Magical Girl Gunslinger: Chapter 32 - Privacy
Added 2023-01-29 15:02:51 +0000 UTCThis is chapter three of three releasing today!
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"After Earth's magical girls accidentally destroy the entire planet, they decide to fix their mistake with the power of love, friendship, and overwhelming firepower.
This doesn't go as planned.
This story contains:
- Ridiculously overpowered main characters
- A multi-isekai plot
- Cute girls terrorizing multi-dimensional godlike beings
- Magical girls being as flowery as usual
- Over the top combat
- A protagonist who is occasionally badass, but usually on accident"
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Comments
### LOL ### “I don’t care how cute it looks!” I hissed. “ I am not going to wear a bunny girl outfit!” I needed this laugh Story rating 12/10 Current Mood - Hopeful FIN
GryphonKnight
2023-04-21 22:45:15 +0000 UTCPlease don't tell me the story will end right before she actually becomes a proper magical girl lol. Anyway good stuff > shooting through my like lightning as I forced through me
John
2023-03-29 11:46:28 +0000 UTCWill there be an update soon?
Jamie Hutchinson
2023-03-23 20:21:36 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter :) Mai seemed a bit less anxious, nervous and paranoid in the first arc. While I appreciate all the light shed on her mental health, to me it got somewhat overboarding. It sure is realistic. But its also less fun to read about her constant, extremely redundant struggle with tiniest issues (tiny from a realistic outside viewpoint). I miss her more confident self that could protect Brian, save her classmates and be a tiny bit more naive/trusting with Error. I hope the story doesn't delve into her cptsd for 50 chapters with too slow of character development.
Josh
2023-02-11 11:12:26 +0000 UTCUnfortunately, its generally been shown keeping doctor-patient confidentially is more important. Specifically, if the victim gets afraid of the doctors interfering then the victim will refuse all medical help. Mai thinking she can handle everything is very true to life. You have to build trust, even if it leaves them in danger temporarily. The mental poison of abuse is terrifying. Every helping hand is a trap. Everglaive seems to know what she is doing. It's a fine line, but with Selene it's probably the right choice.
Aguy768
2023-02-09 21:44:44 +0000 UTCRereading this the medical part still bugs me. I get why they don't want children or untrained adults to try and deal with the issues in another magicals personal life, but ignoring it seems like a terrible idea. How are they meant to solve issues in their life if they are trying to keep their powers a secret? I don't know what the solution should be, but giving children superpowers and then ignoring obvious signs of abuse will only ever backfire.
Ignorant Fool
2023-02-09 15:06:30 +0000 UTCLove your work!
Paerofar
2023-02-09 06:13:18 +0000 UTCQuick grammar check .... There’s obviously precedence >> precedents.
Paerofar
2023-02-09 06:13:05 +0000 UTCSpeaking of classes she'd need to awaken her signature magic and unlock her special grimoire before choosing a class. Thought to be honest I'm hoping she'd get to do it before going in an usurpation zone again, so that she get a feel for them at the same time
Virnor
2023-02-08 01:55:16 +0000 UTCWould be nice to see her in skintight bodyarmor. If you are going for a mobile ranged build then you don’t want the dress to come in the way of aiming when doing athletic stuff. Please stop teasing us about the classes. I’ve been really excited about them since they were first mentioned and it’s been soooooooo many chapters. So please give us some preview on the classes. Could be we had som fun ideas.
Christian Thomsen
2023-02-07 05:42:33 +0000 UTCActually a fusion of goth Lolita and modern tactical might be fun and iconic
Virnor
2023-02-03 09:44:44 +0000 UTCI do like a modern tactical look mix but up to the author in the end.
Bat
2023-02-03 01:48:45 +0000 UTCOH shit yeah, that looks perfect!
shitpostbot
2023-01-31 21:54:46 +0000 UTC@mikasane I stumbled on this image in a discord server, something tells me you'll enjoy it: https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/676620277718974474/1068495632811176036/104852232_p0_master1200.png PS: any ETA on your discord server so we can share that kind of thing more easily?
Virnor
2023-01-31 18:56:38 +0000 UTCI'm fairly certain the exact details were never really expounded on although I'm sure someone more dedicated to the answer will deliver a quote if I'm wrong
CEGungnir
2023-01-31 11:15:34 +0000 UTCAnyone can reming me, what was the video about? I think she mentioned it in first chapters although Iam not sure.
dugo5522
2023-01-31 00:02:50 +0000 UTCTHIS! I watch enough cringe af anime as it is. Her misplaced shame and self-loathing are frustrating and infuriating enough as it is (Give me character development RIGHT MEOW!). That way lies EVIL!
Jesse B.
2023-01-30 08:28:02 +0000 UTC"My pulse was beating in my ears now, the thorns of anxiety shooting through my like lightning as I forced myself to remain as still as possible." Shooting through her what? "Gotta’ do something when nothing is going on in this control room." There shouldn't be an apostrophe after "Gotta." "[Testing Stat integration… Complete.]" It feels like for style consistency it should be *Integration. "[Reformating Reflection Room… Co̴̜̓mpl̷͍̈́ete.]" *Reformatting. I assume the weird text effects on "Complete" are intentional though? Also lmfaoooo at Selene putting her in a bunnygirl outfit to tease her. I really want Mai to get some hugs though. Our poor girl deserves them. Granted, first she'll have to become a person who could receive hugs without it just making her anxiety worse, but the fact that that's a necessary stage in the journey doesn't change the destination!
Fayhem
2023-01-30 07:28:09 +0000 UTCThis is part of what drags me into the story. Im really rooting for our Gunslinging Lunar Bunny Girl and want to see her get the Justice, Love, and most importantly Care she deserves. I need to see her work out these problems even if it takes a dozen years of our time or more to get there.
SingularCurve
2023-01-30 03:53:28 +0000 UTCI'm actually betting that her father makes her pay for all her own stuff, hence the fixation with debt. I'm sure she wants to get out because he blames her for being "an expense." My parents were like that to a degree. They made me work from the time I was 16 and took all my money, even birthday and Christmas gifts from other family.
Alice Blake
2023-01-30 03:47:54 +0000 UTCA lot of people seem to suspect abuse, but honestly, given the context clue we have, I think its probably something closer to something like a Psychotic Ex-Magical Solider Father, who's been training her mercilessly since she her youth, despite her having no talent for it, and regardless of what it does to her (something like a "pain makes a stronger solider" mentality). If her Mother was also one (maybe how they met?) it could explain why she was Manaborn. It would also explain why she's terrified of him learning she's a Magical Girl now; If she's been trained since she was young to be Magical Solider, becoming a Magical Girl would probably cause him to crank the training to 11.
Osamaru Ta
2023-01-30 02:56:19 +0000 UTCI mean it is, though I can’t remember the techniques name off the top of my head, but in this case it is rather more to get her mind off heavy topics through a benign shock. At least that is my take on it.
Logan Vingris
2023-01-30 02:10:40 +0000 UTCShe might still go bunny themed and is in fact likely to imo, if only because Selene will push for it an Mai is unlikely to suggest alternative branding. Bunny girl outfit in this case is specifically something like this https://www.amazon.com.au/ROLECOS-Japanese-Leather-Swimsuit-Swimwear/dp/B07RM4YG7P. It's a... thing. Which is also why she got so flustered/embarrassed about it.
Biomass
2023-01-30 01:11:48 +0000 UTCWorld building and character interaction continue to be excellent. I'm equally riveted through the talking chapters as I am through the shooting chapters. Mai is a tangled ball of angst and social anxiety and needs a hug. Selene chucking her in a bunny girl outfit is great. Probably actually a pretty good ice breaker and another way to very slowly chip away at her numerous issues. Good to see we will have a chance to see Mai strut her stuff in combat with the transformation boost before she gets back to "the real world tm". Hopefully she can come out of it with a little more confidence.
Biomass
2023-01-30 01:05:07 +0000 UTCYeah I'm in the same boat of wanting things to get solved. The issue is we still aren't 100% on what's happening obviously we have confirmation of physical abuse and it's probably her dad. But that's about all we really know. I really want her to have a few incursion events and then basically tell everyone at her home to get fucked. But like with what we have seen in her own headspace it's going to take some big shake ups for her to get going.
Biomass
2023-01-30 00:08:33 +0000 UTCSelene is a woman of culture indeed. As are the zenith.
Blana
2023-01-30 00:05:32 +0000 UTCSelene got lost in translation. Poor, Mai. I wonder if those cosmetic ear changes might have a minor effect on hearing. Some control/protection over her hearing might convince her to take those bunny ears. Here's to hoping for cyborg-goth-punk, fallen angel bunny. :)
Aguy768
2023-01-30 00:01:12 +0000 UTCHonestly I get her not wanting people to explode into her life and muck everything up but I also 100000% want her home life to get fixed Pronto. It's a weird place emotionally and this story causing it says good things about your writing.
Dopplerdee
2023-01-29 23:31:07 +0000 UTCIt honestly took me a second. I went full on mind blank when reading about the bunny girl costume. For some reason I expected a full on (absolutely terrifying) Easter bunny costume. It only lasted an instant, but the image will haunt me (again) for years.
Vega
2023-01-29 21:55:36 +0000 UTCidk, I like the pacing and the interactions between all the characters
shitpostbot
2023-01-29 20:36:41 +0000 UTCGreat work as always Wordsmith! I look forward to Moar!
Aaron Greene
2023-01-29 20:32:42 +0000 UTCAwesome chapters Mikasane! I have one real suggestion. I realize you have a lot of world building to do, but picking up the story's pace might help you out a bit. Right now the pace is being bogged down in the minutae of picking everything she needs to pick and dealing with keeping her circumstances private and such...I realize the emotional reactions of the mc and current main supporting characters are important...but a fair amount of readers will begin to lose interest if you delve too deep for too long. Other than that, this is a great story and I enjoy reading it whenever I can!
Kaywye
2023-01-29 20:25:53 +0000 UTCI think you have it backwards. I believe the choice of theme/ aesthetic informs what her signature and grimoire will be not the other way around.
Kaywye
2023-01-29 20:19:30 +0000 UTCOh thank god, she's not gonna go bunny girl. It might very well be my biggest hangup/fear about the story right now lol. Just doesn't appeal to me. Still hoping for the fallen angel theme, especially considering her achievements names and Gild's recommendation. Also, despite the analysis of 'cute' being best suited to her appearance, I think a combo of pretty/elegant and cool fits best with her personality.
Tjark
2023-01-29 20:11:48 +0000 UTC@mikasane is there a reason for not awakening Mai's signature and grimoire despite the fact they could help inform her choices for the design and aesthetic of her costume, as well as some practical/functional choices? It feels a bit rushed to not even mention any outside of the error prompt.
Virnor
2023-01-29 20:08:45 +0000 UTCWhat was the video about again?
Niki
2023-01-29 20:07:43 +0000 UTCThis is a manipulation tactic. Open with something obviously ridiculous (while in the privacy of the void) so that the next suggestion will look more reasonable in contrast.
Sindri
2023-01-29 19:09:03 +0000 UTCI believe there was a chapter with an error pov where we saw what was in the video.
Rat
2023-01-29 18:28:04 +0000 UTCSo fricking Pog! Thank you!
Ishanator
2023-01-29 18:22:59 +0000 UTCI do not have enough idea of her interests for much ideas regarding costumes. One thing is I do not think she would mind looking like a soldier. though maybe having her wear a cute outfit would give her some confidence boost. I think the eye patch idea should be just ditched. She wears it now to keep the eye a secret. There is hardly any point of doing that as a magical girl who uses it for combat. It really would just seem anime at that point and probably give people the wrong impression.
phantom
2023-01-29 18:14:48 +0000 UTCwhy stop... bunny ears can be cute. and i imagine no choice will be painful or uncomfortable (unless she is a pain addict and wants it to be.) also, as an added benefit once she turns 18, bunny ears will allow her a shift to sexy with minimal modifications ;p
TargetDrone
2023-01-29 17:58:58 +0000 UTCI bet the author never tells us what was in that goddamn video just to fuck with us. And I love this story but the pace... it's just so painfully glacial.
AgentFransis
2023-01-29 17:48:43 +0000 UTCThe Murderbun as cometh
Virnor
2023-01-29 17:39:25 +0000 UTCI absolutely love how my heart bleeds when she says the saddest shit nonchalantly like "They respected my personal space like normal human beings and didn't pry? What the hell? I don't get it." or in previous chapters where she didn't understand why the officers where concerned about her after she lost her arm and still blamed herself for not saving their colleagues. Or when all the guardians fired the flares in the air but she didn't want to believe it was because of her / her fucked up circumstances because "why should they care?". This is the kinda shit where I'm sitting in front of my pc and go: "Oh no, you poor baby girl" while my heart absolutely breaks. Anyway, great chapters as always, can't wait for more! Honestly, I get super giddy whenever I see a new chapter out!
shitpostbot
2023-01-29 17:00:34 +0000 UTC“I don’t care how cute it looks!” I hissed. “ I am not going to wear a bunny girl outfit!” I support this notion. Just stop. the rabbit ears are incredibly uncomfortable.
phantom
2023-01-29 16:23:05 +0000 UTCI agree with everything wholeheartedly! But I would build upon her home/potential abuse situation. Her reluctance to speak about it shows a clear understanding of how not normal this situation is. It is incredibly frustrating to me how selene acted in this particular chapter. She knows her Guardian is suffering yet actively stands in the way of her own interests?
Monus
2023-01-29 16:19:38 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapters !
Alicia
2023-01-29 16:14:03 +0000 UTCNo, no, no. You’ve completely missed her bunny motif. It’s Magical Girl Hare Trigger!
Juniper
2023-01-29 16:03:34 +0000 UTCThanks for all the chapters, hmm what will she choose though I do see bunny ears in future since I doubt selene will let that go though I doubt she will be as sneaky about it as cats companion was
Kyle Polkinghorne
2023-01-29 16:02:24 +0000 UTCOh geez, with three chapters i was hoping we could get to the class picking, but now there’s even more stuff to go through before she gets home! I can’t wait for the next chapter, picking an outfit is always fun. I cant wait to see what’s been decided as her outfit!!
EMthe4th
2023-01-29 15:59:22 +0000 UTCMagical Girl Hair Trigger is slowly becoming a reality.
Nick Olson
2023-01-29 15:58:39 +0000 UTCWow so many chapters! Thanks! Glad your bettter.
Leo Yankovic
2023-01-29 15:43:03 +0000 UTCUnleash the bun!
Windo
2023-01-29 15:33:56 +0000 UTCFrom what I remember the video started with Mai looking in a trashcan, with the girls taking the video implying that she was looking for food.
Christian Winther
2023-01-29 15:23:56 +0000 UTCThanks 😊 ur book makes me smile! In my sea of anxiety depression and everything else that doesn't happen as much as I would like! Keep it up its really good!
Headrush
2023-01-29 15:22:31 +0000 UTCIt is frustrating how Mai keeps refusing to see that her home situation is not normal or ok, but given how long she's been living through it, it is not surprising. I liked Selene's humor with her first outfit suggestion as a way to get Mai's mind off of that conversation. The triple chapter upload was also incredibly generous, thank you for all the food!
Thelon
2023-01-29 15:22:11 +0000 UTC1 you have made my month with THREE CHAPTERS AT ONCE 2 to anyone reading this, please go take a look at ravensdagger’s books. They are very addictive and a blast of good vibes :)
Squa 81
2023-01-29 15:19:06 +0000 UTCAlso now that I think about it why is Mai so scared of people seeing a video of Katie and her goons beating her up, like oh the blackmail on me that shows you as being a perpetrator of a crime. idk maybe I'm just being stupid.
Waffleman
2023-01-29 15:18:52 +0000 UTCwow thank you very much,
IceDemon
2023-01-29 15:06:50 +0000 UTCOh yeah, triple upload that's the good stuff.
Waffleman
2023-01-29 15:05:46 +0000 UTCMy god it's a triple release thanks for the chapter
Jacob
2023-01-29 15:05:42 +0000 UTC
