue makes this so much hotter 😫😫

Lumos

No problem! I apologise for the wall of text, I just wanna add that I'm really admiring your productivity. Fantastic stuff! I'm glad to be able to help out a little bit with the technical text stuff. :)

The Dank Demon

Thanks for pointing me. It's really helpful.

Cyberboi

Dialogue corrections/suggestions; Page 1. " Oh my... How did you even get this big? " " The smell is starting to hit my brain. " " my dick that's full of cheese " Page 2. " I hate doing disgusting things like this... " " tongue " Page 3. (no corrections needed) Page 4. " A...And I've never done anything like this before... not even for my husband. " Page 6. " Wait. You thought it would be that easy to adopt me? " Page 7. " just keep looking into my eyes " Page 8. "the smells keeps hitting my brain... I'm going to lose my mind. " Page 11. " Open your mouth and let me check if you drank it all up or not. " Page 12. " Wow. I'll suggest you freshen up before you talk to your husband with that stinky breath, ma'am. "

The Dank Demon

Thanks for pointing me out. I gonna fix it.

Cyberboi

Awesome. Just on the first one it’d make more sense to say “start cleaning my cheese filled dick,bitch” and “your tongue under that foreskin” on the second page

Kasin

Thanks

Cyberboi

Love the dialog

Kevin


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