A Soldier's Life - 314 - Demonic Depths (final edit 8-4-25)
Added 2024-12-18 00:46:57 +0000 UTCChapter 314: The Demonic Depths A throaty roar of approvals echoed among the encirclement of Boutan orcs. They would have a new Supreme shor
Chapter 314: The Demonic Depths
A throaty roar of approvals echoed among the encirclement of Boutan orcs. They would have a new Supreme shortly, but Mynasha was not happy. “They have chosen Jhuarkasha to be their next Supreme,” she whispered to me.
“I don’t understand. We go in, cut some horns off some demons, and come out.” I thought we had all the advantages here.
“No. Warlord Rhuuk trained for years to fight the four demons. I never even studied them or how to fight them. We will need to consult with Glasha,” she said worriedly.
We had missed part of the next announcement as we had talked. The Elder finished addressing the assemblage. “They can enter anytime they wish, after sunset.”
“Where is the dungeon entrance?” I asked, leaning in.
“We are standing before it. That stone building was built over it. I believe there is a long set of stairs descending to it, but it takes an hour to descend,” she said as she scanned the crowd for Glasha.
“Wouldn’t that mean the entrance is in the Endless Dark?” I surmised.
“Yes, there are sealed passages to the Endless Dark near the dungeon entrance from what I know.” Mynasha found Glasha, and the crowd parted for us as we moved to her. Glasha’s face was unreadable, and with Tarnasha, we secluded ourselves further away. It looked like Rhuuk and Jhuarkasha were heading back to their longhouse to get supplies and prepare but they had not appeared shocked at the announcement of the third trial.
“What do we need to know?” I asked when we were clear of the mass of orcs.
Glasha did not have the same indecision on her face that Mynasha had. “On entering the dungeon, you will exit into the center of a massive chamber. Red glowstones embedded in the ceiling light it. Lesser creatures from the demon realm wander the main chamber. You will be fine if you do not draw too many to you.”
“I thought demons didn’t exist on Desia?” I questioned. I remembered that Khrusos had said the Titans had sealed the gates when they encountered a planet populated by demons.
Glasha nodded and responded in a serious tone. “True—to an extent. This is one of three dungeons on Desia that I am aware of that spawn demons. Even if they do escape the dungeons, they are sterile. Few ever reach the surface as the denizens of the Endless Dark wisely hunt them with a ferver.”
“Why don’t you destroy the dungeon?” I asked. If the demons were a threat, then it would make sense. Then, I recalled that the Caliphate harvested the horns to make the ink for their tattoos.
“It is complicated,” Glasha said slowly. I eyed Mynasha, who looked away guiltily. Glasha continued, not explaining. “The four demons are in four caves on the perimeter of the central chamber. Each cave glows with a different light: yellow, green, blue, and violet. Each of those chambers holds a different greater demon and will seal you in when you enter.” Glasha caught her breath, and I could tell she was anxious for us.
Mynasha still looked unsure of herself and the trial. “What of the demons? Do you know how to fight them? Will my lightning work on them?”
Glasha spoke slowly as she recalled the knowledge. “Unfortunately, the walls are lined with colored glowstones that will draw your lightning to them—any powerful spells actually. You can use it, but connecting to your target will be much harder. One of the greater demons is completely immune to lighting: the shadow demon. It is the most dangerous of the four. The other three are the ice demon, snake demon, and greater hellhound. All of them have horns, so any two will satisfy the Elders’ trial.”
None of those options sounded appealing, and I had not been educated about demons in Hound training. Glasha did her best to prepare us, lecturing us on how to fight the demons and what dangers to expect in the large cavern. We had hours before sunset, and we could gather all the useful information we could from the Chronicler and Tarnasha.
As we talked, the warlords and clerics started to break into groups and set up camps around the central building. Their slaves and attendants rushed in with tents and tables like they were throwing a tailgate. They clearly planned to wait here for one of us to exit in triumph.
The hours seemed to disappear quickly, and evening came. “You should go,” Glasha suddenly said as the sky was turning to dusk. “The hellhound and snake demon are your best choices.” Glasha was indicating a procession coming down the primary path. Warlord Rhuuk and Cleric Jhuarkasha were returning. I felt mildly prepared as I removed my fire cloak and handed it to Glasha. Mynasha handed hers to Tarnasha, and we walked side by side to the stone building to enter first.
One of the Elders, a gray-skinned orc with a hunched back and pruned features, held open the door on the side of the structure for us. Beyond that were steep stairs descending on worn steps. Blue glowstone sconces illuminated the stairs. I hadn’t known glowstones came in different colors. The stairs were barely wide enough for us to descend side by side, and each step dropped over a foot. As our boots scraped on the stone with each step, a slight echo traveled ahead and behind us.
“It is 2,323 steps to the bottom,” Mynasha said softly. I heard the descent is not so bad; it is the climb after exiting the dungeon that is the killer.” She smiled weakly at her attempt at humor. I just nodded in return, more focused on the task ahead of us. The walls became a patchwork of different stones the deeper we went. A few stones ominously had ancient claw marks embedded in them. A massive hand of some monstrosity must have made them.
The descent went much quicker than I thought, and soon, we stepped onto a large oval landing with a familiar massive flat oily wall on the far side. Two iron doors dominated the right wall. Blue glowstones dominated the wall to our left, making the chamber bright but with an eerie blue light. “I have never been down here,” Mynasha stated in awe. “Those doors continue to the Endless Dark, but I was unaware there was more than one.”
I was focused on the dungeon entrance. “I have never seen a dungeon entrance that size before. It is large enough for a giant—or Titan—to enter easily.” Mynasha didn’t respond but looked apprehensive. Learning she was an otherworlder and yet being forced along in The Choosing had rattled her, not giving her time to process. Maybe she didn’t even want this anymore but was too overwhelmed to realize it. I was not a therapist, but we were too close to finishing.
The echoing footsteps above us indicated we didn’t have much time before the others caught up with us. I drew magebane and stepped into the oily surface of the dungeon entrance.
Glasha hadn’t done the chamber I arrived in justice. The cavernous ceiling stretched high above with large patches of red glowstones placed sporadically. A humid heat washed over us with the scent of the gym locker room. The terrain was modestly rocky, with patches of black lichen and yellow mushrooms. Glasha had warned us about the mushroom spores if you got too close. The spores would create a thick mucus in your lungs and in minutes you would suffocate you. The lichen was edible but didn’t have alchemy uses, at least, any that Mynasha knew of when I asked her.
Lesser demons dominated the red-bathed rocky landscape around us. A bulbous pig man that Glasha called a dretch was closest at just a dozen yards. They were hideous creatures, shorter than me by a head and ugly bulging veins along their rubbery flesh. Sporadic bristly hair made them high on the fugly scale. Its pig-like face turned to us, but we knew we were safe near the only dungeon exit. According to Glasha, there was a halo around the portal that the demons could not encroach on.
My vision caught the movement, and I prepared myself as Cleric Jhuarkasha stepped through. Warlord Rhuuk appeared behind him as the oily surface released him. My eyes locked with Rhuuk, and I could end this all now. His eyes betrayed his opinion of me. He may have been curious before, but now I was standing in his way, an obstacle to overcome.
I half-expected them to initiate something, but instead, Rhuuk pushed Jhuarkasha and irritably ordered him. “Go to the yellow chamber!” That cave held the snake demon, one of our preferred targets. We watched them move away from the oily door. Rhuuk led the way, cutting down two dretches with powerful swings of his large blade. The heinous creatures squealed in pain but were quickly silenced. We had been warned they could summon more of their kind with such displays.
“The hellhound then?” I asked Mynasha. We had planned on killing the snake demon in the yellow chamber as well, but would have to target a different demon, or steal the horns from the others.
Mynasha oriented herself to the distant violet glow on the wall—the opposite direction the other pair was headed. Purple was where the hellhound could be found. She disrobed to just a halter top and leather skirt.
Dungeons fed off ley lines, granting her almost unlimited aether during this delve. While her offensive spells might be hard to control, she had several defensive spells that would speed up our journey. I led the way and killed my first dretch. They appeared threatening with four-inch claws but were clumsy and surprisingly slow. With two quick swings, I opened its belly and then its throat. As its black lifeblood spilled out, I kneeled and retrieved the collector. At least I could gain something from this expedition. Soon, blue aetheric wisps started to be pulled from the corpse.
I was shocked to see that the essence that formed had spiraling white and blue smoke within. It was just a minor essence, but it was the charm affinity. I looked at the disgusting creature and thought nothing was charming about it.
“You got an essence?” Mynasha asked as I pocketed it.
“I did. I will not slow us down, but it would be a pity to waste the opportunity,” I said, standing. She wouldn’t object but looked surprised and didn’t need to know how special my collector was.
A humming sound echoed overhead. It was another threat from the large chamber: blood stirges. They were large, red, furry, bat-like creatures with a sharp, long proboscis. They were not dangerous for us, but if they did pierce your flesh, you would bleed for hours. We quickly tracked the trio of them descending on us. Mynasha’s lightning shield cooked them when they dove. The three smoking bodies thudded onto the ground, and she looked pleased with herself.
As I moved to use the collector, she advised. “You won’t get anything from them. They have so little essence it would be futile.”
I shrugged. “It couldn’t hurt to try.” The essence that formed was dark green and felt extremely satisfying. Quickness as very useful and made the pain of losing the healing essences to the titans slightly easier to bear. When I had three of the minor dark green essences in hand, I stood. Mynasha's skin was already coated in a sheen of sweat, and disbelief was etched on her face. “Guess Fortuna is smiling on me today,” I said dismissively.
I walked past her and soon found more dretches to cut down. It was like practicing against a training dummy with how poorly the creatures moved. They only had one unique attack, expelling a cloud of noxious gas that made you wretch uncontrollably. As long as you held your breath, it wasn’t even that great of a threat. Six dretches and six charm essences later, we encountered the third and final type of creature we were warned about in the primary chamber.
The small green demon was incredibly fast and more of a nuisance than an actual threat in the dungeon. They had a tail with a stinger that could inject painful poison, but they were opportunistic attackers, according to Glasha. If you get into a fight with several dretches, the green imp will turn invisible and try to stab you from behind before retreating. Their tiny claws couldn’t do much unless you were incapacitated. They would also steal from you if you were not observant.
She called them quasits, and this one was so intimidated by my stare that it disappeared. I immediately activated my aether sight. The quasit appeared as a shimmering echo of aether as it moved away. I didn’t give away that I could see it, not tracking it with my eyes. Another useful benefit of this spell form. “I will watch our backs when we are attacked,” Mynasha stated while looking for signs of the tiny demon.
“Not needed. Just keep a lookout for the blood stirges, and we will be fine. We are getting closer to the cave,” I indicated to the violet glow emanating from the wall ahead of us.
When I engaged a pair of dretches a few minutes later, the little invisible demon made its move. As I was cutting down the pig men, it attempted to rush in and stab me in the calf. I back swing caught the creature fully in the chest with magebane, cutting it almost in half and sending its broken body away in a heap.
“How did you?” Mynasha asked, staring at the tiny, broken body oozing dark blood.
I didn’t answer immediately, instead making sure the dretches were dead and kneeling over the quasit with the collector. As the collector worked, I explained. “Its invisibility was imperfect. Also, Glasha said they would attack when we were engaged, so I was ready.”
“How come I didn’t notice anything, then?” the cleric protested.
“I don’t know, but you should try using your lightning to see how it is affected by the glow stones,” I replied, taking a minor essence from the collector. It was unique and looked like a whirlpool of dark blood. It was slightly mesmerizing, and you almost felt like you were being pulled into the tiny sphere.
“What is it?”
“I think it is an abyssal essence,” I answered her. At least, that was what I recalled. The abyssal affinity was less demonic and more about spell forms that cursed or hindered a target. I stared a moment longer before pocketing the essence with the others. “Drink some water, and then we will continue.” We were both sweating in the hot, humid chamber, and I pulled a canteen to my hand. I used it to wash down one of the quickness essences, enjoying the tingly feeling spreading through my nerves.
I could tell Mynasha had a thousand questions, but her constant glances at the collector showed that she was smart enough to realize that the collector was more than it seemed. When we reached the violet wall, I had killed three more dretches, Mynasha had killed five blood stirges, and I had surprised a second quasit.
I was giddy at the essence harvest. All the dretches gave charm essences, and I think I figured out why. They could communicate with each other through telepathy. At least when they attacked in pairs or threes, I noticed they were coordinated yet didn’t communicate vocally.
One of the stirges gave a lesser healing essence instead of a quickness essence. But the real prize was the second quasit. It was a minor essence, but this lesser essence was milky gray. An extremely rare essence of aether shaping. This could improve my control over aether, and with enough of them, I could eventually trace spell forms in the air with my aether.
It was too precious to consume right now. I would consume it by itself after this was over. “What affinity does that affect?” Mynasha asked over my shoulder. She wasn’t being coy, as her face was clearly showing bewilderment.
“One of the magic attributes, I believe,” I answered as I pocketed it. I brought her attention to the archway a few yards away.
The archway was formed with blocks of deep purple glow stones. Deep inside the entrance, a monstrous black canine beast with fiery glowing eyes paced back and forth, waiting for us. I walked closer but did not enter. Ignoring the hellhound, my hand brushed the purple glow stones; the red ones in the ceiling chamber were too far away to reach, but maybe I could mine some of these…
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Comments
I hope he only shares with her the essences he has less use for. Mynasha has cost him a lot so far, she had better be appreciative and not try to steal/betray him
Brianna Stormcloud
2025-10-06 12:30:29 +0000 UTCferver is spelled fervor.
Kevin O'Malley
2025-10-06 02:34:12 +0000 UTCShe going to try and take the collector after she is made Supreme.
Steve B
2025-09-20 07:31:52 +0000 UTCWell ... Eryk experienced first hand, as a recipient as well as a provider, what kind of loyalty can be elicited in subordinates by, while keeping the apex stuff, magnanimously giving away lesser goods ... Eryk experienced first hand that, apart from unique artifacts, which he kept(!) or recovered(!), pretty much everything from food, over alchemicals, to coin, comes to him in such an abundance that he explicitly lost the sense for the worth of a gold coin ... Eryk experienced first hand, time and again that whenever he gave something away and supported someone without expecting something in return, his actions turned out to be an investment into future allies and supporters, who proved to be way more valuable than what he gave away in the first place ... So, what about that says "doormat" to you???
Kudugu
2025-06-28 18:45:32 +0000 UTCdidnt play BG3. if you post a link to reference, I can work it in
Erick Thiemke
2025-06-13 12:14:23 +0000 UTCNo Baldur's Gate 3 quasit reference. I was idly expecting him to ask if any of the quasits were named after utensils, as an oblique lol.
HappyNoms
2025-06-13 05:03:39 +0000 UTCLet me guess, Eryk the doormat will still insist on splitting the dungeon loot 50/50 even though he’s single handedly carried every trial and lost all his belongings. Sad to see one the best series go down this route
Ben
2025-04-18 17:01:30 +0000 UTCThe small green demon was incredibly fast and more of a nuisance than an actual threat in the dungeon. [They] did have a tail with a stinger that could inject a painful poison, but they were opportunity attackers, according to Glasha. If you [became] engaged with several dretches, the green imp [would] turn invisible and try to stab you from behind before retreating. Their tiny claws couldn’t do much unless you were incapacitated. They would also steal from you if you were not observant.” “I didn’t give away that I could see it, not tracking it with my eyes. [Another useful benefit of this spell form.]” ”“I ( think it] is an abyssal essence,” I answered her. At least, that was what I recalled. The abyssal affinity was less demonic and more about spell forms that cursed or hindered a target. I spent a moment longer before pocketing the essence with the others. “Drink some water, and then we will continue.” We were both sweating in the hot, humid chamber, and I pulled a canteen as well. I used it to wash down one of the quickness essences, enjoying the tingly feeling spreading through my nerves.” “But the real prize was the second quasit. It was a minor essence, but this lesser essence was milky gray. An extremely rare essence of aether shaping. This could improve my control over aether, and with enough of them, I could eventually form spell forms in the air with my aether.” “It was too precious to consume right now. I would still get most of the benefit since it was a magic essence[,] and I had just consumed a physical essence, but I [wanted] to get every last drop of enhancement from the sphere.”
Andrew Crews
2025-03-05 03:35:48 +0000 UTCGlasha hadn’t done the chamber beyond justice. The cavernous ceiling stretched high above with large patches of red glowstones placed sporadically. A humid heat washed over us with the scent of [a] gym locker room. The terrain was modestly rocky, with patches of black lichen and yellow mushrooms. Glasha had warned us about the mushroom spores[:] if you got too close, the spores would create a thick mucus in your lungs in minutes and suffocate you. The lichen was edible but didn’t have [any known] alchemy uses, at least[, none] that Mynasha knew of when I asked her.” “Lesser demons dominated the red-bathed landscape around us. A bulbous pig-man that Glasha called a dretch was closest at just a dozen yards. They were hideous creatures, shorter than me by a head and [covered in] ugly, bulging veins along their rubbery flesh. Sporadic bristly hair made them high on the fugly scale. Its pig-like face turned to us, but we knew we were safe near the exit. According to Glasha, there was a halo around the portal that the demons could not encroach on.” “My vision caught [movement], and I prepared myself as Cleric Jhuarkasha stepped through. Warlord Rhuuk appeared behind him as the oily surface released him. My eyes locked with Rhuuk, and I could end this all now. His eyes betrayed his opinion of me. He may have been curious before, but now I was standing in his way, an obstacle to overcome.” “She disrobed to just a halter top and leather skirt. Dungeons fed off of ley lines, and she would essentially have unlimited aether during this delve. While her offensive spells would be difficult to control, she had a number of defensive spells that would expedite our journey. I led the way and cut down my first dretch. They looked imposing with four-inch claws but were clumsy and [painfully] slow. In two quick swings, I opened its belly and then its throat. As its black lifeblood left it, I [knelt] and produced the collector. I would get something out of this expedition. Soon, blue aetheric wisps were being pulled from the corpse.”
Andrew Crews
2025-03-05 03:26:22 +0000 UTCGlasha nodded and responded in a serious tone, “True—to an extent. This is one of three dungeons on Desia that I am aware of that spawn demons. Even if they do escape the dungeons, they are sterile. Few ever reach the surface as the denizens of the Endless Dark hunt them with a [fervor].”
Andrew Crews
2025-03-05 03:14:51 +0000 UTCThe throaty roar of [approval] echoed among the encirclement of Boutan orcs. They would have a new Supreme shortly, but Mynasha was not happy. “They have chosen Jhuarkasha to be their next Supreme.” “We had missed part of the next announcement as we [were talking]. The Elder finished addressing the assemblage, “They can enter anytime they wish, after sunset.”
Andrew Crews
2025-03-05 03:12:02 +0000 UTCI wish you wouldn't remind us of the healing essences. Four whole major healing essences, gone because of a BS diablous ex machine. Never gonna stop being salty about that. You could have taken way less of his shit, and still had it feeling like a kick in the nuts for readers and Eryk alike, and only giving a bit more information about the world (half of which was known, easily extrapolated from previous knowledge, or just kind of obvious), and the info that Eryk couldn't go home, was not good enough for readers. That was a big old nothing burger of dissapointment, in which the only thing Eryk himself really got from it was an unneeded reminder that he still ain't shit in the grand scheme of things. He was already aware of that, and so we're any readers that aren't ignoramuses.
Apophixas
2025-01-21 21:32:08 +0000 UTCThe good thing about this novel is that even the stupid strong are very much mortal. The Emperor was practically a demigod but still spent all his time hiding in his palace.
Steve
2025-01-08 06:57:23 +0000 UTCDemons Decent, or Demonic Depths...more alliterative
Erick Thiemke
2024-12-24 03:06:43 +0000 UTCTitle suggestion: Decent to the Demons
Sparks
2024-12-23 01:46:24 +0000 UTCI personally think that the charm spell route described by the comments above is the most interesting. If Zorana is tied to Rhuuk in any way the warlord is Eryks target and should be killed at the first opportunity so him surviving until the third trial would make even less sense. Also, like others said, the tracking tatoo doesn’t matter. While not particularly bright orcs don’t seem so wasteful as to organize a raid to reclaim a single slave and tatoos can be annulled as someone pointed out.
Deliver roo
2024-12-19 21:45:00 +0000 UTCI've no problem with him being manipulated into being her first. He starts adrift as a stranger in a strange land and his longer term objectives have generally been decided by others. As for a slave tattoo, they bind to the ether core will removing or damaging it damage the core. That would have serious consequences, have we seen any orc veterans with scars or missing limbs/tattoos? Though in Japanese style culture I imagine they would remain out of site.
Zaffre
2024-12-18 22:17:11 +0000 UTCThe author never wrote that the candidates can’t kill each other, Eryck just had to be smart about it so that Mynasha keeps her honor. It would have been sufficient to block the path to the enemy duo so that the warlord was honorbound to attack him, maybe even thinking he is still weakened by the bath. At that point the warlord is dead or stored and the other candidate has lost the trial already. Given that the secret capacity of Eryck’s space spellform is already known I don’t see a problem in having one or two headless orc corpses.
Deliver roo
2024-12-18 20:56:36 +0000 UTCMay your friend’s memory be a blessing.
Aaron Weingrad
2024-12-18 16:37:48 +0000 UTCI’ve been thinking the same thing! He hasn’t fully utilized the collector, especially since he’s an adventurer and he should be able to go to the guild to find some available dungeons. Hopefully after this arc he can power-level
Psyren1596
2024-12-18 15:37:59 +0000 UTCHe needs to bunker down in a dungeon and spend like a year getting stupid strong so he cant be fucked with
Got Heem 11
2024-12-18 15:04:50 +0000 UTCA charm mind control spell would also allow you to let Zorana be her normal self and not have to deal with 10 years of mental trauma once she is free. Would allow for a more upbeat reunion. She could still need to readjust later if desired.
Caledon Smith
2024-12-18 13:49:47 +0000 UTCPersonal I thought what you already wrote was just fine. It’s a diplomatic situation yea he could just walk by and take her but why risk future trouble for Maveth when you could do it legally. If your dead set on changing it you could say there is charm magic in play that over rides the persons persona so that if he did just steal her she would not be Zorana and would spend her timing trying to return to Rhuuk.
Caledon Smith
2024-12-18 13:41:19 +0000 UTCI think that forcing Eryk into this path is the best option by far and would allow you to not have to change much. The issue is how. If you don't then "we the readers" will try to reason why Eryk didn't just steal Zorana as this is a lot of work and Eryk is too smart to play games. Plan B is easy enough to push aside as you could say Eryk doesnt have rhe Honor requirements to change a warlord of that stature in orc customs. Though Plan A-The tracking might tatoo might not work as they could cut off the flesh or arm to remove it. You already wrote that if Eryk loses an arm that etched runes in his bones would be gone. I would think the tatoos would be similar. Destroy enough of it and it cant be reformed. Additionally, someone else mentioned it, but if they are returned to Stone Island and kept away from the shoreline, the orcs would have to raid into the Island to get her. Not a smart move and not worth it for 2 of them. Also the Empire had a way to block the tattoos from working though it might only be temporary. We saw that in the coliseum match.
Balerion18
2024-12-18 12:02:38 +0000 UTCA Channelling Essence! Look Ma! Dreams do come true!
Alias
2024-12-18 10:47:43 +0000 UTCYou do know they will know If he killed the warlord right? Also ofc he could follow the warlord but then he would have to Contest for the.horn, and would have to reveal His Ace (and many Readers seem to have a secrecy fetisch and wouldnt Like that)
Manfred Schütze
2024-12-18 10:08:56 +0000 UTCSuspect whatever way this Trial ends, Rhuuk will claim Ery ck has no honour and cheated. So probably going to end in a duel. Also Rhuuk wants Eryk's essence collector so that could be a side bet with the essence collector Vs the warlord's property (his slaves).. This could be a legal way to free those slaves? And win the competition for the Supreme...
Michael Byrne
2024-12-18 09:57:11 +0000 UTCDamn, Eryck can’t even choose a chamber that an orc comes and does what he wants to him. I guess the MC is on the path to become a sage or something similar considering the patience he must have developed after every orc he encounters can fuck around with him. It is strange that in the book in which he starts to lead he can also lose all the self respect he has got, together with his secrets and his stuff.
Deliver roo
2024-12-18 08:32:57 +0000 UTCI totally agree, narratives have peaks and valleys. I think the giants robbery feels off or ‘unearned’, at this time. Several Hemingway heroes get hit with setbacks, but the goal at the end made the context to the struggle more vibrant. We aren’t living at that end point right now.
Salvo
2024-12-18 05:56:26 +0000 UTCUltimately our criticism should be taken with a grain of salt. We are all reacting to chapters as you write them. Any changes that you make should wait until you finish the book. I will admit that I did not like the giants encounter much at first. As long as Eryk grows because of it that is what is important.
John Donovan
2024-12-18 04:01:30 +0000 UTCYou could make it a wartime stance. With the bouton at war, until a new cleric changes things, all non bouton are interned. The elders can’t own slaves, but interned travelers aren’t slaves; technically. Wouldn’t the naval army need new ships, and rations? Get the humans to cut lumber and tend to crops. Free passage during times of war isn’t honorable! Konstantin could only get here cause he had a changeling pathfinder with a hound hostage. Could they get past a naval blockade during a war? You never gave a good WHY the last supreme ‘died’; the campaign is how honor is gained, why would warlords want to stop? Eryk’s space isn’t large enough for everyone.
Salvo
2024-12-18 02:36:58 +0000 UTCMy condolences and hope the memorial was well received.
visigoth
2024-12-18 02:23:58 +0000 UTCI feel like this plot line is a little convoluted, its like he is being lead around by the nose but the consequences/benefits are not being made clear. The only good way I see this ending is with a dead or mortally wounded Rhuuk, most likely from the 2nd demon and having Eryk and Mynasha rescuing the cleric. Maybe add a creature that gives a Channeling essence that they can farm.
William C
2024-12-18 02:15:11 +0000 UTCI like it is an abyssal essence,” I answered her. At least, that. Like > think
Mark Corwin
2024-12-18 02:03:58 +0000 UTCI wish Eryk would test a space cut before a boss. See if the warping of lighting affects him too and see if demons have high resistance
PatronTurtle
2024-12-18 02:01:36 +0000 UTCYes. Ty. Gonna read now but getting these extra chapters is nice!
Mark Corwin
2024-12-18 01:49:28 +0000 UTCThank you!
Andrew
2024-12-18 01:41:29 +0000 UTCWhy would a tracking tattoo matter? It’s not like they’re planning on staying in the caliphate, and I’m pretty sure that any orcs trying to reclaim slaves on Stone Mountain island would get their shit shoved in pretty fast. If you want happy readers better to make Erik back her for some benefit. Even better if there’s a bit of angst with maybe taking the sub-optimal path to getting maveith’s sister in return for personal gain. That would fit more with the character we know whose self interest has often battled against his morality. Maybe they have a solution to castille’s burn, or a way he could share his essence imprint with his friends. Right now he’s burning incalculable resources basically for asshole slavers; it would make more sense if they were offering him something game changing. Alternatively if you just want a quick fix make it a remote detonated tattoo or something like that that would actually keep them from just fleeing the caliphate with her. Pretty sure everyone will still be majorly pissed about how Eric is bending over and spreading his cheeks tho. And really even an explosive tattoo he could just shift to his space and give her a greater healing potion to fix the damage assuming that’s not one of the many things he lost on Olympus so one shitty self centered orc brat could run their evil slave empire instead of another.
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2024-12-18 01:33:06 +0000 UTCIf she becomes Supreme he needs to get permission to farm this dungeon a few times for essences
Nick Nicholson
2024-12-18 00:56:42 +0000 UTCThanks
incognito
2024-12-18 00:53:27 +0000 UTCThank you!!
Caledon Smith
2024-12-18 00:48:00 +0000 UTC3rd of 4. Sorry had a brief memorial service for a friend that passed on Sunday. Getting closer on finishing the audio book for 3. Here is an update on the plot changes you can expect in the edits: I need to force the MC to become the First as that is a big sticking point for a lot of you. So....I am going to make the rescue of Zorana untenable any other way than having the new Supreme release her. Zorana with have a tracking tattoo on her. And yes, if she was in the dimensional space, it wouldn't work, but as soon as she exited, it would be active again. Yes, this means plan B will be killing Warlord Rhuuk who is the only one who could track her...It is just a kernal of an idea ATM. The overall plot is not going to change, just the steps and thought process on how we get here.
Erick Thiemke
2024-12-18 00:47:08 +0000 UTC