Chapter 1985
Added 2022-01-31 08:50:32 +0000 UTCComments
Brilliant character development. Obviously I kept turning the pages for good reason. That’s clearly a strength. It seems like the plot meanders and characters or seemingly significant events are left dangling sometimes, which might smooth out with a macro level storyboard arc. Perhaps you’ve done that already, it just isn’t readily apparent to me as a reader.
Ted Burgess
2022-04-12 16:37:20 +0000 UTCFeedback condensed to next post
Ted Burgess
2022-04-11 00:22:09 +0000 UTCThanks for the work. You do character dialogue and development very well. But. Wayyyyy to much fighting at the expense of story development. Omg. I’m skipping and skipping and skipping just trying to make it to something besides endless and repetitive fight scenes. You could easily cut half the chapters and end up with a much more interesting book. Just my two cents.
Steven winton
2022-03-15 01:37:30 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter.
Joshua Little
2022-02-03 09:41:19 +0000 UTCBeatrice was a great choice for a point of view character for this chapter. I really enjoyed it.
Jamie Idle
2022-01-31 21:00:37 +0000 UTCAmazing chapter. Very well done!
Mushiden
2022-01-31 12:03:05 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter
nethernight11
2022-01-31 10:01:15 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter
BlackRazaras
2022-01-31 09:58:23 +0000 UTCLeaving it at this point till Thursday is just cruel.
Chris
2022-01-31 09:58:02 +0000 UTCI can't wait for this version of Ghosthound to go into the nexus. He has evolved
Geozstevenzz
2022-01-31 09:47:46 +0000 UTC"against Helen in the dust" Alana
InsaneHyde
2022-01-31 09:16:37 +0000 UTCCorrections
PuDDleS4263
2022-01-31 08:50:43 +0000 UTC
