Chapter 1761
Added 2021-05-13 03:48:53 +0000 UTCComments
I don’t know how to feel about Randi trying to turn her into a sword to get revenge against wick… Helen dying hit hard, that part felt full of emotion. Ever since the funeral started the progress of the story didn’t feel right(even forced a little bit). Randi wanting revenge against wick is obvious and very reasonable. Him incorporating Helen’s image details into his own image was even a nice surprise. But the problem I have noticed so far… starts with the speech that Randi made… it didn’t feel like enough or emotional(could have been because of the paragraph long interruptions during his speech but, I would say it’s because the speech itself felt lacking. Then there is the intervention that his images made… now that just felt downright wrong. If anything using an outside source to get revenge just doesn’t seem like something Randi would do. That’s just not what Randi’s foundation, as a character, is built upon. Especially when that source is in the form of a sword(this is the part that feels forced). Randi’s character becoming darker due to Helen’s death is reasonable, expected even. But the way Claudette sees herself feels like it changed. A being with no mouth(the features at least) doesn’t scream “observer” swimming within a pond of shadow that watch the ripples above. If anything I see Randi trying his damn hardest(probably even right up until he breaks) to get stronger… maybe even torturing himself with his new fate piece as a form of punishment and way to get stronger. Again though… the intervention with his images does not feel right at all. I don’t think they would have encouraged him to take this path(especially yggdrasil of the 3 images). Anyways that’s just my thoughts.
Kotagi
2021-06-18 05:28:15 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter.
Joshua Little
2021-05-14 03:44:42 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter
nethernight11
2021-05-13 05:56:35 +0000 UTCthe next they would be filled with decaying runes <- ruins
Alexander Dupree
2021-05-13 04:32:31 +0000 UTC1761 “Randidly bared its teeth” “Randidly bared his teeth” “He understood was seeing,” “He understood what he was seeing,” “the meet from these poor” “the meat from these poor”
SunderGoldmane
2021-05-13 04:29:58 +0000 UTC'He understood was seeing' <- re-phrasing needed 'And the meet' meet <- did you mean 'meat'?
Corwin Amber
2021-05-13 04:00:43 +0000 UTCCorrections
PuDDleS4263
2021-05-13 03:49:32 +0000 UTC
