The Bellflower Part 9
Added 2019-07-22 23:58:56 +0000 UTCSorry, it's a day late. I really wish that coul
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Yeah, I was figuring it wouldn’t be too long till we start jumping forward in time consistently. My money was down on week skips becoming common, curious to see how that’ll go!
Jennifer
2019-07-27 16:17:30 +0000 UTCSo the way I see it, Penny has something like the formalities of a vampire. She has to be invited. Which is why she doesn't just install herself on Rachel's phone. In Courtney's case, she's first bringing up the upgrade package, but mostly almost in terms of a TOS /vocal confirmation on the record before Courtney actually receives it. Given how things are going, she might not have too too long, but you probably haven't seen the last of her before she gets upgraded. And perhaps bits & pieces after the fact too (haven't determined yet exactly). Glad the contrast stuck out between Court's willingness & Fran's resistance. Was worried it was laid on a little too strong, but in my head, I kind of wanted to almost lay out the two possible scenarios as essentially the two endgames here, while also trying to set Fran up a little more than just this girl Rachel's bumped into a few times. I might do a few of these side chapters here & there once a few others are established & in some cases introduced. Here, we're not going to have much of a substantial jump, but we'll move forward a little in the story & finally get some foreshadowed things out the way. After that, yeah, things will stop happening in such real time & progress a little faster. Thank You!
BNevis
2019-07-27 13:04:20 +0000 UTCI can look into doing something like that in the future maybe, sure.
BNevis
2019-07-27 12:46:12 +0000 UTCWhoof, is it steamy in here or is it just Courtney? It’s sad to know we’ll probably be seeing (or about to see) the last of Courtney, but she went out on a high note. The detail of just how stuck and pressed against the sides of her shower mixed with her reactions was very fun to read. The little details on how the water was building up was a nice touch! Fran was also great. She really does show the nigh impossible task of staying skinny at this place, and how even her is probably teetering on inevitability to a date like Courtney. I think jumping between their perspectives to show not just their differences, but the inherent challenge to the place was absolutely the right choice. These chapters I also think are great “time fillers” if that makes sense? I’d love to see more of them to kind of jump forward in time when necessary. It really feels natural that way, like we’re taking a scenic detour (with many hills and valleys with Courtney ^//^) before we drop back into Holly and Rachel’s expanding waistlines. Good job!
Jennifer
2019-07-26 19:08:35 +0000 UTCactually that got me thinking, not necessarily for the Bellflower, but down the road, you do a Strongfat character. Aka to use Fran as an example, a lady who blimps up to Courtney size but she's both an extreme glutton and a gym rat so underneath all that blubber is a very strong healthy woman.
Chumlee99
2019-07-25 04:14:52 +0000 UTCI think I might've been a little vague, but Fran's just sort of round all over. And all of her gear is too tight because she's stubborn. So a lot of times, people are kind of mostly laughing at the spectacle. But part of her uses that as fuel to keep pushing herself.
BNevis
2019-07-24 23:35:43 +0000 UTCI’d have to go back to see what kind of body type Fran has, but all I could see is one of those very plump ladies who has giant breasts trying to run but her breasts are just going all over the place in a too tight sports bra at the same time her jello bum is just distracting everyone as she runs by. And sounds like Courtney is gonna need some Jerry rig system to like hold her belly so she keep waddling around her place or she just becomes one of those women you see who become a literal mountain of blubber filling up a whole room that just yells at everyone and everything
Chumlee99
2019-07-23 15:01:47 +0000 UTC
