Not Your Sky 2 - Page 8 (WIP)
Added 2017-01-31 02:46:19 +0000 UTCAnd here it is, the first of several more pages coming. Looks like Nika's really hell-bent on poking and prodding around deep and hard in the Blackbird for juicy, American aviation secrets!
Alright, here's the deal; so far, it's just a frame placement, and nothing's permanent. This is where I ask my patrons for what their opinion is, what could be fixed and what could be added or removed!
Comments
So this is the first time i suport anyone on patreon becaus i love your Comic and hope you will do a lot more. ^^ BTW hope my englisch is not too bad
RK-9
2017-02-02 13:49:05 +0000 UTCthe same thing might apply in one of the following pages that will feature Quart, in just one little frame she could watch on of the flankers, or we could have a POV of the flanker holding her neck watching her (and the scene). Same with Nika if u prefer to have her POV instead than Shandra's.
marm
2017-02-01 12:12:40 +0000 UTCWatching the first panel I also had another idea for the next pages : a POV of Shandra, maybe with her tits a little bit on the side so we can see between, that shows her view of Nika pounding her, and Nika's grinning face watching her. A pretty common panel in every porn comic IMO. And one that gives an immediate exciting effect. Who's with me ?
marm
2017-02-01 11:05:48 +0000 UTCThey're fiiiiiiine XD
gunstar_1
2017-02-01 07:12:48 +0000 UTCYeah, and to scale them back this far into the comic wouldn't make sense.
RenTheDragon
2017-02-01 07:01:14 +0000 UTCI'm with gunstar-1 keep the breeders big and proud.
Azura
2017-02-01 05:53:54 +0000 UTCI second mellowfellow on that.
Azura
2017-02-01 05:51:28 +0000 UTCOh, I considered that. Both Shandra and Quart are coveted pieces of hardware, and it'd be an immeasurable failure on their behalf if they let those valuable tech secrets land in foreign hands. I'll definitely do what I can to make the dialogue a little more frantic. So I take it this means you all can see the draft then?
RenTheDragon
2017-02-01 04:43:19 +0000 UTCI concur with you on the speed lines and the "ghosted" ball sack on Nika to give some "motion" to her actions. That would make an extremely nice touch to everything. I disagree though on shrinking the size of each Aero's Tits and dicks. Those are all pretty much how they've always appeared in previous commissions and comics.
gunstar_1
2017-02-01 00:01:47 +0000 UTCI just decided that not having more tiers didn't mean I couldn't pledge more. ^.^
Sirberus Khaos
2017-01-31 19:05:01 +0000 UTCWell nothing to lose with adding that. Remember though that those that will purchase that tier will be the most annoyingly demanding ones : P I'm already full of ideas for the next pages :D
marm
2017-01-31 19:00:24 +0000 UTCI guess I originally wanted to just keep it at $1 a month for now. But I guess I'll look into a $10 a month thing since y'all insist. x3
RenTheDragon
2017-01-31 18:47:34 +0000 UTCWhy would u be making a gamble with the second tier ?
marm
2017-01-31 18:41:15 +0000 UTCYeah, I had a feeling the page needed something a little more. I'll see if I can edit one of the frames to make it appear as though Nika's just hammering into her, and possibly include a shot of Quart and the Flankers. And I did consider making a $10 tier. BUt I thought I'd see how the first month or so goes before I start piling on more tiers. I feel like I'm already making a bit of a gamble with the second tier pledges.
RenTheDragon
2017-01-31 18:21:18 +0000 UTCAlmost forgot, since Quart is getting 2 on 1'ed, an added idea could be that she keeps moaning and complaining until the other interceptors shuts her up with some forced oral sex while the "toungy" one keeps raping her.
marm
2017-01-31 11:52:36 +0000 UTCWell, to be honest I prefer seeing the 2 other interceptors having their way with Quart, but not cause I dont love Nika, simply cause I prefer Quart's face and I love the 2 on 1 gangbangs, the idea of her having arms and legs blocked while being breeded FROM BEHIND is my favourite, doggystyle wins it for me. I will not hide that if the tits, balls and dicks had been a little bit smaller I would have preferred it, but hey cant change that in progress. Apart from this, this WIP page is nice, love the 2 bottom sequences. What I could suggest is that u modify them to make the banging seem faster, u know, by addind a little shadow of Nika's junk going balls deep in the same frame of it being pulled out. But maybe u are keeping it for later pages closer to the creampie. It would make sense. personally, but I guess this will happen in later pages too, both Quart and Shandra should BEG to not be breeded, like they are trying to fight back uselessly while being creampied. I'd love to hear other's opinions about this. PS : let me know if u make the 10 dollars pledge option with some added bonus I'll be the first one
marm
2017-01-31 11:40:15 +0000 UTC
