Magical Girl Gunslinger: Chapter 18 - Duo
Added 2024-07-16 23:34:28 +0000 UTCMagical Girl Gunslinger: Chapter 18 - Duo
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Minor edit: "...and I quickly changed courses in a full right-angle turn. " i think "courses" should be "course", singular not plural. Bloody web app can't do new lines on mobile.
Matt Cannon
2024-07-20 00:26:00 +0000 UTCSpeaking of edits: "I landed on my backpack, cushioning my fall marginally even as the few objects stored within stabbed against into painfully." I think the end of this sentence was supposed to mention the contents of her bag stabbing into her. That was the only thing I saw that needed a touch up, it reads a lot smoother than before. Good work!
Enigma
2024-07-18 12:45:00 +0000 UTC
