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Chapter 1 - Page 4

Oh no, Zak, what can they possibly have planned for you that means you've got to get dressed again?

Chapter 1 - Page 4

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Thank you for the constructive criticism. Part of the issue here is that I can see several pages ahead and know what's happening so a small layout hiccup like this isn't always seen as a problem since I've got more context than the audience. I do try and keep an eye on it, but now and then something slips through.

Caelan Whitecolt

I see some people were confused about where Zak didn’t give consent and it took me a minute to find it. It’s not hard to find but next time when something is done that shifts action give it more room than one of the smallest panels of the page. That said you using different speech bubbles to draw attention to the important words was good.

Plague

Seeing that Zak seem a bit shy I am sure he is happy he don't have to go there fully naked.

Meanbeard


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