Bring on the Leisure! [Prologue] (Revised)
Added 2024-02-19 18:30:49 +0000 UTCComments
Amazingly good start!
Anthony Glenn
2024-06-06 03:56:01 +0000 UTCSeriously good job on the rewrite here. Tallum no longer feels like a caricature, but a really person with an inner life. Plenty of space to expand on that moving forward too.
ElectricintheForest
2024-04-01 14:20:59 +0000 UTCI deeply enjoyed reading this opener as it really brings to bare what I see in your work over others. The depth of character, the descriptions that "show dont tell," and the fluidity of the toughts really draw me into the words. Escaping into the world you created was the greatest joy I have had over the past 7 years.
Edward Jeffs
2024-03-11 20:20:51 +0000 UTCI gotta stop writing hate comments man. It’s finally broken the puddle. In all honesty I liked the descriptions of the machine. It really doesn’t feel like they for a lot of people even outside writing.
Whale
2024-02-19 19:51:55 +0000 UTCCannot say i dont feel the same way when reading sometimes
Conrad Manaugh
2024-02-19 19:36:53 +0000 UTCI think I need to add a note at the start hahaha. The Prologue IS supposed to be emotional, but please, I'm doing very well.
PuDDleS4263
2024-02-19 19:18:36 +0000 UTCDid you just provide us a peek behind the curtain? I'm left feeling a bit sad to be honest.
Tsunami
2024-02-19 19:15:50 +0000 UTCit was all of us around 2200-2300 when we screamed for that damned piece of destiny, when everything collapsed and we were out of air and you told us it's all calculated just give me time
Zaoprimo
2024-02-19 19:14:07 +0000 UTCI'll look into it, but I'm pretty sure its not a patreon update. They add the links manually.
PuDDleS4263
2024-02-19 19:12:38 +0000 UTCcan you update patreon so that I can click next and get the next chapter, without having to go and open 10 chapters and then scroll forward and open another 10 chapters and continue like this in a loop? I know it can be done because I've seen it on other patreon writers
Zaoprimo
2024-02-19 19:07:31 +0000 UTCBro for the first half I wasn't sure if I was reading the story or your personal introspection on writing. The web novel part is relatable tho.
Jonah Frazier
2024-02-19 18:39:42 +0000 UTCCorrections
PuDDleS4263
2024-02-19 18:30:59 +0000 UTC
