Tree of Life - Book 1 pg. 63.
Added 2023-09-07 10:08:07 +0000 UTCHere's the finished page 63, and with that, Chapter 1 has officially ended, and we are off to Chapter 2! :D
Hope you like it ^^
Comments
Fair enough!
pj wolf
2023-09-08 15:05:52 +0000 UTCI can't possibly show every small detail because even all the time in the world wouldn't be enough to draw everything. I made Book 0 so I could show and not tell a lot of things. And I don't think all the small details that aren't the focus of the story should be shown.
Zummeng
2023-09-08 11:39:01 +0000 UTCI see no point because there is no time gap between the chapters.
Zummeng
2023-09-08 11:37:03 +0000 UTCNo, because the next chapter will start next week. There is a "to be continued" at the end of Book 0 because there is a huge time gap between the end of that and the start of Book 1. Here, there isn't.
Zummeng
2023-09-08 11:36:03 +0000 UTCAnd thus the long, perilous journey begins! Hopefully, nothing bad happens to Mira for Luna's sake.
StumpedMoose
2023-09-08 05:18:15 +0000 UTCLynus. The true heart of this chapter
Nick R. Kupila
2023-09-07 22:49:40 +0000 UTCCongratulations on completing chapter one. Maybe later on in the story, could we see how Miralle, Chili, and Leopold got their reputation with the town folk in flashbacks instead of Nigel telling us? Remember this saying: "Show, don't tell." Will we meet any of the Imp gang members that Tristan was with later in the story? And is there any way to make something like the middle panel on book one page 18 less muddy? I did like book one overall, and wish you the best of luck with this story. Thank you.
Joseph Purves
2023-09-07 15:18:47 +0000 UTC...This makes me wonder if Luna had seen this day coming for as long as she had been in contact with her daughter... On a formatting standpoint: Unless you plan to do a 64th page with, like, an end slate or something, it may be wise to clue the reader in that this is the last page aside of mentioning it in the description
pj wolf
2023-09-07 14:07:09 +0000 UTCIf this is the last page for chapter one, shouldn't there be a "To be continued..." in the bottom right corner, like Book Zero page 88 had?
Joseph Purves
2023-09-07 13:03:43 +0000 UTC;w;
Viro Veteruscy
2023-09-07 11:00:32 +0000 UTCLuna: I feel soulcrushing dispair. Lynus: First time here?
Myhairhasamindofitsown
2023-09-07 10:12:51 +0000 UTC
