Chapter 1529
Added 2020-09-22 04:36:20 +0000 UTCComments
Who was kallum again? Thanks for the eggs.
Will, of the convictions forge.
2024-06-12 02:44:12 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter
nethernight11
2020-09-22 20:23:30 +0000 UTCsounds like the creation of a black hole
Idan tal
2020-09-22 15:33:35 +0000 UTCSo he’s using extremely high gravity to crack the shell surrounding the ember of a dying world... it sounds almost like the formation of a star
David C
2020-09-22 12:43:20 +0000 UTC“Her bones resonated with the rumbling force that was rumbling through the air“ —> remove the first rumbling
David C
2020-09-22 12:18:51 +0000 UTCcan't wait to see the new and improved Chimera
Nate
2020-09-22 08:35:35 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter.
Joshua Little
2020-09-22 07:33:33 +0000 UTCLast sentence. Consider adding the word “brief” before “moment” to add tension and substance.
Kevin Mendoza
2020-09-22 06:02:08 +0000 UTCEvery more worryingly =>Even more worrisome/disturbing Instead.
Kevin Mendoza
2020-09-22 05:56:29 +0000 UTCAfter it experiencing it. One too many “it’s” remove the it after “after”
Kevin Mendoza
2020-09-22 05:49:32 +0000 UTCOne down four more to realize their limits.
Thundermike00
2020-09-22 05:07:54 +0000 UTCLol the reason why he learned to create that aura is to stop people from murdering him hahaha ah
Alexander Dupree
2020-09-22 04:54:25 +0000 UTCThanks
Luke Scheffe
2020-09-22 04:41:03 +0000 UTCCorrections
PuDDleS4263
2020-09-22 04:36:45 +0000 UTC
