The Last Crusader: Release 1 (Chapters 1-2)
Added 2017-07-15 12:04:36 +0000 UTCMajor Edit: I'm making the first two chapters public. Everything else will be donator only. That's the best I'll do, since this is meant to be a special bonus for my long-term patrons.
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This is not the final version of the first two chapters. It's very likely once the book is finished, I will have to rewrite the entire thing ten times over. I don't know! That being said, it is a solid start, and you'll get 3,500 words of an all-new story!
Feel free to speculate about anything in the comments below! If you haven't read the story yet, I'd skip the comments if I were you, so you don't get spoiled.
Read it... HERE!
The Last Crusader: Chapters 1-2
Comments
Golden rule in life: For every person that complains, at least ten others don't and just walk away. Always good to see if the issues can be resolved, when possible!
Klokinator the Wordsmithing Writer
2017-07-16 03:24:51 +0000 UTCWell, not scene to scene, if that is what you devide by that long line as in Cryopod. More like some paragraph to some following paragraph. Well, maybe it was just the day and circumstances playing with my attention :) seems like I'm the only one anyways
Sebastian Fast
2017-07-15 22:45:19 +0000 UTCHmm. What are you referring to by transitions? Just scene to scene in general? Anything specific?
Klokinator the Wordsmithing Writer
2017-07-15 22:41:05 +0000 UTCAwesome :) At some point I really felt into the story. Tho sometimes some transitions kind of kicked be out again. They weren't as smooth :/ Maybe I just read too fast.
Sebastian Fast
2017-07-15 15:33:36 +0000 UTC
