Chapter 1764
Added 2021-05-14 01:42:37 +0000 UTCComments
How many times must I cry for Helen? 😭😭😭
Michael Marisa
2021-07-22 16:44:43 +0000 UTCThis chapter was thematically perfect, puddles.
ElectricintheForest
2021-05-14 15:28:22 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter.
Joshua Little
2021-05-14 11:34:04 +0000 UTCBoth use the visage of obsession as the foundation of the narrative.
SunderGoldmane
2021-05-14 08:11:22 +0000 UTCSome feedback on the visage of obsession: I love the fatepiece. I find the concept of exponential sacrifice used as a force multiplier to chase a goal utterly fascinating. It has real world parallels for me. Truly, I love it. That being said, I’m not sure your audience can handle another use of it. I really like how you work through the different sacrifices and how it is unique to the situation but if you decide to use it again I think you will have to use it in even more broad strokes than you are in this current arc. I personally want to see it again but I don’t think narrative will thru e unless you ha r a strong B plot to run in the background next time. Love your work puddles, thanks for the story and Happy Birthday!
SunderGoldmane
2021-05-14 08:09:35 +0000 UTCIt’s the first comment that he makes to every chapter, just type your corrections into the reply of that first comment made by puddles.
SunderGoldmane
2021-05-14 08:03:44 +0000 UTCI know its probably intentional, but this arc feels very similar to the Nether Core creation arc
Kurt A
2021-05-14 07:29:10 +0000 UTCI personally really like the image refinement. The multiple different layers and all that got me really interested.
Raikazzen
2021-05-14 06:38:42 +0000 UTC“Something tried to trample him and then something else tried to melt him with acid. Monkeys had Then Shal had arrived...” Idk what happened there lol
Subliminary
2021-05-14 05:49:49 +0000 UTCGuessing tomorrow’s chapter actually concludes the arc? Honestly I can’t take any more image refinement chapters. Great writing and imagery but I feel as though I am stuck in the visage of obsession, a never ending cycle of verbose flowery language describing details of an image that isn’t even Randidly’s own image.
Subliminary
2021-05-14 05:46:56 +0000 UTCPreemptively typing this message that I expect a DRAMATIC conclusion to this looong drawn out image arc with these two chapters. My expectations are high senior
Subliminary
2021-05-14 05:29:06 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapters
nethernight11
2021-05-14 05:24:57 +0000 UTC'father walked back over to him' him -> her 'So the desolation spread, when those three sparks within her satisfy her baser desires any longer, and completely extinguished the Lizakh' <- this sentence doesn't make sense. Please re-phrase.
Corwin Amber
2021-05-14 04:58:04 +0000 UTCUse the corrections thread that's why he posts it. They're hard to find otherwise
Alexander Dupree
2021-05-14 01:57:12 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapters
Alexander Dupree
2021-05-14 01:56:48 +0000 UTCFirst paragraph: Monkeys had Then Shal had arrived and shown him how to rigorously encourage his acceptance of pain and violence. In his master’s mind, such things were simply a part of life. Not sure about the “Monkeys had” is supposed to flow.
James Hebert
2021-05-14 01:55:05 +0000 UTCCorrections
PuDDleS4263
2021-05-14 01:42:50 +0000 UTC
