Chapter 49. Just The Beginning (End Of Book 1)
Added 2025-02-25 21:58:01 +0000 UTCDing. Dong. Ding. Dong.
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Just joined patreon because couldn’t wait for the ending. Loved it. Slightly confused about his parents not knowing about his return but maybe that’s one of the things you changed/edited? (Coming from the RR version and a few weeks behind) Regardless, this is a great story. Thank you!
Juju
2025-03-22 03:29:51 +0000 UTCThat was fun. MM, I suppose if honestly, my first impression of Zara and Thorgen is that they seem kinda .. cookie-cutter? but as for Aelarion, his reveal was delightful. In character, too. I can totally see how an almost-almighty dragon might have fun pretending to be a dotty old man. I liked the foreshadowing with Damus. Makes me wonder: will the boys build a bridge after all, or will he be like Gollum, mercy offered but not (quite) received? it would be a good story either way. Thanks so much for this story. It's kept me company, and my mind fizzing, these last couple days as I've caught up on chapters.
Richard Davis
2025-03-19 16:16:59 +0000 UTCDoesn't mention that he might have caused the dungeon to switch bosses and potentially upgraded it into a catastrophe.
R. Maxwell Steele
2025-03-19 15:22:27 +0000 UTCI really hate those vows of the Mage Council. Extremely restrictive and also effectively lying on one's oath by denying reality. If they are bothered about oversight on dangerous magic - they should mention it in the oath instead of making grandiose statements like "nothing can be created" and then binding that. If the Oath is binding, it makes all generations of Mages effectively "blind".
lenkite
2025-03-13 02:44:31 +0000 UTCI think it's fair for him to be concerned that others might not believe he didn't meddle in time magic, but his internal monologue seems to suggest he believes that's actually what happened, that an impossible thing was proved to be possible. But, in the first chapter Death seemingly had another explanation: "You're wondering about the cost." She drew patterns in the air with her finger, leaving trails of stardust that formed and reformed into spiraling galaxies. "But there isn't one. This moment, right here, was always meant to be." She gestured at the darkening horizon. "Whatever happens to you has been waiting to happen since the beginning of time. Every tear, every loss, every moment of despair - it shaped you." That suggests that no time manipulation occurred, time cannot be altered, but there's no rule (in this universe) that it always moves in one direction, or never loops back upon itself. I think there should be some acknowledgement of this when he's worrying about being found out. Something like 'No one will believe Death told me this is how time has always been destined to move.' sounds better than "True, he hadn't manipulated time or death himself – he'd only bargained with Death." which implies that someone (death) DID manipulate time on his behalf.
Travis M
2025-02-27 06:38:34 +0000 UTCFor the last chapter of a book. Really satisfying. ✓
Chaz Baz
2025-02-26 17:07:13 +0000 UTCFor all that Said I loved the book though, and the 2 only real jarring moments where to me the 2 dungeon arcs that were smoothed out very nicely everything else is largely nitpicking. Thank your for writing so much of such great content for us!
Gopard
2025-02-26 14:36:56 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter! One last thing nagging at me for this book... Why was Adom "floating in front of the battle mages and Iron Wolves" at the last battle? I can accept him being allowed to come along quietly maybe... However not only was he joining the fighting and casting magic supposedly the only mage present quick enough to stop the Prince from killing himself but also his mother and the other healers let him come along while spouting those heavy injuries? That just felt a bit too "cool action scene for the MC" too me. It seems the adults selectively stop treating him as a child... I honestly think in general it might be easier if this was kind of the second Arc if Adom had time to grow 1-2 years with smaller easier plots and issues before joining this kind of conspiracy immediatly and being treated casually like a full fledged battlemage by Highly trained and powerful Knights and Mages. I also feel like its a bit hard to explain the non questioning of his abillities... He is literally stronger than all of the "extreme prodigies" of his age combined and he is also someone who for all of his life before exhibitited extremely theoretical tendencies he was bookworm and suddenly is stronger a fighter than a proffessor in the second year. I don't care too much about that honestly its a story at the end and its enjoyable to read, but I feel like if we want to stay "realisitic" all of the plot in the first book could never have happened like this without the obvious questions by some adults breaking it midway through or at the latest at the end. The concept of super highly controlled and supervised Magic and "Physical magic" in this society just doesn't add up with Adom doing whatever the entire book. And this incongruity is only made greater because the "first Adom" was the definition of a shut in bookworm. He would have no idea what kind of "red flags" behaviour would raise attention by proffessors or other adults in the city and his 180 turn of behaviour would only make adults that much more likely to question basically everything strange going on around him, which happened to be almost everything: His behavior after the duel, fighting Damian right after again, suddenly running hunting every day, collapsing from exthaustion, not studying in the Library almost at all immediatly after the return for weeks, delivering robbers to the guard, enhancing his mana capacity suddenly for no explanation (Mr Biggins potion), going missing for nights or even a day during hunting suddenly, sneaking around at night, sneaking around doing insanely dangerous magic and golem experients, joining the Club he literally would have hated the MOST before regression, from 0 to 100 going all in on physical training, Alchemy, Battlemagic and I think another subject too to the point of getting personal tutoring, becoming part time assistant to Proffessor Kim and of course out of nowhere sponsering a student with an unheard of starting mana Capacity. Those are just the ones I somehow cannot see the Academy missing if magic is that closely monitored for dangers in the Empire. There is of course the assassination attempt on him and Sam, his several trips to the notorios districts and his connections to the underworld. All of those add up to a picture that combine with the 2 "Dungeon sequences" in events that "may once work out and happen but just get a bit to improbable in large sequenc". This isn't even to say that his mother has not once had the talk off "what the fuck are you doing Son I absolutely forbid you from continuing on like this!" I mean I can see his father being a musclehead enough to ignore everything because he's happy Adom finally is a battle Mage, but why would his Mother a Healer, be so enthusiastic to support his self mutilation and risk taking (nothing specific but everything in total). It just kind of now that I'm looking back on the first book, feels strange how everyone he interacts with just accepts Adom was always a universal prodigy better or at least equal at anything to the biggest prodigies of his generation, after not showing any of that ever before. Even Sam is very "accepting" of everything. I'm not actually sure if this is something that needs ot be changed or rather can be changed, or if its simply the trade off for the premise of old mage returned to 12y old body and shit goes down immediatly... Not sure. And despite me thinking this is a "flaw" so to speak I think its not something that really should be (or CAN be) "fixed" as it may just be what you want for the story. I think the first thing can be fixed though... It feels strange Adom leading or playing any role in that last fight. Even if the Iron Wolves MIGHT accept him fighting the Magistaerium wouldn't right? They don't need him (even with his experience they have the Archmage if they want it) and he is even theoretically under investigation for now he was after all when all's said and done found fighting and killing people in the criminal underworld lol. This Scene just feels so much like a scene ok for an adult MC (he's proven himself capable and played a big role in battle so why not take him along) but not a pre teen when the Mages are so set on "doing things by the book". I must adit its fun to read though and at some point thats the trade off to make sometimes, the authors choice to include a cool actionscene with the MC even if its probably unlikely to organically happen^^
Gopard
2025-02-26 14:20:42 +0000 UTCGreat first book! Honestly the quality and speed of your writing is astounding, thank you very much for this story :)
Alexandre Dibon
2025-02-26 09:29:52 +0000 UTCFantastic first book! I look forward to reading book 2.
Bapp
2025-02-26 07:33:23 +0000 UTCgreat stuff brother, looking forward to more
Jose RicoTacoNachoQuesadillaMandillaJones
2025-02-26 02:02:43 +0000 UTCCongratulations on completion, great first book, I enjoyed all of it. No notes other than be careful listening to notes from readers, especially mid book and the complaints are pace related because people get lost in the week to week
Anotherb Account
2025-02-26 01:24:40 +0000 UTCAh, I see that now. I was sure it said "wyvern" at some point. I must have misread it. It is clear now. It says wyrm. I hope he finds some use for all the stuff he has.
TheOne320
2025-02-26 00:11:01 +0000 UTCGlad you enjoyed it!
Ace_the_owl
2025-02-25 23:48:22 +0000 UTC🕺🕺🕺
Ace_the_owl
2025-02-25 23:47:57 +0000 UTCAh, i see where the confusion stems from. He has a white wyrm's heart in his inventory, which is different from a wyvern's. I get why it's confusing, too. It's pretty easy to mix them up. I might have to change that.. Thanks for reading!
Ace_the_owl
2025-02-25 23:47:24 +0000 UTCThanks for the amazing conclusion. One thing I still do not understand is why Adom had to order a second wyvern heart even though he already had one in his inventory.
TheOne320
2025-02-25 23:23:05 +0000 UTCHell yes we spending time with other races?? Let’s go!
Hellnhavoc
2025-02-25 22:33:19 +0000 UTCGood ending :)
EsZeus
2025-02-25 22:20:11 +0000 UTCI'm still working on smoothing out some plot holes and minor inconsistencies, but I wanted to give you all a satisfying conclusion to this first book while setting up enough intrigue for what's coming next. Your comments and feedback have been invaluable, and I'll be incorporating many of your suggestions into Book 2's writing, which begins tomorrow. Not wanting to jinx anything, but I think the first few chapters of Book 2 should be ready in about two days. Tomorrow, I'm planning to publish the epilogue, which should bridge the gap nicely between the books. Thank you all for your continued support and feedback, it's what keeps me able to maintain this writing pace. I really hope this will meet my and your expectations in the long run :) See you tomorrow for the epilogue!
Ace_the_owl
2025-02-25 22:03:03 +0000 UTC
