Pink World (Comic) - Page 16
Added 2021-12-28 13:33:25 +0000 UTCBackfire the plan did
Also am absolutely loving panel 8
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Alright, I know what I'll spend a good paragraph complimenting and making suggestions for but we'll get to that when we get to that. So, overall, the page layout is really economical and efficient, I think. You're able to fit in a lot of action into a similar amount of space by knowing where to cut the scene and how much is needed in order to depict it. In some spaces it's clear where the space you were working with wasn't quite what you needed; panel 4 is hitting the limits of its frames with even that posing, so it's easy to imagine it could've been a bit more dynamic and energetic for the 'turning to grab and throw her down' portion if it had a bit more space. Still, on the whole, it does feel mostly like everything got the space it needed, though the first panel could've likely been cannibalized for a different panel here and there given how page 15 ends with a similar shot as the second-to-last panel. Jumping ahead a bit, I can see why you love Panel 8, it's a very aesthetically pleasing panel. Between the rainbow curtain Dash's hair makes up behind her giving a very vibrant background, to the general posing of her body, to the good use of blur, opacity and the suggestion of movement to give weight to her tits slapping back and forth to her expression, it's a really well done panel that has a lot going for it. Panel 7 and Panel 10 also deserve some kudos, as do a lot of these in-action panels in general, as they not only do a good job of really working through her getting fucked, it also gives a good series of different perspectives into how much Dash has changed throughout this. Which does bring us to my compliment here; on a previous post sometime recently I remarked about how you sometimes drew muscles, though I can't remember exactly where it came up, which referenced the aftermath of the Bimbo Box for Mirko where her muscles were very much given the shrinkwrap skin, damn near flayed, look. Here we have a similar pov on Dash's back and while there's something to be said for blending the lines a bit more so they sink a bit more into the skin, it's already a massive improvement in terms of aesthetic, especially as you could say she's flexing herself here. As far as expressions here, all of them feel appropriate for their situations and are pretty fun as far as depicting Dash's usual personality; sometimes sarcastic, very often competitive. Good show!
Artorius
2021-12-28 17:31:01 +0000 UTCReally liking this page and I like that you made rainbow more muscular can't wait to see more of this comic I love it.
Cole jones
2021-12-28 15:04:04 +0000 UTC
