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Early Access: STORMWEAVER 3 - CHAPTER 8 v2 [ROUGH]

Still not quite where I want it to be for the final book, but this def hits on more of the things I wanted to get out of this chapter! Hope you like it!

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Comments

Wait, is this the last book in the series?

Joe Bou-Chedid

Like many others, I think this is a much better chapter. It feels more rounded out to me and it is much more than just the fight scene and surrounding events. It moves the story forward in a more substantial way.

Janet Beane

Good reminder. So far the only ones who know about the expanded completions are Rei And Aria. Rest of the team still hasn’t heard

Scott

I really liked this version better. It felt like the group was getting back into some normal banter. With lots of big events to come and the first ever first year globals coming there is going to have to be a lot of team building to get them ready. Looking forward to the new nightly training instructors. Now that the contract is signed. Am also super excited to see what happens with the meeting with Rama Guest! He is supposed to be meeting Rie and Aria the next day to be putting a plan together to upping there training!

Ryan Anderton

Yes.. but Bruce left himself multiple options with this cliffhanger. It’s soo awesome. Someone like kalus could intervene as a surprise..or Rei has to spill the beans alone..or they get called away again.. soo many possibilities .. can’t wait go see how he works it

Heather Herren

Because he got all of Firesong involved with something they didn't know about? Because he got himself involved with his potentially dangerous family without telling anybody, least of all his girlfriend? Because he took a sponsership for all of Firesong to prevent them splitting apart, which he and Aria didn't tell them about as well? I guess these are his reasons, which are very valid, imo, even if all that stuff with Viv happened

TheCatDemon

Although it was amusing, his discomfort at the ends confused me. He felt guilty for not telling them sooner? Why?

Harley Dalton Jr.

Kay’s name is backwards again. I know we’re not at a point for proofing etc, but given it happened all through book 2, figured I’d mention it. Great v2!

Iron Akela

The addition was well worth it. While I can definitely see some additional work being put in this just rounds out the morning so much better for the characters.

Kory Leach

Waiting for Viv to pop out of coma, and her cad starts chatting with Shido. Rei pops out to group “Viv is up, come on let’s go see her”. And they are like “how tf do you know that?”

Scott

Or maybe Aria bringing back the, “You incomprehensible moron!” Line from book 1. Truly a piece of work.

Sugoi

Thank gods, I about had a heart attack seeing that on the post😑

Jacob Clemens

That IS the hope! Bryce has found his writing schedule again, but is still struggling with the story itself a bit, so we'll have to see, so sorry!

Wraithmarked Creative

I like the idea of Catcher still having an issue with Logan. It’s fair and I hope he doesn’t start getting flack for it. Rei is Catcher’s closest friend as Viv is for Rei. I wonder if we’re going to get a one on one discussion between the two that may involve fists. (coping) Great rewrite, I usually skip the already written work and jump into what’s new but I can’t help it if it’s a Bryce fight in the chapter. See you next Friday? Maybe?

Sugoi

Thoroughly enjoyed this. $50 the next chapter begins with "YOU WHAT??"

Brandon King

yeah I want to get back to some of the lightheared banter as we swing out of the darker of Viv's accident

Wraithmarked Creative

LOL! done. post this as fan fic on the sub

Wraithmarked Creative

Lol did I? most definitely not

Wraithmarked Creative

I liked the first write, but this one was so much better. Made me laugh a few times, especially with the "You're not getting away THAT easy buddy." line. Thank you for that and the laughs.

Other

Did you say final book? No that can't be right, we are still in the first year 😭😭😭

Jacob Clemens

Pretty cool!! Like it a lot better!! More Bryce if that makes sense

Heather Herren

Alright…this is too good an opportunity to let slip past without a humorous interlude…rewind to just after Sense says “okay dude, let’s hear it.” Rei looks him over, glances at Aria, then conspiriatorily leans in and says “OK, Sense…I’m going to tell you from the beginning, but stay with me, OK?” Sense nodded, face strained, eyes hopeful to hear exactly what happened since they’d last spoken. “As we were getting off the bus at Sectionals, there was this gorgeous older lady waiting just inside the foyer, and as Aria and I walked in, she pulled both of us aside with a sense of urgency neither of us were quite sure how to respond to. “Reidon Ward? Aria Laurent?” she asked us, looking us both over as she stared directly at me. “Yeaaahh….?” I said, wondering what all this could be about. She continued, “you don’t know me, but you go to school with my son Sense. He’s sent me pics and training vids, and I couldn’t let this opportunity pass without telling you, Rei…you’ve got a fantastic ass. How do you feel about older women?” 😂

Jason Bradford

Think the chapter hit a lot better with the revisions and additions. Guess Firesong will need a talk about both Central’s gauntlet and Rei’s sponsor response.

gratch42

Catcher was ticked that Grant didn’t trust Firesong enough to talk through and share his pain - Grant also yelled at them to SHUTUP. Reasonable for Catcher to feel a betrayal at their newly formed trust. 🤷

gratch42

Click on "Show All" then you will see the link to the PDF. I had the same issue.

TrakN7

Catcher's lack of maturity is really apparent here, if there were ever a set of circumstances you would give Grant some slack it would be these ones but he's choosing to take it overly personal, kinda drives home that these are basically teenagers with all the pettiness being a teenager can entail

Bryn Thomas

I'm not sure if this is just me but the reddit link is taking me to the chapter 5 discussion post

Voror


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