Chapter 27 - Rewards
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Comments
The part where she privately worries about Error Mavhina getting in trouble and is confused about GC, then vocalizes her thoughts in the next paragraph almost word for word is a bit awkward. I know she lives in her head (I do this too) but it might work better to just say shes confused and worried, then we find out what shes worried about when she asks about it.
Kevin Deane
2023-01-08 12:24:34 +0000 UTCCould you add an empty line between the last point reward and the "new point total". They feel like two different prompts.
Raphael Chantigny
2023-01-04 07:17:58 +0000 UTC
