Book 1 on ScribbleHub
Added 2023-08-31 08:14:16 +0000 UTCAll updated Chapters for the newly edited Book 1 is out on ScribbleHub now.
Chapters 1 - 60 has been revamped.
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/699373/a-black-market-litrpg/
Here is the full changelog, though I highly suggest that it is worth a re-read. NOTE: Reading the changelog constitute as a slight spoiler.
Changelog BlackMarket V2.0.1
Chapter 1:
- Grammer and Punctuation Edit
- Improved Fight Scene
- Martial Arts Training -> Martial Arts Expert
- Removed line about Alvin being boy sold by parents.
- Added more ‘bad grammar’ to gang members.
- TTS pass.
Chapter 2:
- Improved inner dialogue from Damian
- Added more details to Ulon’s Healing Necklace
- Clarified that the healing necklace uses internal energy rather than user energy.
- Added Crimson Swords to the East Sector
- Grammar and Punctuation Edit
- Fight Scene fixes – same result of Ulon getting smashed by Kyle.
- Removed Usurper Title
- Removed information about Alvin being boy sold by parents as repayment.
- TTS pass
Chapter 3:
- Damian can now read and write
- Keith can read and write even better.
- More hidden banter between Keith and Damian to show brother bond.
- Added explanation on why Kyle took over the Seven Snakes instead of the Red Lions or the Ardent Cretins right after reincarnation.
- Added section where Kyle tries to assign his free points.
- Added explanation on why Haui does not mass produce potions.
- Removed Kyle’s ability to read labels on herb crates.
- More description of how Kyle earned the potion inspector title. He briefly touched more than a hundred unique potions.
- TTS pass
Chapter 4:
- Made the gang members smarter.
- Added new gang member who tried to stand up to Kyle when Kyle ordered them around. Got beaten up.
- Reaffirmed that cleanliness and disposition to violence are not correlated.
Chapter 5:
- Improved Banter (subjective)
- Changed timeline of production line setup to ‘a week later’ instead of ‘two days later’ for more realistic implementation.
- Added explanation for why Kyle was not too worried about recipe being leaked.
- Emphasized that the production line being set up was nothing new nor fancy – just unexpected for gang members to be doing.
Chapter 6:
- Increased description of night life
- Added paragraph explaining that mass production is not unique to Raktor with factories around.
- More hesitation from Niko with additional dialogue. Same result.
Chapter 7:
- Grammar fix.
- Changed timeline from ‘three days later…’ to ‘a week later’ for more realistic timeline implementation.
- Added small interaction between Keith and Kyle. Kyle notes that despite training for two weeks, Keith had no noticeable muscle growth, writing him off as a fighter.
Chapter 8:
- Grammar and phrasing fixes.
- Better fight scene, same result.
Chapter 9:
- Clarified why contracts are important in the underworld – agreements between gangs affects reputation.
- Fixed Martial Arts Instructor title bonus to something more tangible.
- Elaborated on Kyle’s thoughts about going full murderhobo and its potential consequences.
Chapter 10:
- Added explanation again on why mass production was not in use by alchemists
- More emphasis on existence of Alchemist Guild
Chapter 11:
- Added more description of the drug addiction. Timeline changed slightly for Riker’s addiction period.
Chapter 12:
- Added slight innuendo to Alvin’s backstory.
- Free points error message appears when trying to assign free points to HP, MP or STA
Chapter 13:
- Inner dialog of Wrent slightly reduced
- Italics fixed to show accurate inner dialog
Chapter 15:
- Added additional section to show that Kyle did not expect Sebastian to visit, but instead expected a visit from the enforcers.
- Added more fear into Keith’s actions and motions.
- Changed Kitana’s title mentioned from Priestess to Inquisitor. Removed surname.
- Added dialogue snipping explaining that the Yual military only intervenes in civil affairs on orders from the Duke in charge or the Emperor.
- Added more dialogue lines about inqui
Chapter 16:
- Removed homeless people shagging drunk girls on the streets due to popular complaints. (honestly, it was based on the scene from Peaky Blinders)
- Added hints of Kregol and Perial interfering in military technology stealing
- Added more lines of dialogue explaining that there is an insider in the military as well.
- Added small detail where Baron Cain’s knights have arctech armour
Chapter 16.5
- New chapter inserted.
Chapter 18:
- Added information of the pub being restored.
- Added details of Kyle having plans for Eric’s crew to be slowly integrated
- Added more character to Damian's character
- Added paragraph where Kyle tells Keith to look for casino locations.
Chapter 28:
- Timeline increased, e.g more time allowed for things to happen.
- As of this chapter it has been close to four months.
Chapter 31 :
- The person being threatened is the owner of the factory, not the manager any longer. Makes more sense that way.
- Reaffirms that the daughter was only kidnapped, not tortured.
Chapter 33:
- No more sham bidding by Kyle, the increase in bid is done by Harrison instead.
Chapter 38:
- Timeline since Keith's rescue is increased to two weeks. More time to train for Damian. Clearer anger on his part
- Explicitly stated Sasha’s surprise at the tenacity of Damian.
Chapter 39:
- Added small hints of Nest recruiting mercenaries in Raktor to fight in Versia.
- Added hint of Proco in black market.
Chapter 40:
- More action lines for the family trapped in the fire, with sm
Chapter 45:
- Explicitly stated timeline since then.
- Changed the antagonist who hired the kidnapping of Reese to be Harrison.
Chapter 54:
- Removed scene where Count Leon captures General Javel and General Xan for recorded execution. Shifted to a later chapter. Original Chapter 55 merged into Chapter 54
Chapter 60:
- Reduced to just the dungeon scene: end of Book 1.
Feel free to point out any errors or inconsistencies on discord and here.